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She Wept In Languished Moan

She wept as they buried her one true love.
Each day thereafter she brought him a rose,
the flower she knew he was fondest of.
Her grief unbearable, beyond repose.
What pain and suffering his death bestows.

Nothing prevented her daily visit.
She didn't want him to feel all alone.
When beside him her face was exquisite.
When weary she would sigh and then lay prone,
weeping for her love in soft languished moan.

There, in restless sleep, flames of love still burned
'til the twilight hour, when she felt a chill
as the gentle warmth of sunlight adjourned.
She heard a dove singing a mourning trill,
begetting heartache's tears to flow and spill.




November 3, 2022 ~ 2022 Marathon Mile 19 Contest
Sponsored by Mark Toney

Originally written on 23rd of July 2016
 Three Stanzas of English Quintain, 10 syllables per line 
  with a rhyme scheme of a-b-a-b-b

Copyright © Lin Lane | Year Posted 2016

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Sam Kauffman Date: 11/14/2022 2:13:00 PM Lin, my heart weeps at the story of love that lives on even in grief and separation! So many emotive images that blend into this mourning song. Congratulations! Blessings. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 11/26/2022 7:36:00 AM Thanks so much for your kindhearted words, Sam. It's a mourning song that I no longer sing...gratefully.

Mark Massey Date: 11/13/2022 7:55:00 AM Lin, your poetry is filled with emotional beauty. Your heartfelt approach to writing always delivers exceptional results. Well done and congrats!!! Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 11/26/2022 7:35:00 AM Thank you very much for your kind remarks, Mark. They're all greatly appreciated.

Susan Ashley Date: 11/12/2022 5:49:00 PM Such beautiful heartache and heartbreak spills from your gifted pen. Your lost love poems are exquisite in the grand scale of their mournful eloquence. Congratulations, Lin, for your continuing success in Mark's contest. A wonderful win! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 11/26/2022 7:34:00 AM Susan, I apologize for the late response. Life has been hectic. I am always deeply grateful for your kind words about my poetry. Thank you so very much.

Mark Toney Date: 11/11/2022 8:52:00 AM "She wept as they buried her one true love..." Lin, the older I get, the more this resonates with me. Your quintain reveals a profound sadness and is superbly written. Your title is brilliant. Congratulations on your win on Mile 19 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 20 has already started. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 11/26/2022 7:33:00 AM Thank you so much for this honor, Mark. Forgive my late reply.

Janice Canerdy Date: 11/11/2022 7:31:00 AM Lin, CONGRATS on your win with this beautifully sad expression of unending grief. Janice Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 11/26/2022 7:33:00 AM Thanks so much, Janice.

Valerie Staton Date: 1/7/2019 1:35:00 PM So sad. Enjoyed reading your work. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 11/3/2022 8:52:00 AM With thanks for your kind comments, Valerie.

Kim Rodrigues Date: 8/2/2017 4:12:00 PM Congrats on your sad quintain! Superb Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/2/2017 4:16:00 PM Thanks a lot, Kim, and congratulations back to you.

Agnes Krampe Date: 8/2/2017 9:55:00 AM Your lovely poem has the feel of an old ballad, Lin - congrats on your placement. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/2/2017 4:16:00 PM Thank you, Agnes, and well done on your placement.

Janice Canerdy Date: 8/2/2017 12:46:00 AM Lin, CONGRATS on your win. Thanks for entering your great poem in my contest! Janice Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/2/2017 4:16:00 PM Thanks, Janice.

Arnold Nelson Date: 5/14/2017 12:22:00 PM Love the poem. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/14/2017 6:39:00 PM Thanks. I see you're finding your way around the site.

Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 10/24/2016 7:51:00 PM Very sad, yet romantic, Lin. An inseparable love. It was a pleasure to read, yet painful to process. The death of a true love is nearly unbearable to endure. Great job on this poem. Much love to you. RW Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 10/24/2016 10:40:00 PM Thank you, kind sir. Your comments are always most welcomed.

Jan Allison Date: 8/18/2016 11:57:00 AM Congrats on reaching number one in best new poems list Lin:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/19/2016 6:41:00 AM But for a brief moment, the mountain crest is reached. Thanks, Jan.

John Hamilton Date: 8/17/2016 9:33:00 PM Back to congratulate you two times, first the contest win, and second, number 1 best new poem in top 100. Who says you're not appreciated! Hope you come back to stay, many things have changed for the better! Well done! again! Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/18/2016 5:22:00 AM Thank you, John, on both counts. I've noticed one change that made me smile, but I'm not back to post regularly. I still read many poems written by my friends. In answer to your Q on the comment I left on your Angelou poem...my convention was in June and yes, it was awesome, despite rerouting to leave since Baton Rouge was being picketed by Black Panthers and others.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/7/2016 5:22:00 PM Don't know if you are seeing this, but just stopped by to say hello, my friend. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/8/2016 9:55:00 PM I'm reading you. Thanks, Andrea ;-)

Jesse Day Date: 8/5/2016 10:03:00 AM Sad and heartfelt - loss is painful. Nicely written. Jesse Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/8/2016 9:54:00 PM Thank you, Jesse.

Kathleen Kroll Date: 7/29/2016 11:14:00 AM Congrats! Your poem flows so well yet tells a story as it goes. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/8/2016 9:54:00 PM Thank you, Kathleen.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/28/2016 3:07:00 AM Wow Lin. Congratulations on POTD and on your win in the contest! Your poem is profoundly moving. So nice to see you post again. Love, Connie ; ) 7 Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/29/2016 5:33:00 AM I do thank you, Connie, for your kind remarks. It was just a quick trip with lots of fringe benefits.

Laura Leiser Date: 7/27/2016 5:32:00 PM I love the phrase "weeping for her love in soft languished moan". Very creative write, albeit sad, Lin. Great to have you back :) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/29/2016 5:32:00 AM Thank you, Laura, but I'm not back in the soup. I was just paying a little howdy-do.

Paul Callus Date: 7/27/2016 4:18:00 PM Sad, but truly beautiful, Lin! Pleased and surprised to see that you're back, not only posting, but also claiming 1st place in the contest and being honoured with p.o.t.d.!! Congratulations! ~ Best regards // paul Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/29/2016 5:31:00 AM Thanks so very much, Paul. I saw Constance's contest and just wrote...the rest that took place was a bonus lol. But I'm not writing for soup...that one poem was just a whim and a visit.

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 7/27/2016 3:43:00 AM congratulations. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/29/2016 5:30:00 AM Thank you.

Joanna Daniel Date: 7/27/2016 12:18:00 AM Oh! Am I glad to see you back with this awesome write that deserves accolade! Congratulations Lin:) Great poem:) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/29/2016 5:29:00 AM Thanks for your great comments, Jo, but I'm not really back. I'm glad you liked this one so well.

Teddy Kimathi Date: 7/26/2016 5:35:00 AM This piece is really deep.... Congrats Lin, for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!! ;-) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/26/2016 8:47:00 AM I value your comments, and thank you, Teddy.

Laura Leiser Date: 7/26/2016 12:03:00 AM Congrats on your win, Lon! Glad to see you back in the Soup again:) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/26/2016 8:47:00 AM Thanks, Laura. I intended to only make a short visit then this happened. ;-)

Charlie Smith Date: 7/25/2016 9:37:00 PM Right on top again, congratulations Ms Lane... Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/26/2016 8:46:00 AM You made me smile, Mr. Smith ;-)

Eve Roper Date: 7/25/2016 7:55:00 PM Lin, congratulations on your win, very good write and so heartbreaking . Thank you so very much for your congratulations on my poem , “Free Its Soul Bound Wild Stallion”. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/26/2016 8:45:00 AM Thank you, Eve, and you're welcome on my comments to your winner. Huggin ya back.

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