Sky

The sky is weeping Tears of relief and despair. I absorb them all.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/3/2012 6:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your super win in Charles' "Haiku" contest Ira. I am sorry this is a very late comment. Love, Carol

Ira Dawson
Date: 12/3/2012 8:11:00 PM

Thanks so much for taking the time to stop by and leave a comment!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/25/2012 8:31:00 AM

outstanding metaphor. I LOVE it. Congrats on a well deserved win in the contest.

Ira Dawson
Date: 11/25/2012 11:54:00 AM

Thank you so much! Honestly.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/24/2012 6:20:00 PM

Congrats on your win..Sara

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 11/24/2012 8:50:00 AM

Deep write Ira - relief and despair in equal measure seem to be what befalls mankind. Congrats on your win!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 11/24/2012 5:40:00 AM

Big congratulations on your win Ira, hugs xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/23/2012 6:13:00 PM

Ira, congratulations with your haiku win,,, take care..pd

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/16/2012 6:58:00 AM

I will give you the very easy stuff first [though folks have been arguing over haiku form from day one what I tell you most agree on] #1 no titles [the point is to give as much insight as you can in under 17 syllables, using a title is like cheating] #2 no punctuation except for proper nouns and to indicate the cut/juxtaposition/shift in focus

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 11/16/2012 6:59:00 AM

#3 no poetic vehicles [because these color the write with your judgement of the scene- alliteration in small dose is the only 1 which is ok - much much later we can speak of metaphor] KEEP reminding yourself the write should be 'as simple as porridge' [oatmeal ;)]

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/15/2012 6:03:00 PM

This is lovely and uses personification which makes it more like free verse to haiku-a-fy it, it would look like this [a light rain fell/upon the dry ground--my tears blend] It's a very very hard form to learn! If you want haiku help I will be glad to help or just tell me "Debbie let me BE!" I will! just trying to help..Light & Love