'sober Mind'

They fade away Like distant memories Do not cling to their toxic remarks It’s meant to pull you down Hidden behind Their smiles and falsified hugs Of reassurance Watch their hands Watch your back Do a double take For the marks made by their knives You might not feel it now It might be just a scratch or two Until it finds a foothold And they grind them deep into your flesh It is so easy to be sucked in The need to belong so strong Until the dark days come And you are left alone Wondering what happened To the joy riders They got off the wagon Once they saw the self destruction sign Up ahead They did it with a smile It is the only thing they know Running away is their expert play Lift your head up Cry if you have to But don’t give up You still have a chance This time do it with a sober mind Do it for you
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Date: 8/29/2013 10:42:00 AM
Outstanding, compels you to reflect. Left alone wondering what happened to the joy riders, you can feel the isolation. Congratulations.
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Date: 7/28/2013 6:06:00 PM
Thanks Wilma. ...needed to read this as well as your other poems.....love your work.
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Date: 7/27/2013 6:36:00 AM
Excellent write from your beautiful soul... luv Michael
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Date: 7/26/2013 11:12:00 PM
Wilma it is so good to see you writing and posting your thoughtful poetry like this one recently. I'm glad to see you here a lot more.
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Date: 7/25/2013 5:08:00 PM
Lift your head/cry if you have to/but don.t give up-Yhis is a great advice especially when one is stabbed in the back by those he thought were trustworthy.-excellent mon ami : )
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Date: 7/25/2013 9:32:00 AM
Wilma I really felt your poem thank you so much you are a very good poet.
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Date: 7/22/2013 12:19:00 PM
I get it from a couple points of view the paranoia, the self importance over others, and the potentially dangerous things in the world. well done.
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Date: 7/22/2013 7:12:00 AM
Wilma congrats on your fabulous win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 7/21/2013 8:36:00 PM
As I said below, Wilma...this is profound! Congratulations on a wonderful, deserving win! Love and hugs, Annalise
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Date: 7/21/2013 7:33:00 PM
Wilma, CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WINNING POEM... :-) nice entry, for Anne's any poem contest. always & forever ** LINDA
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Date: 7/21/2013 5:39:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win. You show great talent and wisdom in your writing.... Great work.... Jake
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Date: 7/21/2013 2:14:00 PM
RE: 'Sober Mind'...Dear Ms. Neels - Once again we offer our sincere congratulations on your placement in Ms. Currin's contest. We found this poem very sobering, and as soon as WE sober up, we intend to review it again.We stayed out rather late last night celebrating and offering toasts to you and your fine poetry...We will get back to you as soon as our wives un-shackle us and allow us to leave home. Sincerely, Tim Ryerson: Chairman, The Wilma Neels Poetry Appreciation Society
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Date: 7/21/2013 1:19:00 PM
Hiya, homegirl. You do me proud with this empowering write. Did you notice the three South African names in a row? Whoopety-whoop-whoop!! Well done with your awesome win, Wilma. Licia :-)
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Date: 7/21/2013 1:00:00 PM
Really good advice poetically stated. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 7/21/2013 12:01:00 PM
Congrats. Nicely said
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Date: 7/19/2013 9:57:00 PM
Profound write, Wilma...we live in a world of deception, and we all carry the scars. However, we will never give up! Hoping all is well. Have a beautiful weekend!
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Date: 7/19/2013 8:16:00 AM
wow, nette here is right. A very empowering poem, dear! One of your best. I love this one.
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Date: 7/15/2013 9:51:00 AM
what an empowering write, wilms... you take me in the center of a daunting scene .. beautifully done!..:) huggs
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Date: 7/9/2013 3:36:00 PM
had to read this gem twice - such insight here, my friend. love it. lfde x (afraid I can't remember the words those letters stand for but I know it means love from)
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Date: 7/9/2013 9:15:00 AM
Yes. A hugely, resounding yes. Do not rent your mind out to the clutter. Wonderful! I knew you were awesome for a reason! ;)
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Date: 7/9/2013 5:17:00 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Wisdom is shown here. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
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Date: 7/7/2013 6:18:00 PM
Dear Ms Neels: After reading your poem, we are happy to announce that in our opinion, this is your best work so far...While the whole poem is full of wisdom and insight and beautifully written, we were particularly impressed with the short, succinct 1st and 11th verses...With your permission, we would like to review more of your work... Please send all future correspondence to: timryerson@poetrysoup.com or simply leave a comment. Thank you...
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Date: 7/7/2013 7:09:00 PM
PS: Please send us a third person bio describing how you manage to look so beautiful all the time, when we can go out for dinner, what time to pick you up, etc.
Date: 7/7/2013 5:32:00 PM
This is a wonderful and ingenious write my friend! My heart is glad that I don't find myself following this crowd that you so eloquently mentioned, that path to addiction is not present within me, save the addiction to writing poetry, that I'm guilty of! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 7/7/2013 11:15:00 AM
Great lines portray the path to addiction. Excellent :)
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