Barbara Gorelick Poet Narrative

Skipping Rocks

He set them dancing across the water,
A special talent he seemed to have.

I looked on with pride,
And not a little envy.

His skipped seven times,
Mine went “thunk”.

Were old now and slowing down,
But I’ll bet that brother of mine..

Could still skip seven times
And mine would still go “thunk”.


For Nathan's contest

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Carolyn Devonshire October 17, 2009 at 4:51 PM A big congrats to you, dear friend. Excellent write! Love your sense of humor. Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi August 5, 2009 at 10:39 AM LOL a sweet memory!!! I can't do it either. GREAT win...ps "we're"

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen August 4, 2009 at 10:49 PM Congratulations, for your placement in Nathan's sibling rivalry poetry contest. Very nice. My brother could skip rocks, too. It must be a boy thing... before women's lib., of course. LOL Love, DAS-J.

Sue Mason August 4, 2009 at 3:16 PM Very cute write here, Barbara. Congratulations on your win in Nathan's contest!

Brian Strand August 4, 2009 at 8:42 AM Congrats on your success in Nathan's contest. BG rgds Brian

Joyce Johnson August 4, 2009 at 7:43 AM I love this Barbara. Sibling rivalry with pride in your sibling. congratulations on your win.

Carrie Richards August 4, 2009 at 6:31 AM Congratulations, Barbara!! 2nd place...hooray for you!! (My brother could always win at those things too)!

Carol Sunshine Brown August 4, 2009 at 3:11 AM Congratulations for your win in Nathan's contest Barbara . Love, Carol

Nathan Leccese August 4, 2009 at 2:21 AM Congratulations on 2nd place in my contest! Nate.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire July 9, 2009 at 2:06 PM My Dearest Barbara My Nubbies, Definitely a Winner and quite a Tribute to YOUR Brother I think the highest skips I ever had was 5 I give the crown to Your Brother Superb Write LOVE ALWAYS...HG

Carol Sunshine Brown July 9, 2009 at 6:54 AM Barbara, your brother may skip them rocks better but....he can't write this awesome poetry as you do. Fair trade off to me. Love, Carol

Carrie Richards July 8, 2009 at 5:24 PM The same would happen between my brother 's and mine....time hasn't changed a thing!! :)

Christopher Higgins July 8, 2009 at 1:39 PM Lovely..this actually made me smile..love the way you set this piece up..good work.

James Fraser July 8, 2009 at 11:57 AM Oh wow, skipping rocks, many a time i was told off when i was younger, oooo it brings me back, a delight to read Barbara>>James

Daver Austin July 8, 2009 at 11:10 AM Right on! A great mental image. I never could skip a bloody rock! Love, daver