Song of a Night Bird

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August- 20- 2025

Marathon Mile. 9. Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Mark Toney

~ Placed Sixth~


 

When sleep deserted me,
      I crawled out of my bed unseen
to delve into the crevices of the dark
with the curiosity of an explorer
    and the near comatose of a somnambulist.
I walked up and down the steep slopes of the night,
    like a night watchman, without a lantern in hand.

When my legs grew weary
I sat on a rock covered with moss and lichen.

Looking into the dark pockets of the night,
  I thought of human mind, a deep gorge,
      with many an uninhabitable corner
             where serpent desires lie coiled
 scorpions crawl with toxic pincers
     and predators roam to prey upon helpless victims

The mystery of the night absorbed me
    her muffled sounds, her dark beauty
her elusive charm, like thick night fog,
 percolated deep into my consciousness
     and I floundered in a fathomless sea,
        swirling in her eddies and currents.
      

      It whisked me away to lands far…far!
      
But on being washed ashore,
   I was in a creative delirium

 I am now in 'No Man’s Land'
      where everything is in a coma of stillness
 where no light glimmers, no door ajar and no one in sight!	

Here the poet in me breaks open,
      the somnambulistic comatose
and down way flow my thoughts in indelible ink.

Like a night bird roosting on a tree,  
     I sing of my heart aches, of my yearnings and longings.

In the barely audible whispers of the night,
     my song reverberates in the eyeless abyss down,
         and the dark desolate valleys below.

People say, ghosts walk the earth at night.
        Oh!  I am not scared!
   I am not eager for the dawn to break,
        nor want to put my pen down!

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Date: 8/25/2025 12:41:00 PM
Dearest Valsa, soulful glorious poet, like you, "I am not eager for the dawn to break", for I want the night and the song of the night bird; the poet writing the song of her heartaches, yearnings and longings to go on and on. No, don't ever put your golden poetic pen down, my dear friend. It spills enrapturing ink upon the poetic page and into my heart thirsty for your expressive artistry. Exquisite poetry in every way! Congratulations for your success in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/23/2025 4:24:00 AM
Congratulations on this one. Way to go. Creative in so many ways. Thanks for sharing these thoughts with us. Sara K
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Date: 8/22/2025 5:24:00 PM
brilliant images and inspiration, loved it
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Date: 8/22/2025 4:25:00 PM
I just knew this would do well. Congratulations!
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Date: 8/22/2025 3:45:00 PM
Fantastic poetry!! Very impressed indeed, Valsa - incredible write! :) john
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Date: 8/22/2025 1:18:00 PM
Valsa, what an interesting mind journey you took us on, with deep thoughts ‘flowing in indelible ink, like a night bird singing of heart aches, yearnings and longings.’ Sometimes as a poet in the middle of the night I become a night owl too :) Congratulations on your top 10 win on Mile 9 of my 2025 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 10 has already started.
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Date: 8/22/2025 7:17:00 PM
Dear Mark,I feel awed by your comment and the great placement you gave for my poem. Thanks a lot. Also thank you for the wonderful conduct of this contest. It's a pleasure taking part in this
Date: 8/21/2025 3:51:00 PM
You are so excellent with imagery. Write on!
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Date: 8/21/2025 1:37:00 PM
Beautifully crafted poem with wonderful imagery and striking diction, dear Valsa. Your lovely verse brings solace and warmth, woven with rich metaphors that dance like leaves in the autumn breeze. The last part of your poem is just outstanding. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/21/2025 11:38:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, your poem took me on a journey "into the crevices of the dark" and sleeplessness. What wonderful imagery and striking poetic phrases. I love the ending where you are inspired to pick up your pen and sing like a night bird in words! You are at your poetic best in this poem. Sending you blessings of restful, healing sleep, dear friend! May you always embrace your pen!
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Date: 8/21/2025 1:56:00 AM
A lovely poem, dear Valsa. I've written about ghosts but don't really believe in them. As for lack of sleep, I know what it means. Summer deprives me of rest. Blessings.
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Date: 8/20/2025 11:19:00 PM
I love the way you can embrace whatever situation you find yourself in, Valsa. Your poetry gives hope of a life living in the present. You didn't want the night to end or have to put down your pen. I relate to that feeling, my sweet and dear friend. Hugs, Bill
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Date: 8/20/2025 5:05:00 PM
your poem was a magnificent blend of haunting images with subtle hope for one's muse. Wasn't expecting the last couple of lines. Truly a winner for the contest! You're an amazing poet! Sara
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Date: 8/20/2025 11:25:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Song of a Night Bird" write. "Good Luck" Have a fun day writing away..........
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Date: 8/20/2025 11:10:00 AM
This poem beautifully captures how the sleepless mind becomes both a haunted landscape and a womb of creativity. It thrives in the quiet hour when ordinary constraints fall away, and pure thought—or art—emerges. The progression from crawling through darkness to owning that space, pen in hand, is profoundly evocative and resonant. It’s both a homage to the midnight muse and a brave confrontation of inner shadows.
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Date: 8/20/2025 10:07:00 AM
"down way flow my thoughts in indelible ink. Like a night bird roosting on a tree, I sing of my heart aches, of my yearnings and longings." -- Wow! Beautiful. "Oh! I am not scared! I am not eager for the dawn to break, nor want to put my pen down!" -- Brave poet, love it!
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Date: 8/20/2025 8:06:00 AM
You show great imagination in your words. Dreams can be the high point of the day when they cause us to take an exciting journey.
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