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She's a Good Girl - a Lyrical Collaboration With Darren White

She’s a good girl - a lyrical collaboration with Darren White She’s a good girl But she tries too hard And it just don’t get her anywhere Living her life in another’s shadow Wasting her time in the short and narrow She’s unhappy And she cries too much In her heart she’s feeling every pain Take pity for she won’t be here too long Everything’s wrong But can't she see, can't she see That the one to cure herself is she She's alone, all alone And she let's him treat her like she's obsolete For she feels incomplete 'cause She’s a sad girl On this summer night When the moon ain’t shining anymore Wanders alone in her desolation Stares at the sky for some consolation She is lost now And she’s gone too far She can’t see it any other way Sitting alone as her heart is breaking Saying goodbye to the steps she’s taking Come on fly, come on fly She makes her peace, says the suckers of this world goodbye Doesn't do small, for she wants it all Nothing left there for her, sees the world in a blur She's a soul in transfer, Oh! She’s a good girl And she’s found her way She don’t need his loving anymore She can go on with her life now cheerful Leaving behind all the feelings fearful She is smiling And her world is happy Nothing else now standing in her way Knowing that soon she will find affection She can rely on her own direction She can rely on her own direction She’s moving on Darren sent me a verse this morning to see if I wanted to add to it and I told him I had the song “Rich Girl” by Hall and Oates stuck in my head and I couldn’t write to his verse. So he said, then write something based on the melody and let’s work with that. So here it is. Written to the tune of “Rich Girl” by Hall and Oates

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Date: 10/1/2017 1:50:00 PM
Well done you two. Collab. is difficult and you are ACES at it.
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Date: 8/3/2017 12:21:00 PM
Oh Chris She Is A Good Girl is a lovely Lyric poem. I enjoyed reading this poem. Have a nice day my friend. Peace and Love Always.
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Chris Green
Date: 8/3/2017 4:19:00 PM
Thank you so very much Darlene. I am happy you liked this one.
Date: 7/15/2017 11:24:00 AM
Excellent collaboration. Wonderfully written. It has great rhythm. Enjoyed it immensely.
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Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:48:00 AM
Thanks so very much Frank.
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Darren White
Date: 7/15/2017 2:22:00 PM
Heh yeah, and you can sing it along the music of the original. Happy you like this :)
Date: 7/15/2017 7:42:00 AM
I love this song, and its brilliant how you made the words fit so nicely. Chris and Darren you never fail to amaze.I really love this, you've got me humming it now...Maria
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Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:48:00 AM
Thanks so much Maria
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Maria Williams
Date: 7/16/2017 10:52:00 PM
But just for the record, speaking for myself of course, I do think that 'rich girls' have more fun, in a good way of course!! Just saying.....Maria
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Darren White
Date: 7/15/2017 2:22:00 PM
Thanks Maria. We had loads of fun writing this today. Started unexpectedly but ended lovely don't you think? :)
Date: 7/15/2017 5:54:00 AM
A beautiful collaboration about a strong lady, Chris and Darren:)
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Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:47:00 AM
Thank you Jo. (Since it is Monday) :)
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Darren White
Date: 7/15/2017 2:20:00 PM
Since it's weekend, I'll do the replies today ;) Thank you so much Jo! Happy you like it :)
Date: 7/14/2017 6:48:00 PM
A wonderful collaboration you two! I love the 80's music. :) This fits perfectly to the song that is now going to keep playing in my head <3
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Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:47:00 AM
Thank you Sara.
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Darren White
Date: 7/15/2017 2:20:00 PM
Happy you like it my friend, we do too!
Date: 7/14/2017 5:28:00 PM
Cool, cool collab, fellas. Wonderful poem lyric match to a classic song, Chris and Darren. You two make beautiful poetry together. Love always.
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Chris Green
Date: 7/14/2017 5:32:00 PM
Thanks so much Freddie. I was hoping you'd find this one. Does it have you singing along?
Date: 7/14/2017 12:34:00 PM
Great match to the music guys, Terrific collaboration. Move over Hall & Oates, here comes Green & White,,,
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Chris Green
Date: 7/14/2017 1:27:00 PM
Thanks so very much Charlie.
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Darren White
Date: 7/14/2017 12:42:00 PM
Hehe, yeah, this was also a Green and White production :) Glad you like it. I can't stop singing.
Date: 7/14/2017 12:17:00 PM
You two did very well with this ! I agree with Alexis...great message! You two are a dynamic team together writing. :) However, I must say, this is indeed an easy song to get stuck in the mind! :)
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Darren White
Date: 7/14/2017 12:58:00 PM
Yeah, we told a good story here with a great ending, and I love that :)
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Chris Green
Date: 7/14/2017 12:21:00 PM
Thanks so much Heidi. I am glad you liked it. We had a good time writing this piece this morning. I appreciate your kindness always my friend.
Date: 7/14/2017 12:16:00 PM
Hey don't despair it's lunchtime, you'll have 5or6 comments after lunch. This is great, you beat me to the punch, I was thinking of writing a new lyric for Sara smile, I saw Darryl Hall on some program the other night man he looks good, he's got to be pushing 65 or 70
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Darren White
Date: 7/14/2017 12:59:00 PM
I honestly only know their music, but now I need to find that show and watch.
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Chris Green
Date: 7/14/2017 12:20:00 PM
Thanks John, that's how it happened with me, I was watching "Live at Daryl's House" last night and he and Wyclef Jean did "Rich Girl" and when I woke this morning I was still singing it. He does look good, that dude is very cool.
Date: 7/14/2017 12:10:00 PM
Wow! Chris, you and Darren penned some great lyrics! It complemented" Rich Girl" by Hall and Oates very well. But I must say that the message within you guy's song rocks! Great job to you both:-)Alexis PS, Now I can't get the tune out of my head. But that's okay because I love the original song.
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Darren White
Date: 7/14/2017 12:58:00 PM
I have the same Alexis, can't get that music out of my head now, but it's okay.
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Chris Green
Date: 7/14/2017 12:14:00 PM
Thanks so much Alexis. We had fun writing this one.
Date: 7/14/2017 11:56:00 AM
I enjoyed this a lot, the problem now is that I can't get that tune out of my head :)
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Chris Green
Date: 7/14/2017 12:14:00 PM
That you did my friend, that you did. : )
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Darren White
Date: 7/14/2017 12:10:00 PM
Lol, but I made the 20 views in time \o/
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Chris Green
Date: 7/14/2017 12:08:00 PM
Well, it seems it is not going to be a problem for anyone else...20 views...1 comment from the co-writer. Oh well, that's soup for you.

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