Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Simple Scribbles and Rambling Lines

I write upon mountains from whence I view the sea
soothed by the rhythmic motion of the tide
my muse goes into overdrive
Soon my pretty notebook
is bursting with simple scribbles and rambling lines
as I watch a heron stalking its prey

I’ve a picnic to eat as I go on my way 
and I’ll sketch vivid purple columbines,
then re read the scrawled notes I took
in my notebook archive
Initial thoughts are edited and modified 
guess I’m striving for perfection you see

Nature’s beauty inspires me to pen poetry
and I love strolling in the countryside
I'll watch kingfishers as they dive
into a babbling brook,
cool water glistening as the golden sun shines;
outdoors in the fresh air I long to stay

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01/30/21

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Unseeking Seeker February 15, 2021 at 6:27 PM Jan, so beautifully portrayed, creating mood and environ vividly! Congrats on your win!

Alexis Y. February 15, 2021 at 10:02 AM Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your win. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Constance La France February 15, 2021 at 9:13 AM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest, I Write Upon, using my Invented Form, your poem is excellent _Constance

JC Brul February 15, 2021 at 5:12 AM Very refreshing and soothing!! Congratulations Jan!

Eve Roper February 14, 2021 at 10:55 PM Outdoors the home of nature with so many stories to tell. Wonderful write, Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Lindsay Laurie February 3, 2021 at 9:27 PM Hello Jan … no better place to be in a quite atmosphere to have your mind find those scribbles that can expand into a poem - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Carolyn Devonshire January 31, 2021 at 8:08 AM Nature is a great source of inspiration, Jan. I love the way you describe the kingfishers and climbing to a mountain top to see nature's glory. This is beautiful, Jan! A fave for me and I wish you success in Constance's contest. Hugs, Carolyn Jan Allison January 31, 2021 at 12:05 PM Thanks Carolyn there is a great deal of poetic licence as I've never seen kingfishers on the Island or Columbine flowers here but in my imagination i can do anything:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh January 31, 2021 at 4:03 AM Beautifully done. A sure winner. God bless you sweet Jan... with love and prayers, Gina Jan Allison January 31, 2021 at 12:04 PM thanks Regina:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar January 30, 2021 at 10:53 PM A wonderful write. This form is a bit difficult but you did well. Best for a win ~~ Jan Allison January 31, 2021 at 11:52 AM It too me an age to write Victor especially as i wrote all 3 stanzas with the same rhyme pattern and then realised i got it incorrect, i did enjoy the challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Bj Legros Kelley January 30, 2021 at 9:16 PM I love your poem Jan. Thank you for taking us on a peaceful stroll with you! I needed it :-) I felt so drawn in. The title ' SIMPLE SCRIBBLES AND RAMBLING LINES' caught my attention. As a poet I could relate to that. Jan Allison January 31, 2021 at 11:50 AM Thanks BJ so much of the poem is fiction but it was such fun to write:-) hugs jan xx

Josefina Costales January 30, 2021 at 5:32 PM Hi Jan, You have taken “simple scribbles and rambling lines” into a form “invented” but really a poem that by itself is a craft I can call a masterpiece. Great write Jan Allison January 31, 2021 at 11:45 AM thanks for your lovely comment Josefina:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux January 30, 2021 at 3:49 PM I enjoyed the rythme of this piece. It made it fun to read. Good luck in the contest. Thanks as well for your visit Jan. Hugs Rick. Jan Allison January 30, 2021 at 3:58 PM Thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. January 30, 2021 at 2:57 PM WoW!Jan, You’ve penned a great entry for the contest. Each word and stanza is such a delight to read. You made the form look easy; I know first hand it was not. This looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest:-) Alexis Jan Allison January 30, 2021 at 3:58 PM thanks Alexis it really was a challenge!:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh January 30, 2021 at 2:16 PM Great writing Jan, this form is really difficult, but you pulled a winner out of sheer tenacity and scribbles, a certain lightness brings it all together, cheers David Jan Allison January 30, 2021 at 3:56 PM It really has been a challenge especially as i wrote all 3 stanzas in the same rhyme scheme then realised the 2nd stanza was to be reverse order and i had to re hash it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan January 30, 2021 at 2:10 PM You've created your lines in perfect form, Jan. Best wishes for a winning spot in Constance's contest. Columbine flowers attract bees and hummingbirds. Jan Allison January 30, 2021 at 3:55 PM It has taken me ages to write Jenna and has lots of poetic licence lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert L. Hinshaw January 30, 2021 at 1:23 PM You've got a winner here, Jan. Very enjoyable reading. By the way the Columbine is the State Flower of Colorado. Good luck in the contest - Bob H Jan Allison January 30, 2021 at 1:28 PM Thanks Bob, there is a lot of poetic licence, I've never seen a columbine and i can't draw, it was such a challenge to write lol:-) hugs jan xx