Shoreline

Eyes staring at the fading sun as my lover sailed away tears became the shoreline she hated my tortured mind I hated the river of depression The river waved good bye

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Deb M

Date: 4/22/2024 12:01:00 PM

Belated POTD Congratulations Arthur for your beautiful poem! Debx

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/21/2024 10:55:00 AM

Hello Arthur, Congratulations on your POTD. i felt the heartbreak as I read this poem. It is hard to see your love one leave going somewhere with you. Enjoy your special day. Darlene/

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/9/2024 3:28:00 PM

Wow! Arthur, You described heartbreak very well in a few words. You are such an outstanding writer, can I borrow your pen?Belated congratulations on a well deserved poem of the day-Alexis

Christina Bowring

Date: 4/6/2024 9:35:00 AM

A belated congratulations Arthur for POTD with this beautifully expressed poem. So poignant. So much said within its few lines. I especially love the line, ‘ tears became the shoreline’ and ‘ the river waved goodbye’. Very profound. Really enjoyed it. Blessings to you.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/7/2024 11:50:00 PM

Very kind of you, thanks so much!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/7/2024 11:49:00 PM

Very kind of you, thanks so much!

Robertina B.

Date: 4/3/2024 10:57:00 PM

An absolute exquisite write, Arthur! I really enjoyed.. A heart felt write! Congratulations on your POTD! Many blessings to you..

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/7/2024 11:49:00 PM

Very kind of you thanks!

Eve Roper

Date: 4/3/2024 1:25:00 PM

Sad poem. Congratulation on POTD.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/7/2024 11:48:00 PM

Thanks Eve!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 4/2/2024 11:34:00 PM

Congrats on POTD. God bless you, love, Gina

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:53:00 PM

Thank you very much Regina!

Bill Baker

Date: 4/2/2024 6:11:00 PM

Congratulations on your POTD, Arthur! Enjoy your day of recognition, my friend. Bill

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:09:00 PM

Thank you Bill, very kind of you!

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 4/2/2024 2:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your POTD. A few lines, but quite powerful - heartbreaking and sad, especially the last line!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:10:00 PM

Very nice of you to say, thanks!

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 4/2/2024 12:28:00 PM

Love the interplay and contrast Arthur. Very nicely written. Congratulations on POTD! :)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:11:00 PM

Thank you Linda, much appreciated.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/2/2024 12:06:00 PM

Great juxtaposition…tears became the shoreline…hated the river of depression.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:11:00 PM

:) thank you!

Brandy Nicole

Date: 4/2/2024 11:29:00 AM

' The river waved good bye. ' There's so many emotions tangled within. This image is tender and heartbreaking, all at the same time. Sometimes, it's just not meant to be. Congratulations Arthur, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. ~ Brandy

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:12:00 PM

Thank you, very nice comments!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/2/2024 10:59:00 AM

- A lot of emotion in a short poem ... sad, but a necessary choice, Arthur - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. :) - hugs

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:12:00 PM

You are the expert! Love your Haikus!

Lin Lane

Date: 4/2/2024 10:21:00 AM

"Tears became the shoreline..." offers a graphic depiction of sorrowful emotions and the separation of lovers. Congratulations on your poem being chosen as poem of the day, Art.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:13:00 PM

Thanks Lin, you know me, Mr Happy! :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/2/2024 9:12:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD win. Powerful... I can feel your words. Have a blessed day writing away.....................

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:13:00 PM

This is very kind of you Paula, thanks!

Di11y Da11y

Date: 4/2/2024 8:08:00 AM

Congratulations on POTD, very emotive words drenched in loss.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:14:00 PM

Thank you, my expertise is loss :)

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 4/2/2024 6:43:00 AM

Congratulations on POTD.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:15:00 PM

thank you very much!

Mike Gentile

Date: 4/2/2024 6:19:00 AM

Arthur, searingly beautiful is your POTD! Congratulations!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:15:00 PM

Thank you mike, much appreciated.

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 4/2/2024 6:18:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:16:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words!

Joseph May

Date: 4/2/2024 6:05:00 AM

Congrats on POTD Arthur

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:16:00 PM

Thanks Joseph!

Karen Jones

Date: 4/2/2024 5:17:00 AM

Big congrats on potd!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:16:00 PM

Thank you Karen!

Warren Doll

Date: 4/2/2024 5:16:00 AM

Arthur, Congratulations on POTD~ Warren

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:17:00 PM

and thank you for the kind words!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 4/2/2024 4:44:00 AM

Hello Arthur, I liked the raw emotions in this one. Your fantastic imagery captures the agony of loss and the relentless struggle with inner demons. It's no wonder it was chosen as the POTD. Keep expressing your truth through your art; it touches hearts and souls. - Blessings, Daniel

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:17:00 PM

Very kind of you, I quite enjoy your poems as well!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 4/2/2024 3:35:00 AM

A harsh and bitter reality, superbly portrayed, warmest congratulations on POTD

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:18:00 PM

Thank you very much!

Tania Kitchin

Date: 4/2/2024 3:18:00 AM

Art, a wonderful emotive poem, congratulations on POTD.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/2/2024 11:18:00 PM

Thank you so much Tania, wonder if you getting snow like we are in a few day!