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Silver Clouded Skies

Dawn's light shimmers through silver clouded skies as the flow of morning's tide starts to rise In a dinghy, he prays for just one wish "Please, God, let me catch a lot of big fish." Patiently, he sits waiting for the tug on line baited with a grubworm or bug. Fishing twine, his small fingers, lightly grips Not a sigh or complaint comes from his lips. His father, lost at sea, fighting a war when he was but a little lad of four. His mornings now spent on the rippling sea to feed his younger siblings, there were three. "I can take care of us," he said out loud. His Mom's loving smile made him very proud She cried while sewing him a winter coat so he would stay warm as he sat afloat. He rises before the first glint of sun Doing a man's work before day is done providing his family food to sup A child, too quickly compelled to grow up. November 9, 2021 Photo #2 Rhyming Me A Poem 2 Contest Sponsored by Eve Roper

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Date: 11/23/2021 10:00:00 AM
A very compelling and heart wrenching story of love and devotion, Jenna. You are right, this child did have to grow up too quickly! Well done. Congratulations and high fives. Blessings. Happy Thanksgiving.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/24/2021 5:06:00 AM
Thanks so very much, Sam. I appreciate your comments.
Date: 11/17/2021 1:37:00 PM
dropping back with many congrats on your win Jenna:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/17/2021 1:54:00 PM
okie dokie...thank you.
Date: 11/15/2021 8:54:00 AM
Jenna, a tale that moves the heart, so beautifully crafted....Congratulations on your win! Blessings, Paulette
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/15/2021 4:31:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Paulette.
Date: 11/14/2021 6:10:00 PM
Congratulations!! What a beautiful poem!! You and I wrote about the same illustration, but I am humbled by your poem, as we both told a similar story. You are very talented! Great job! -Meghan
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/15/2021 12:15:00 AM
What nice comments you’ve written for me, Meghan. You’re a very gracious poet. Thanks ever so much.
Date: 11/14/2021 9:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Jenna. Hugs Eve
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/15/2021 4:30:00 PM
You may use it if you wish.
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Eve Roper
Date: 11/15/2021 10:28:00 AM
yes it did, when I think of a gallery I think of art, and poetry is the same... when one is good, all are good. Everyone has a different style and you cannot be negative because they paint different they just see things different. This is the second contest that I am using the poems for the next book... and if you don't want it in the book let me know...
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/15/2021 12:12:00 AM
I never get disappointed over trivial things. I see you used my words to write a poem, so my comment served to inspire you.
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Eve Roper
Date: 11/14/2021 1:58:00 PM
Sorry you were disappointed
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/14/2021 12:07:00 PM
I’ll say thank you, but it was not really a contest…more of a gallery showing.
Date: 11/9/2021 12:34:00 PM
Hello Jenna, He really grew up quickly. Hugs.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 11/10/2021 6:00:00 AM
Hello Jenna, yes he had no choice. Hugs.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/10/2021 2:35:00 AM
He had little choice. Thank you, Darlene. Hugging you back.
Date: 11/9/2021 10:39:00 AM
Lovely penning Jenna with nice rhyme and flow with good wording too. Take care, Gordon
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/10/2021 2:35:00 AM
I'm grateful for your time of reading and commenting. Thanks, Gordon.
Date: 11/9/2021 9:25:00 AM
Great interpretation of the picture Jenna, it happened to many young men after the war when they had to become the breadwinner when their fathers never came back. Tom
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/9/2021 9:27:00 AM
Kinda robbed them of their childhood, but when necessity calls, we must answer. Thanks for your input, Tom.
Date: 11/9/2021 8:58:00 AM
Matching image for a beautiful poem. Very thorough desciption of the life of a boy that had to be a man. I really enjoyed reading this one and reflecting back to fishing as a boy. Bill
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/9/2021 9:26:00 AM
Hi, Bill. I appreciate your thoughts. Thanks. I haven't been fishing in years, but always enjoyed it.

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