Shoreline

Eyes staring at the fading sun
as my lover sailed away
tears became the shoreline
she hated my tortured mind
I hated the river
of depression

The river waved good bye
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May 16, 2024 at 9:40 AM
Beautiful and heartfelt words,Kelli
M  Avatar
April 22, 2024 at 12:01 PM
Belated POTD Congratulations Arthur for your beautiful poem! Debx
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April 21, 2024 at 10:55 AM
Hello Arthur, Congratulations on your POTD. i felt the heartbreak as I read this poem. It is hard to see your love one leave going somewhere with you. Enjoy your special day. Darlene/
Y. Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 3:28 PM
Wow! Arthur, You described heartbreak very well in a few words. You are such an outstanding writer, can I borrow your pen?Belated congratulations on a well deserved poem of the day-Alexis
Bowring Avatar
April 6, 2024 at 9:35 AM
A belated congratulations Arthur for POTD with this beautifully expressed poem. So poignant. So much said within its few lines. I especially love the line, ‘ tears became the shoreline’ and ‘ the river waved goodbye’. Very profound. Really enjoyed it. Blessings to you.
Vaso Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 11:50 PM
Very kind of you, thanks so much!
Vaso Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 11:49 PM
Very kind of you, thanks so much!
B. Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 10:57 PM
An absolute exquisite write, Arthur! I really enjoyed.. A heart felt write! Congratulations on your POTD! Many blessings to you..
Vaso Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 11:49 PM
Very kind of you thanks!
Roper Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 1:25 PM
Sad poem. Congratulation on POTD.
Vaso Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 11:48 PM
Thanks Eve!
Mcintosh Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:34 PM
Congrats on POTD. God bless you, love, Gina
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:53 PM
Thank you very much Regina!
Baker Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 6:11 PM
Congratulations on your POTD, Arthur! Enjoy your day of recognition, my friend. Bill
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:09 PM
Thank you Bill, very kind of you!
Ray Choudhury Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 2:23 PM
Congratulations on your POTD. A few lines, but quite powerful - heartbreaking and sad, especially the last line!
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:10 PM
Very nice of you to say, thanks!
Fowler Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:28 PM
Love the interplay and contrast Arthur. Very nicely written. Congratulations on POTD! :)
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:11 PM
Thank you Linda, much appreciated.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:06 PM
Great juxtaposition…tears became the shoreline…hated the river of depression.
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:11 PM
:) thank you!
Nicole Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:29 AM
' The river waved good bye. ' There's so many emotions tangled within. This image is tender and heartbreaking, all at the same time. Sometimes, it's just not meant to be. Congratulations Arthur, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. ~ Brandy
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:12 PM
Thank you, very nice comments!
Andresen Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 10:59 AM
- A lot of emotion in a short poem ... sad, but a necessary choice, Arthur - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. :) - hugs
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:12 PM
You are the expert! Love your Haikus!
Goldsmith Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 9:12 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. Powerful... I can feel your words. Have a blessed day writing away.....................
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:13 PM
This is very kind of you Paula, thanks!
Greenhough Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 6:43 AM
Congratulations on POTD.
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:15 PM
thank you very much!
Gentile Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 6:19 AM
Arthur, searingly beautiful is your POTD! Congratulations!
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:15 PM
Thank you mike, much appreciated.
Meadows Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 6:18 AM
Congratulations on your POTD.
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:16 PM
Thank you for your kind words!
May Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 6:05 AM
Congrats on POTD Arthur
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:16 PM
Thanks Joseph!
Jones Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 5:17 AM
Big congrats on potd!
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:16 PM
Thank you Karen!
Doll Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 5:16 AM
Arthur, Congratulations on POTD~ Warren
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:17 PM
and thank you for the kind words!
Rodgers Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 4:44 AM
Hello Arthur, I liked the raw emotions in this one. Your fantastic imagery captures the agony of loss and the relentless struggle with inner demons. It's no wonder it was chosen as the POTD. Keep expressing your truth through your art; it touches hearts and souls. - Blessings, Daniel
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:17 PM
Very kind of you, I quite enjoy your poems as well!
Seeker Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 3:35 AM
A harsh and bitter reality, superbly portrayed, warmest congratulations on POTD
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:18 PM
Thank you very much!
Kitchin Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 3:18 AM
Art, a wonderful emotive poem, congratulations on POTD.
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:18 PM
Thank you so much Tania, wonder if you getting snow like we are in a few day!
Buhagiar Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 2:02 AM
Delightful poem. Congrats on POTD.
Vaso Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 11:20 PM
Thanks Victor!!!
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