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Smile - Andaree Ii Contest

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She dreams of the happiest day of her life; make vows and you become man and wife. With such elegance and style she’ll glide down the aisle with a wide smile. Blushing bride, her blue eyes beguile, prays that their love is worthwhile, filled with fun, contentment and no strife. She dreams of the happiest day of her life. 10~06~15 Contest:- Andaree II Sponsor Andrea Dietrich Checked with how many Syllables

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Skat A

Date: 10/21/2015 9:29:00 PM

Jan, Wonderful win.................. SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 10/22/2015 2:02:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 10/19/2015 4:38:00 PM

you did well here, jan, with what is rather a tricky form - i found it a challenge, anyway! congrats on your win in andrea's contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2015 4:41:00 PM

Thanks Charlotte I was delighted to place - I agree it is a very challenging form:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/18/2015 4:45:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your fine win, Jan. Reading it again made me smile! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2015 4:46:00 PM

I was delighted to place Sandra:-)It is a challenging form and I really enjoyed writing the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/17/2015 8:59:00 PM

Very sweet, Jan. I had no idea this was yours and I am glad to see you made my top ten!! congrats. Perfectly rhymed!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2015 9:03:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I love the challenge of this form - this one took me less time to write than the first one I wrote for your original contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 10/8/2015 7:00:00 PM

Well first off, I wish I had a figure like the one your poem portrays....with that said...This is Seriously KQQL

Jan Allison
Date: 10/8/2015 7:50:00 PM

Thanks Judy - oh to have a figure like that but its only on Barbie dolls I guess lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/7/2015 10:56:00 PM

Well-done, Jan--lovely! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 10/8/2015 2:01:00 AM

Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 10/7/2015 12:46:00 PM

Your work just keeps on getting better. This is truly beautiful. Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2015 12:49:00 PM

Oh Thank you so much Emile I am amazed how much I have learned during my short time writing:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 10/7/2015 8:39:00 AM

Beautifully written. Jan, happy yes but I also noticed a little concern written in there. I believe my wife was happy at our wedding but the stress I saw on her face made me wonder if it was worth it for her.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2015 8:45:00 AM

We organised arranged and paid for our wedding -did what WE wanted and had a great time with a quiet ceremony and a big party later - so often it gets out of hand and it can be very stressful:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2015 8:43:00 AM

Yes there is concern in the poem - people dream married life will be 'perfect' but that is reserved for fairy tales!:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/7/2015 5:29:00 AM

What a marvel of a Rhyme and so aesthetically done! Delightful and a 7, dear Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2015 5:33:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios it is quite a challenging form I just hope Andrea likes her Andaree:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Jennings

Date: 10/7/2015 2:06:00 AM

There is an innocence to this touching Andaree that is very pretty. The simplest of wishes and hopes delivered in a challenging form. I really enjoyed it ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2015 5:01:00 AM

Thanks so much Caycay I do appreciate your support:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 10/6/2015 9:59:00 PM

Love this happy, optimistic poem, Jan :) You mastered this form very well! Good luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 10:02:00 PM

Thanks Laura:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 10/6/2015 8:34:00 PM

One of my favorites Jan. Nice contest entry.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 8:38:00 PM

Thanks so much Michael:-) I do hope Andrea likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/6/2015 6:48:00 PM

Such a lovely Andaree, Jan! So full of the happy bride's dreams, and it flows wonderfully. Best in the contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 6:49:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I do hope Andrea likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/6/2015 6:40:00 PM

Jan, this is beautiful. I see why she's smiling. Great job! Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis 7

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 6:47:00 PM

Thanks Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka

Date: 10/6/2015 5:35:00 PM

I've now read several of the Andarees and find them delightful. Andrea has come up with this form that seems to work well on many topics. Love your wedding smile. Good luck in the contest my friend. Janet

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 5:49:00 PM

It is a challenging form Janet - the first one I wrote for the original contest took me 3 hours this one considerably less time:-) I just hope Andrea likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Eric Boddie

Date: 10/6/2015 4:06:00 PM

this is every lady's dream....a Beautiful day with the perfect scene....neither hair nor dress can have a single flaw....weddings are presided over by only bridal law....;)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 4:07:00 PM

What a charming comment Eric:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/6/2015 3:20:00 PM

Well you know I like this one better than the other. I believe in love, smiles. and happily ever afters. This will do well Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 3:31:00 PM

Thanks Tim I do find this quite a challenge - the first one I wrote for the first contest took me three hours ... thankfully this one considerably less time - i do hope Andrea likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Anita Sharma

Date: 10/6/2015 1:06:00 PM

wow this is beautiful write.liked

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 1:07:00 PM

Thanks so much Anita i found it quite a challenging form:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 10/6/2015 12:14:00 PM

Jan, this is so sweet and charming, a smiling 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, Halloween memories ....

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 12:19:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment I do appreciate your support:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/6/2015 12:10:00 PM

enticing write so well expressed, jan... i can imagine you being the bride!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 12:18:00 PM

We got married in a registry office - just close friends and family then we had a meal at a local hotel and later on a party for over 300 people:-) I got married in an apricot shade two piece - I'm not one for fuss frills or flounces lol:-) hugs jan xx

Balveen Cheema

Date: 10/6/2015 11:57:00 AM

That's real shweet Jan! Love

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 12:01:00 PM

Aww thanks Balveen:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/6/2015 10:23:00 AM

Just love your message here Jan, and the sentiment..

Jan Allison
Date: 10/6/2015 11:52:00 AM

Thanks Harry I hope I have got the form right for Andrea - I found it quite a challenge!:-) hugs jan xx