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Slow Burning Lies

You are a mild hesitation, generating bold question. In your bed, under cover, you become a distracted lover. In your heart of emotion, say -- am I your slightest notion? A simple walk with you endangers my penciled, perfect view. With fists, I attempt holding all that uncertainty flies before looking in your eyes of such vague, scattered tries. Am I your any place … does my touch leave any trace? Gray skies, sad sighs and sensual thrills vary heat of will. My desire to see truth yearn, stretches to see you turn. Gentle lavender-laced, fancy dreams hang on low rafters. They offer ease of capture - now winds may lay them blown cause your cupid air dancers twirl aloof in passion’s cologne. Do gray skies, sad sighs and sensual thrills tarry now to kill? In your heart of emotion, do you stir honesty’s notion? A simple walk with you endangers my penciled, perfect view. Am I your any place …. do you see precious on my face? You are a mild hesitation, generating bold question … and, baby, I’m a slooow burn, baby, I'm … just a slooow burn. Ripples shadow-sway across waves, casting gray over days. Vague gauze designs play tag inside multi-mazed blinds. Feeling comes and goes, slides and grows, I’m tossed .......... you twist, but ------- ..… mostly I’m a slooow burn. ... CayCay Jennings September 9, 2015

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Date: 4/2/2025 5:59:00 AM
Cay Cay I love your theme in this Lyric write. It is a wonderful write that tells a story. I really love your passion in writing this awesome lyric. The only suggestion I might add is to keep the theme but use if you want more rhyming words at the end of the verses. Most songs have a rhyming ending in their verses or in certain verses. If you listen lets say Country music a great percentage of the songs tell a story like yours but have rhyming endings. I do feel this could be a wonderful song.
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Date: 4/2/2025 6:16:00 AM
I think Cay Cay if you made this rhyme it would be a nice song. When I say rhyme I mean at the end, the end word of each verse rhyming you do a wonderful verse rhyming in the middle of the verses now if you can finish the ending. Just my opinion. I hope I wasn't offensive to you this is an exceptional write and it was never meant to be a song and you wrote it perfectly the way you did. I'd like to see you write a song style format like I wrote I bet it would be awesome. Maria Williams is a better person to ask Cay Cay she and her husband Ron are awesome in music and lyrics. I am a nobody compare to them. Reach out to Maria tell her I recommended her and Ron to you for some ideas. She is better at it then me. Looking forward to seeing your results. Hugs...
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Date: 4/2/2025 6:08:00 AM
You didn't write it originally like a song so it had a great theme and I think people could relate it to a song because you repeated verses. I think a great song tells a story like this poem of yours and has rhyme in the verses and lyrics. I know you can write songs you are very talented. When I write the lyrics to a song I tell a story, I keep my verses short, a syllable count most of the time I do or keep it close to count, I try to create emotion in my words, and I make it rhyme but try to keep it simple with great emotion and meaning. I would love you to write a great song. I am having Maria write a song to the Lonesome Whippoorwill.
Date: 2/28/2017 4:04:00 PM
You are so wonderful at expressing profound feelings, contrasting light and dark and as clear to me as a picture in 3D. I see why this was a winner. Congratulations CayCay! 7 ; )
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Date: 2/27/2017 1:23:00 AM
Back with my congrats, Cay Cay...loved reading this again. (I can hear the crying guitars!) Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 2/24/2017 8:44:00 AM
A lyrical, wonderful piece Cay Cay, congratulations...
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Date: 2/23/2017 6:16:00 PM
Compelling poem dear poet..congratulations on your win
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Date: 2/23/2017 8:29:00 AM
Caycay. a big congrats, dear, on your well deserved win. YOu are on a roll this week!!! I can't believe I made the list too!!
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/23/2017 9:25:00 AM
Yes, sweetie - for us it was one embraceable list! I am always thrilled to couple with you on a list, let's try to keep that up! Thanks for coming by, I don't know where you got the time - it's amazing. Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/23/2017 8:24:00 AM
This is pure poetry, at least for me, the internal rhyme gets me every time. I agree wholeheartedly this is a song, I can hear the rhythm in my head. I agree I think this is one of your best. a definite 7 and a fave!
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/23/2017 9:20:00 AM
John, thank you so much for sponsoring a contest that my muse and I thoroughly enjoyed writing for. I wish I had the musical ability to achieve a song as translated from inside my head. BUT according to my 4th grade music teacher (and others) who called my Mom to remove me from his class, I am absolutely 'tone lost'. We must laugh! All the best and poetry hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/23/2017 7:25:00 AM
I like how you use the internal rhyme. Beautiful imagery. Congrats on your win!
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/23/2017 9:26:00 AM
Thank you, Agnes. So kind of you to visit with congrats. Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/23/2017 7:00:00 AM
Love the internal rhymes CayCay...Splendid write..Congrats on your win
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Date: 2/23/2017 9:28:00 AM
Thank you, Joseph, I am darned excited about placing. Every time I see your name, I think of our names combined ... CayCay May. I've told you that before, but it's still amusing to me. So glad you shared your enjoyment of my write and I wish you all the best ... CayCay
Date: 2/21/2017 12:04:00 PM
I have now read this three times and each time I hear the same melody as I read. Your words have a certain cadence to them that composes music in my mind. I least it seems that way to me. I enjoyed the rhyme variance in this and especially loved the repeating lines which come to me as a chorus. This one in particular really felt good to me, " A simple walk with you endangers my penciled, perfect view." This was fantastic CayCay.
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/21/2017 12:16:00 PM
My intuition told me true - that this would be liked by you. Look for a message or two, I have a chatty feel coming on! Thank you so much for this sincere and uplifting feedback! It means much. All the best ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2017 8:03:00 PM
wow, Caycay, your imagery here is VERY good. So much emotion too. Did you say you were too late for the other contest. I hope JOhn will really like this one. I have one for him as well. Maybe will post it tonight. Let me find the plieades now!!and SEVEN for this one.
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2017 9:06:00 PM
Thank you for such sweet comments! Yes, I missed the 'song' contest, but it does fit the Lies Beneath the Lies theme so it is all good. Checked, but you hadn't posted your write for John yet. Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2017 1:26:00 PM
a languid song that makes me ache... beautiful , cay... this is a lyric as well, wow..huggs
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Date: 2/20/2017 2:11:00 PM
Hey, Sweetie. My thought was that lyric meant emotional poems, but I've been right about possibly being wrong before. Don't really write songs because I got no ear, not here, but did hear it that way in my head when I read it back. So good to see you and read your meaningful comments! Love ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2017 11:38:00 AM
Interesting contest entry..I am sure John will like it..Thanks for the visit to my page..I appreciate the time spent there..Sara
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Date: 2/20/2017 10:15:00 AM
All I can think of is that...slooow burn! I'm already sweating and all I did was read:) Rock on, CayCay!!!
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2017 11:14:00 AM
Love your comments! I wonder what the words sound like in your head, and if that same sound would translate should you sing them? People at church tell me I do make a joyous noise, just not the same as everyone else's noise or at quite the same time. Glad you liked it. Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2017 8:27:00 AM
This should be poem of the day! This is my kind of poetry Cay Cay, I'm truly impressed. I would say this is one of your best. A 7 and a favourite.
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2017 11:06:00 AM
High praise from you, indeed, Richard! I think my heart beat quickened, and I like it. Thank you so much for those comments. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2017 2:27:00 AM
I love this well-written, heartbreaker of a song, Cay Cay. Most people think country music for lyrics like this, but I hear a rocker like Pat Benatar! Lots of luck in the contest...hugs, Rhonda
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2017 2:34:00 AM
Oh, yes - in this poem fantasy the song is definitely rock with crying guitars like Dave Mason's album, "It's Like You Never Left." (He began with Traffic) Thank you for commenting, Rhonda - it means a lot to me. Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/19/2017 7:58:00 PM
Good luck in the contest CayCay. Are you going to make an audio of this?
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Date: 2/19/2017 8:10:00 PM
Oh, Charlie - you asked the perfect question. My-other-half, Tim, and I were just talking about this as a song, I thought of it as such when I wrote it. The thing is, the thing you don't know, is I cannot sing. My son's first sentence EVER was, "Mama, don't sing." I hope you enjoyed it. All the best ... CayCay

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