Sky

The sky is weeping
Tears of relief and despair.
I absorb them all.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

December 3, 2012 at 6:09 AM

Congratulations on your super win in Charles' "Haiku" contest Ira. I am sorry this is a very late comment. Love, Carol

Ira Dawson

December 3, 2012 at 8:11 PM

Thanks so much for taking the time to stop by and leave a comment!

Andrea Dietrich

November 25, 2012 at 8:31 AM

outstanding metaphor. I LOVE it. Congrats on a well deserved win in the contest.

Ira Dawson

November 25, 2012 at 11:54 AM

Thank you so much! Honestly.

Sara Kendrick

November 24, 2012 at 6:20 PM

Congrats on your win..Sara

Vicky Tsiluma

November 24, 2012 at 8:50 AM

Deep write Ira - relief and despair in equal measure seem to be what befalls mankind. Congrats on your win!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

November 24, 2012 at 5:40 AM

Big congratulations on your win Ira, hugs xx

Poet Destroyer A

November 23, 2012 at 6:13 PM

Ira, congratulations with your haiku win,,, take care..pd

Debbie Guzzi

November 16, 2012 at 6:58 AM

I will give you the very easy stuff first [though folks have been arguing over haiku form from day one what I tell you most agree on] #1 no titles [the point is to give as much insight as you can in under 17 syllables, using a title is like cheating] #2 no punctuation except for proper nouns and to indicate the cut/juxtaposition/shift in focus

Debbie Guzzi

November 16, 2012 at 6:59 AM

#3 no poetic vehicles [because these color the write with your judgement of the scene- alliteration in small dose is the only 1 which is ok - much much later we can speak of metaphor] KEEP reminding yourself the write should be 'as simple as porridge' [oatmeal ;)]

Debbie Guzzi

November 15, 2012 at 6:03 PM

This is lovely and uses personification which makes it more like free verse to haiku-a-fy it, it would look like this [a light rain fell/upon the dry ground--my tears blend] It's a very very hard form to learn! If you want haiku help I will be glad to help or just tell me "Debbie let me BE!" I will! just trying to help..Light & Love

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