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I write upon mountains from whence I view the sea soothed by the rhythmic motion of the tide my muse goes into overdrive Soon my pretty notebook is bursting with simple scribbles and rambling lines as I watch a heron stalking its prey I’ve a picnic to eat as I go on my way and I’ll sketch vivid purple columbines, then re read the scrawled notes I took in my notebook archive Initial thoughts are edited and modified guess I’m striving for perfection you see Nature’s beauty inspires me to pen poetry and I love strolling in the countryside I'll watch kingfishers as they dive into a babbling brook, cool water glistening as the golden sun shines; outdoors in the fresh air I long to stay 12 10 8 6 12 10 0 12 10 8 6 12 10 0 12 10 8 6 12 10 checked with HMS My Invented Form - I Write Upon Poetry Contest Sponsored by Constance La France 01/30/21

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Unseeking Seeker

Date: 2/15/2021 6:27:00 PM

Jan, so beautifully portrayed, creating mood and environ vividly! Congrats on your win!

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/15/2021 10:02:00 AM

Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your win. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Constance La France

Date: 2/15/2021 9:13:00 AM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest, I Write Upon, using my Invented Form, your poem is excellent _Constance

Jcb Brul

Date: 2/15/2021 5:12:00 AM

Very refreshing and soothing!! Congratulations Jan!

Eve Roper

Date: 2/14/2021 10:55:00 PM

Outdoors the home of nature with so many stories to tell. Wonderful write, Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 2/3/2021 9:27:00 PM

Hello Jan … no better place to be in a quite atmosphere to have your mind find those scribbles that can expand into a poem - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/31/2021 8:08:00 AM

Nature is a great source of inspiration, Jan. I love the way you describe the kingfishers and climbing to a mountain top to see nature's glory. This is beautiful, Jan! A fave for me and I wish you success in Constance's contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Jan Allison
Date: 1/31/2021 12:05:00 PM

Thanks Carolyn there is a great deal of poetic licence as I've never seen kingfishers on the Island or Columbine flowers here but in my imagination i can do anything:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/31/2021 4:03:00 AM

Beautifully done. A sure winner. God bless you sweet Jan... with love and prayers, Gina

Jan Allison
Date: 1/31/2021 12:04:00 PM

thanks Regina:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/30/2021 10:53:00 PM

A wonderful write. This form is a bit difficult but you did well. Best for a win ~~

Jan Allison
Date: 1/31/2021 11:52:00 AM

It too me an age to write Victor especially as i wrote all 3 stanzas with the same rhyme pattern and then realised i got it incorrect, i did enjoy the challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 1/30/2021 9:16:00 PM

I love your poem Jan. Thank you for taking us on a peaceful stroll with you! I needed it :-) I felt so drawn in. The title ' SIMPLE SCRIBBLES AND RAMBLING LINES' caught my attention. As a poet I could relate to that.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/31/2021 11:50:00 AM

Thanks BJ so much of the poem is fiction but it was such fun to write:-) hugs jan xx

Josefina Costales

Date: 1/30/2021 5:32:00 PM

Hi Jan, You have taken “simple scribbles and rambling lines” into a form “invented” but really a poem that by itself is a craft I can call a masterpiece. Great write

Jan Allison
Date: 1/31/2021 11:45:00 AM

thanks for your lovely comment Josefina:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/30/2021 3:49:00 PM

I enjoyed the rythme of this piece. It made it fun to read. Good luck in the contest. Thanks as well for your visit Jan. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2021 3:58:00 PM

Thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/30/2021 2:57:00 PM

WoW!Jan, You’ve penned a great entry for the contest. Each word and stanza is such a delight to read. You made the form look easy; I know first hand it was not. This looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2021 3:58:00 PM

thanks Alexis it really was a challenge!:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh

Date: 1/30/2021 2:16:00 PM

Great writing Jan, this form is really difficult, but you pulled a winner out of sheer tenacity and scribbles, a certain lightness brings it all together, cheers David

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2021 3:56:00 PM

It really has been a challenge especially as i wrote all 3 stanzas in the same rhyme scheme then realised the 2nd stanza was to be reverse order and i had to re hash it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan

Date: 1/30/2021 2:10:00 PM

You've created your lines in perfect form, Jan. Best wishes for a winning spot in Constance's contest. Columbine flowers attract bees and hummingbirds.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2021 3:55:00 PM

It has taken me ages to write Jenna and has lots of poetic licence lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert L. Hinshaw

Date: 1/30/2021 1:23:00 PM

You've got a winner here, Jan. Very enjoyable reading. By the way the Columbine is the State Flower of Colorado. Good luck in the contest - Bob H

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2021 1:28:00 PM

Thanks Bob, there is a lot of poetic licence, I've never seen a columbine and i can't draw, it was such a challenge to write lol:-) hugs jan xx