Sibling Rivalry: Hitting

Sibling Rivalry: Hitting
     By Dane Smith-Johnsen

Time after time my brother hit me.
Rather than fight, I would quickly flee.
Too many days, I ran into mom.
Sometimes she'd explode just like a bomb!

One day she looked me straight in the eye.
You must fight back. You must at least try.
Don't come crying, if you haven't hit back.
I will spank you.  You'll feel the switch crack.

How I could do it, I did not know.
Smack my brother so courage would grow?
For several days, he left me alone.
Then, it happened, a hit then a moan.

Down on the ground, he was in a flash.
I, on his chest, his face I did bash.
Over and over my fist hit face.
One last slug and to mom I did race.

Right behind me, steadily crying.
To hear him, you'd think he was dying.
She started to scold; I did remind.
You said, “Hit him… “ Or trouble was mine. 

That was the day I stood for myself.
And put some fear to rest on a shelf.
The day I learned, through my brother's moan.
Thanks goes to Mom, my courage had grown.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 12/4/2009 7:20:00 PM
Hi Dane, Congrats on your feature write this week. Love Light Patty
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Date: 12/4/2009 4:30:00 PM
Sad that that courage grows through violence instead of love. Good use of rhyme to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you ongoing success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 12/3/2009 12:57:00 PM
Many congrats on your great piece being featured this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 12/1/2009 12:12:00 PM
A natural storyteller you are Dane Ann and a wonderful writer to be featured this week here at the Soup! Congratulaitons!!
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Date: 12/1/2009 4:19:00 AM
Congratulations on your excellent poem being featured this week Dane Ann. May you have many more. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/30/2009 1:21:00 PM
I remember this one from the sibling contest! Such a fun poem...congratulations on this featured work, Dane Ann! ~Love, Carrie
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Date: 11/30/2009 12:21:00 PM
Many congratulations on your poem being featured Dane Ann >> James
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Date: 11/30/2009 10:02:00 AM
Dane, Congratulations on your feature this week. Sincere, Love, Moses
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Date: 11/30/2009 7:46:00 AM
Congrats on this feature brave one. Love, daver
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Date: 11/30/2009 5:53:00 AM
Excellente write. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. A. W. www.freewebs.com/abcedit
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Date: 11/30/2009 12:02:00 AM
Congrats on your feature poem this week Dane.Rgds Brian
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Date: 8/17/2009 1:47:00 PM
Nicely written sibling rivalry tell. Put some thought into this . Keep Writing. Sara
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Date: 8/6/2009 2:18:00 PM
I love this! Good for you! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 8/5/2009 10:38:00 AM
A black belt worked for me at 48 LOL though the instructor said when asked "What's my best technique?" he said "If you can't break with your mouth, I'll have to think about that?!" He said I intimidated HIM???? LOL GOOD WIN!!!
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Date: 8/4/2009 3:14:00 PM
Very clever here Dane. Congratulations on your win in Nathan's contest and if I haven't said it already, welcome to PoetrySoup!
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Date: 8/4/2009 8:47:00 AM
Congrats on your success in Nathan's contest Dane.rgds Brian
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Date: 8/4/2009 8:42:00 AM
Good for you.."you couda been a contenda" (thats a reference to a boxing movie) smile. congrats on you win..great job. Barbara
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Date: 8/4/2009 6:30:00 AM
Congratulations Dane Ann!!!! I could have learned something from you....I had a big brother too!! Great job!
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Date: 8/4/2009 3:09:00 AM
Congratulations for your win in Nathan's contest Dane Ann . Love, Carol
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Date: 8/4/2009 2:20:00 AM
Congratulations on 1st place in my contest! Nate.
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Date: 7/15/2009 3:38:00 PM
Great, Great, you've gain your gait, I'da surely hate, to inherit brother's fate! Ha, Ha! Godly love Moses
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Date: 7/13/2009 1:26:00 PM
Super write Dane, Bravo girl>>James
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Date: 7/13/2009 4:48:00 AM
Remind me , DAS-J , never to step on your corns !!!! , Wow , you sure can sock-it-to-'em ..... Clever piece and best of luck in the contest . Yeah !!, sisters are doing it for themselves ......
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