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Soft Whispers

there are no stars in these beclouded skies
to linger on the edge of darkened nights
no reflections to shine within your eyes
nor moonbeams to gather within my sights

as january's wind encircles me
i lose myself in the depths of my dreams
where breathless sighs fall within whispered pleas
and your fingers brush against my soul's seams

i feel your lips tenderly touching mine
in blushed little strokes of passionate sighs
that send soft quivers up and down my spine
as you pull me closer hands against thighs

soft whispers of your breath fall upon me
as darkened night erupts in ecstasy

Written January 7, 2020
Contest judged 02/07/2020

Na-rerun contest
Sponsored by John Hamilton

Copyright © Sandra Adams | Year Posted 2020

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Aditi Mishra Date: 6/17/2020 1:47:00 AM You weave simple, soothing emotions into such brilliant poetry Sandra. "breathless sighs fall within whispered pleas"...gorgeous! Congratulations on your win :) Login to Reply

JCB Brul Date: 6/16/2020 2:27:00 AM "soft whispers of your breath fall upon me as darkened night erupts in ecstasy" These last two lines are captivating! Congrats on your win! Login to Reply

John Watt Date: 6/16/2020 1:57:00 AM Sandra, I just love how your couplet ties the three themes together; the whispers and breath of stanza 2, the darkness of the first stanza, and the ecstasy of stanza 3. Passionate and dreamy, crafted with your unique flair and phrasing. A fave, so happy to see it recognized today. Hugs ~ John Login to Reply

Michelle Faulkner Date: 6/15/2020 4:58:00 PM This is so seductive and sensual, especially the lines 'my soul's seams' and 'blushed little strokes' - that attention to detail makes it all the more vivid, congratulations on your placement! Login to Reply

Jeanne Mcgee Date: 6/15/2020 2:20:00 PM Ouuu, this is passionate and tender at the same time. So happy you got a first...well done Sandra Login to Reply

John Hamilton Date: 6/15/2020 9:30:00 AM You knew how much I valued this sonnet Sandy, so here's your win, where it belongs! Login to Reply

John Hamilton Date: 1/8/2020 3:56:00 PM I'm with Craig and T.J this is a great sonnet Sandy, so beautiful, I think Emile will enjoy it, I would enter it if I were you. (I've entered his contests a few times and not placed) but I'm sure this will! Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/8/2020 6:24:00 PM wow, thank you so much John....i value your opinion as well... after all you have hosted some sonnet contests and i wrote a beauty for one of them... i entered it... fingers crossed... hugs

Craig Cornish Date: 1/8/2020 7:37:00 AM Your "experiments" at rhyme are much better than the comfortably seasoned efforts of those who write it all the time and mixed within the scheme and syllable restrictions - even better, not to mention your expression of passion. I don't think you should hesitate entering it in Emile's contest because it fits all his requirements perfectly - the rest is subjective to him if he can survive his own heavy breathing LOL - I barely have 8-) Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/8/2020 9:45:00 AM Wow Thank you Craig... with comments like yours and Teppo's (both who i feel are masters at this form) it gives me some confidence in my ability to write them... thanks for the smile and pat on the back.... hugs :)

Lindsay Laurie Date: 1/7/2020 8:58:00 PM Very good Sandra. Great flow and rhyme. You should be proud of this sonnet - Lindsay Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/8/2020 9:41:00 AM Thank you so much Lindsay....i am learning to write them slowly but surely :) hugs

Running Wolves Date: 1/7/2020 4:26:00 PM Perfection Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/7/2020 7:32:00 PM Thank you :)

Chris Green Date: 1/7/2020 11:30:00 AM Who needs the stars or the moon when you have love right in front of you. I would think that even if they were there, shining brightly in the evening sky, you might not even notice them when your lips meet with those you adore. Beautifully done Sandy. You'll be known as a rhyming poet in no time. : ) Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/7/2020 12:12:00 PM lol...i won't go that far, this rhyme thing is not easy for me, i wanted to write one for Emile's contest but don't feel this one worthy....but thank you so much for all the support you give me and your kind words... hugs :)

Vijay Pandit Date: 1/7/2020 9:54:00 AM This is so rhythmic and romantic my friend--I liked the way this sonnet flows and links the love verses together. Excellent write, as always, Sandy. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/7/2020 9:56:00 AM Thank you Vijay...i penned half of it this weekend but my muse was too uncooperative so i let it rest and saved it... opened it up today to read it and the rest came... hope you have a good day... hugs :)

Ann Foster Date: 1/7/2020 9:41:00 AM You are such a beautiful spirit, and a heart romantic... every beat in unison to the perfect possibility. Cutting edge work you have here, time to publish... :) Hugs. Ann Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/7/2020 9:43:00 AM wow... thank you so much my sweet friend for your kind comment...i am working on these rhyme forms here and there... your comment brought me a big smile this morning... hugs :)