Sound of Alarm

. The snap of a twig Doe and fawn quickly vanish My careless footstep

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Cecil Hickman

Date: 5/20/2009 10:18:00 PM

a beautiful worded piece with such visionary descriptions I have been there in your shoes, they are truly wonderous beauty as well your haiku,,Thank you again for visiting my words,,,Blessings..Cecil

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 5/20/2009 4:42:00 PM

Dear Carrie ,If YOUR walking in the woods YOU should teach YOUR Eyes to see the"PATH to the Prize" YOU Did Not; Hence "My careless footstep" EXCELLENT! So Vivid , so Real LOVE ALWAYS...HG Soup Mail Call about 6th Inning...HG

L'Nass Shango

Date: 5/20/2009 12:33:00 PM

This is what haiku epitomizes ... a perfect description and a surprising relationship at the end ... congratulation on a feat of genius, my friend.

Sandra Hudson

Date: 5/19/2009 3:32:00 PM

This has happened to me many times. I can relate to this one.:)-AA

Izzy Gumbo

Date: 5/19/2009 8:02:00 AM

oh wow Carrie! I could hear the silence and then the snap of that twig. Brilliant writing as always my friend. :)

Sharon Winter

Date: 5/19/2009 7:55:00 AM

An excellent haiku. Wish I was there to see, that is before you snapped the twig! Teasing you! Love, Shar

Christopher Higgins

Date: 5/19/2009 3:57:00 AM

The woods and the beauty of it all...this is well done my friend....super work.

Brian Strand

Date: 5/19/2009 12:00:00 AM

I can hear the sound of this Carrie.Rgds Brian

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 5/18/2009 8:06:00 PM

Dear Carrie, Beautiful Haiku my favorite Form Superb ALWAYS...HG Carrie, This truely is a Fun Game It's not very often the FAMILY plays Together But when WE DO ALWAYS...HG