Smitten Old Man

SMITTEN OLD MAN

High school year book, 47
I’m not a gad looking guy –
Short hair, sport coat, tie

This remembered as I gaze across the room
She’s sitting at a table near the wall,
Lap top open, ear phones, late and all

She wears a sleeveless blouse
On a cookie now I’m nibbling,
But, my God, her arm! What’s that scribbling?

From distance the appendage looks solid black
Is she weird, some sort of voodoo?
“No, you idiot!” I laugh. “Just a tattoo.”

Through her tangled blond hair a streak of purple,
No cosmetics improve the sallow face,
Clothes, by 40s standards, a national disgrace

I’m smitten – chair seat a bed of nails,
Arthritis rebels, bony hands clutch -
This modern generation, it’s just too much!

Dave Austin
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014


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Date: 11/29/2015 9:37:00 AM
Its all madness I say..' Madness and fleeting awareness, there I've said it and 'twill be the case of someone will have read it..' At some point.. some time place margin or space..'
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Date: 7/27/2015 11:29:00 PM
Great poem and I was a 1972 high school graduate that saw plenty of outrageous dress back in the day. Myself, Tats look cool on guy, on a girl I am not a fan of seeing tats. Enjoyed this poem. A7
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Date: 10/10/2014 11:56:00 AM
Love today's youth.
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Daver Austin
Date: 10/17/2014 10:05:00 AM
Wish I had some of it. Love, daver
Date: 10/9/2014 10:06:00 AM
Cute one, Dave..Changes come don't they and some are good and some so bad..I enjoyed reading this one today..Sara
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Date: 10/8/2014 5:01:00 PM
Being a part of the "younger" generation, I understand why they want to look, the way they look. It is just a desire for freedom, to be themselves and be unique. A rebellious attitude has always been attractive.... A very good write, Daver. Well expressed!
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Date: 10/8/2014 3:06:00 PM
Some of the things I see young people doing or wearing these days leave me in awe. Even in her 50s, my brother-in-law's sister has a crimson streak through her dark brown hair. (Blonde or white streak might have looked nice.) Don't get me started on the clothes or tattoos. I think the pierced noses, tongues and eyebrows are the weirdest though. Hey, another time, another place. Love, Carolyn
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