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So often when I write a poem And wait for a critique, My husband, who’s my audience, Believes it needs a tweak. That last verse isn’t needed – It’s a summary, you know. Of course I do, but that way It’s tied up, complete with bow. I read the piece again, his way, And often, he’s correct. A shorter version would provide The ending you’d expect. But there are times I disagree And keep the extra verse, Which I think makes it better (Though my husband thinks it’s worse).

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Date: 1/30/2022 12:24:00 AM
My husband is afraid to tell me about typos.
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Date: 1/24/2022 10:06:00 AM
Luckily, you did not marry a "yes" man! Aloha!
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Date: 1/23/2022 1:04:00 PM
Hmmm...well, for me, I always respect my own judgment in these matters. But I'm often wrong. I read everything I write several times and mostly go by what sounds right to me. Amazing the number of times I need to tweak something that I've published on PS several days earlier, generally wondering how I missed this or that!
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