Something Most Bizarre

Something most bizarre one dismal day
occurred when I looked out on fields of gray.
I saw the figure of a tall dark man
approach my house from not too far away.
He noticed me and then toward me he ran.

My heart was in my throat, for I could see
sheer terror in his face. I thought to flee,
for no conception did I have of why
the stranger staggered straightaway toward me,
and then he gave a loud ungodly cry!

I thought him piteous as he drew near
and nearer still! Another wave of fear
engulfed me. I saw his hair and shirt
were bloodstained! Oh, what had brought him here?
It dawned on me – he had to have been hurt.

No danger was I in! I saw instead
a man in peril bleeding from the head.
The blood was oozing scarlet down his face.
The smoke from my chimney must have led
him to the threshold of my tiny place.

I made my mind up quickly, and I let
him in. Then he collapsed! I had to get
him help, but since the hospital was far
away, I drove him. He was badly hurt, yet
he would survive. That man had crashed his car!

Oct. 5, 2017
For Laura Loo's Rhyme Time with 5 Contest
Five words used: dismal, conception, piteous, threshold, and bloodstained.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 4/15/2018 5:04:00 PM
Superbly told with plenty of suspense. Beautifully done, Andrea.
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Date: 10/12/2017 7:10:00 AM
Andrea, you are a true story teller, wonderful and congratulations!
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Date: 10/11/2017 2:24:00 PM
Such a great story in your well-written rhyme that flows so well, Andrea. Congratulations on your well-deserved win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/10/2017 11:12:00 PM
Oh, I enjoyed this story very much ... original take on the theme and word usage - you could write a book from this. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 10/10/2017 5:43:00 PM
You wove a fabulous descriptive story sing the words Andrea congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/10/2017 8:56:00 AM
Congrats on your win Andrea
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Date: 10/10/2017 6:10:00 AM
great poem sweet Andrea, great rhythm and rhyme. thank you and congrats :)
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Date: 10/6/2017 11:59:00 PM
You grabbed me and didn't let go until the end Andrea, very well done.
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Date: 10/6/2017 8:40:00 PM
A gripping and suspenseful write Andrea. Fantastic use of the 5 words. Well written and well told. Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 10/6/2017 9:56:00 AM
You were a hero that day Andrea..Nicely penned..
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Date: 10/6/2017 9:31:00 AM
Awesome pen! Liquid excellence flows from thy pen Andrea! my best to you for the contest :) xomo!
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Date: 10/6/2017 9:09:00 AM
You took me on an incredible journey with this write my friend! I was enthralled by your tremendous poem this morning, you have shown me how you can write a story through poetry! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/5/2017 9:52:00 PM
Is this a true story? You have a very good heart if it is! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/6/2017 8:49:00 PM
oh no, Matt, if something like this happened, I would have no clue how to help the person, other than rush them to the hospital like the girl in this poem did. (I probably wouldn't even have the proper bandages at the ready)
Date: 10/5/2017 9:49:00 PM
Suspense till the end.. good story teller you are.. best for a win, Andrea!r
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Date: 10/5/2017 9:44:00 PM
What a story! Great poem Andrea I was on my seat till the end!
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Date: 10/5/2017 8:34:00 PM
Man oh man, you had me so wrapped up in what was happening. Great work of suspense. How in the world do you edit. I spelled something wrong and it keeps saying I edited and yet it doesn't correct it when I come back to look at it.
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Jennifer Walker
Date: 10/5/2017 8:46:00 PM
My son came in and told me about the update thing. I need my glasses on to see it.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/5/2017 8:42:00 PM
jenny are you clicking "update" or whatever at the bottom after you edit? It won't "take" unless you do.
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