Lin Lane Poet Quintain (English)

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She Wept In Languished Moan

She wept as they buried her one true love.
Each day thereafter she brought him a rose,
the flower she knew he was fondest of.
Her grief unbearable, beyond repose.
What pain and suffering his death bestows.

Nothing prevented her daily visit.
She didn't want him to feel all alone.
When beside him her face was exquisite.
When weary she would sigh and then lay prone,
weeping for her love in soft languished moan.

There, in restless sleep, flames of love still burned
'til the twilight hour, when she felt a chill
as the gentle warmth of sunlight adjourned.
She heard a dove singing a mourning trill,
begetting heartache's tears to flow and spill.




November 3, 2022 ~ 2022 Marathon Mile 19 Contest
Sponsored by Mark Toney

Originally written on 23rd of July 2016
 Three Stanzas of English Quintain, 10 syllables per line 
  with a rhyme scheme of a-b-a-b-b

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Sam Kauffman November 14, 2022 at 2:13 PM Lin, my heart weeps at the story of love that lives on even in grief and separation! So many emotive images that blend into this mourning song. Congratulations! Blessings. Lin Lane November 26, 2022 at 7:36 AM Thanks so much for your kindhearted words, Sam. It's a mourning song that I no longer sing...gratefully.

Susan Ashley November 12, 2022 at 5:49 PM Such beautiful heartache and heartbreak spills from your gifted pen. Your lost love poems are exquisite in the grand scale of their mournful eloquence. Congratulations, Lin, for your continuing success in Mark's contest. A wonderful win! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Lin Lane November 26, 2022 at 7:34 AM Susan, I apologize for the late response. Life has been hectic. I am always deeply grateful for your kind words about my poetry. Thank you so very much.

Mark Toney November 11, 2022 at 8:52 AM "She wept as they buried her one true love..." Lin, the older I get, the more this resonates with me. Your quintain reveals a profound sadness and is superbly written. Your title is brilliant. Congratulations on your win on Mile 19 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 20 has already started. Lin Lane November 26, 2022 at 7:33 AM Thank you so much for this honor, Mark. Forgive my late reply.

Janice Canerdy November 11, 2022 at 7:31 AM Lin, CONGRATS on your win with this beautifully sad expression of unending grief. Janice Lin Lane November 26, 2022 at 7:33 AM Thanks so much, Janice.

Valerie Staton January 7, 2019 at 1:35 PM So sad. Enjoyed reading your work. Lin Lane November 3, 2022 at 8:52 AM With thanks for your kind comments, Valerie.

Kim Rodrigues August 2, 2017 at 4:12 PM Congrats on your sad quintain! Superb Lin Lane August 2, 2017 at 4:16 PM Thanks a lot, Kim, and congratulations back to you.

Agnes Krampe August 2, 2017 at 9:55 AM Your lovely poem has the feel of an old ballad, Lin - congrats on your placement. Lin Lane August 2, 2017 at 4:16 PM Thank you, Agnes, and well done on your placement.

Janice Canerdy August 2, 2017 at 12:46 AM Lin, CONGRATS on your win. Thanks for entering your great poem in my contest! Janice Lin Lane August 2, 2017 at 4:16 PM Thanks, Janice.

Arnold Nelson May 14, 2017 at 12:22 PM Love the poem. Lin Lane May 14, 2017 at 6:39 PM Thanks. I see you're finding your way around the site.

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 24, 2016 at 7:51 PM Very sad, yet romantic, Lin. An inseparable love. It was a pleasure to read, yet painful to process. The death of a true love is nearly unbearable to endure. Great job on this poem. Much love to you. RW Lin Lane October 24, 2016 at 10:40 PM Thank you, kind sir. Your comments are always most welcomed.

Jan Allison August 18, 2016 at 11:57 AM Congrats on reaching number one in best new poems list Lin:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane August 19, 2016 at 6:41 AM But for a brief moment, the mountain crest is reached. Thanks, Jan.

John Hamilton August 17, 2016 at 9:33 PM Back to congratulate you two times, first the contest win, and second, number 1 best new poem in top 100. Who says you're not appreciated! Hope you come back to stay, many things have changed for the better! Well done! again! Lin Lane August 18, 2016 at 5:22 AM Thank you, John, on both counts. I've noticed one change that made me smile, but I'm not back to post regularly. I still read many poems written by my friends. In answer to your Q on the comment I left on your Angelou poem...my convention was in June and yes, it was awesome, despite rerouting to leave since Baton Rouge was being picketed by Black Panthers and others.

Andrea Dietrich August 7, 2016 at 5:22 PM Don't know if you are seeing this, but just stopped by to say hello, my friend. Lin Lane August 8, 2016 at 9:55 PM I'm reading you. Thanks, Andrea ;-)

Jesse Day August 5, 2016 at 10:03 AM Sad and heartfelt - loss is painful. Nicely written. Jesse Lin Lane August 8, 2016 at 9:54 PM Thank you, Jesse.

Kathleen Kroll July 29, 2016 at 11:14 AM Congrats! Your poem flows so well yet tells a story as it goes. Lin Lane August 8, 2016 at 9:54 PM Thank you, Kathleen.

Connie Marcum Wong July 28, 2016 at 3:07 AM Wow Lin. Congratulations on POTD and on your win in the contest! Your poem is profoundly moving. So nice to see you post again. Love, Connie ; ) 7 Lin Lane July 29, 2016 at 5:33 AM I do thank you, Connie, for your kind remarks. It was just a quick trip with lots of fringe benefits.

Laura Leiser July 27, 2016 at 5:32 PM I love the phrase "weeping for her love in soft languished moan". Very creative write, albeit sad, Lin. Great to have you back :) Lin Lane July 29, 2016 at 5:32 AM Thank you, Laura, but I'm not back in the soup. I was just paying a little howdy-do.

Paul Callus July 27, 2016 at 4:18 PM Sad, but truly beautiful, Lin! Pleased and surprised to see that you're back, not only posting, but also claiming 1st place in the contest and being honoured with p.o.t.d.!! Congratulations! ~ Best regards // paul Lin Lane July 29, 2016 at 5:31 AM Thanks so very much, Paul. I saw Constance's contest and just wrote...the rest that took place was a bonus lol. But I'm not writing for soup...that one poem was just a whim and a visit.

Kai Michael Neumann July 27, 2016 at 3:43 AM congratulations. Lin Lane July 29, 2016 at 5:30 AM Thank you.

Joanna Daniel July 27, 2016 at 12:18 AM Oh! Am I glad to see you back with this awesome write that deserves accolade! Congratulations Lin:) Great poem:) Lin Lane July 29, 2016 at 5:29 AM Thanks for your great comments, Jo, but I'm not really back. I'm glad you liked this one so well.

Teddy Kimathi July 26, 2016 at 5:35 AM This piece is really deep.... Congrats Lin, for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!! ;-) Lin Lane July 26, 2016 at 8:47 AM I value your comments, and thank you, Teddy.

Laura Leiser July 26, 2016 at 12:03 AM Congrats on your win, Lon! Glad to see you back in the Soup again:) Lin Lane July 26, 2016 at 8:47 AM Thanks, Laura. I intended to only make a short visit then this happened. ;-)

Charlie Smith July 25, 2016 at 9:37 PM Right on top again, congratulations Ms Lane... Lin Lane July 26, 2016 at 8:46 AM You made me smile, Mr. Smith ;-)

Eve Roper July 25, 2016 at 7:55 PM Lin, congratulations on your win, very good write and so heartbreaking . Thank you so very much for your congratulations on my poem , “Free Its Soul Bound Wild Stallion”. Hugs Eve Lin Lane July 26, 2016 at 8:45 AM Thank you, Eve, and you're welcome on my comments to your winner. Huggin ya back.

Andrea Dietrich July 25, 2016 at 6:21 PM hey, a first place I hear!!! Wow, big congrats, Lin!!! Lin Lane July 26, 2016 at 8:44 AM Thank you, sweet friend. My little visit blossomed into all kinds of adventures. ;-)

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