Get Your Premium Membership

Sickened

The gypsy moth’s nest clung like cotton candy, spun sugar; wet and weighty to the pendulous boughs, of white birch and maple a deadly adornment shrouding the forest in an air of decay. A miasma of atmosphere Muffled the morn; dampening the resolve mystifying the mundane multiplying the cloying scent of fallen leafs; solidifying the webs of moth and man unifying the monochrome scene.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 10/16/2009 3:04:00 AM
A delight to read and an interesting subject, this poem is vivid and vast ,it has immense vitality in these moments conveyed to me its reader.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/15/2009 11:29:00 AM
i have to agree with Yoni. . . i come up with a scene similar to what he described. though i dont find it creepy at all lol....and damn those gypsey moths...always stealing the life and fruit from my trees.... wonderful write. xo Raiin
Login to Reply
Date: 10/12/2009 6:20:00 AM
damn...pendulous boughs? adornment? miasma? monochrome? you must have scored high on the verbal SATs. You should really submit this one to a magazine, the descriptions are pretty dark and obscure and draw the reader into something they completely don't understand. The visual I have is of a forest completely covered in cobwebs....most creepy. L&L.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/10/2009 6:58:00 PM
nicely penned
Login to Reply
Date: 10/6/2009 10:45:00 AM
What images you conjure! Awesome, and deep! Your muse is highly inspired! Love, Robin
Login to Reply
Date: 10/6/2009 3:38:00 AM
Thank you Deborah for sharing this write with us today. Love, Carol
Login to Reply
Date: 10/5/2009 8:01:00 PM
@.@ My brain feels floaty =) thanks a lot for the experience!!=)
Login to Reply
Date: 10/5/2009 4:24:00 PM
I can fee this down to my marrow! Wonderful poem! ~Trudy~
Login to Reply
Date: 10/5/2009 2:51:00 PM
every few years we see this clinging on all the bluffside trees, very spooky!... jim
Login to Reply
Date: 10/5/2009 10:53:00 AM
A wonderful write Deborah! vivid my friend.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/5/2009 10:14:00 AM
Great verbs in this poem!! Nicely done. ~KC~
Login to Reply
Date: 10/5/2009 9:58:00 AM
This is an interesting piece. Nicely done. Keep writing. Sara
Login to Reply

Book: Shattered Sighs