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Slowly Dimming

Her eyes grate on tainted hall Where love's ember pranced inside A vignette slowly dimming... While night's coal glistens 7/7/7/5 Syl Count 5 Lines Or Less Contest...Black-Eyed Susan

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Mark Peterson

Date: 6/11/2014 3:04:00 PM

Glorious imagery and content in such a few words. You shame the common pen.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/5/2014 6:11:00 AM

- Skillfully and powerfully, in four lines! - Good luck in the contest! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/5/2014 1:25:00 AM

Love the contrast between those last two lines, nette. good luck in Susan's contest. I love her contests because the winners are usually short poems to read!

Norma Arana

Date: 4/3/2014 2:24:00 PM

How excruciatingly beautiful. Your poem ignites mixed emotions of yearning and acceptance of fading memories.Congratulations on your many wins,Nette.>>>Norma

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/3/2014 10:57:00 AM

I feel the longing so powerfully in this write, Nette. I hope love's embers will always be prancing for you, my dear! :)

Russell Sivey

Date: 4/3/2014 6:29:00 AM

I missed you yesterday my friend, it's nice to see you back! And back with such a tremendous and invigorating write! I truly enjoyed reading this enlightening poem here this morning! What a fabulous piece, Great Work!!