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She Wept In Languished Moan

She wept as they buried her one true love. Each day thereafter she brought him a rose, the flower she knew he was fondest of. Her grief unbearable, beyond repose. What pain and suffering his death bestows. Nothing prevented her daily visit. She didn't want him to feel all alone. When beside him her face was exquisite. When weary she would sigh and then lay prone, weeping for her love in soft languished moan. There, in restless sleep, flames of love still burned 'til the twilight hour, when she felt a chill as the gentle warmth of sunlight adjourned. She heard a dove singing a mourning trill, begetting heartache's tears to flow and spill. November 3, 2022 ~ 2022 Marathon Mile 19 Contest Sponsored by Mark Toney Originally written on 23rd of July 2016 Three Stanzas of English Quintain, 10 syllables per line with a rhyme scheme of a-b-a-b-b

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Date: 11/14/2022 2:13:00 PM
Lin, my heart weeps at the story of love that lives on even in grief and separation! So many emotive images that blend into this mourning song. Congratulations! Blessings.
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Date: 11/26/2022 7:36:00 AM
Thanks so much for your kindhearted words, Sam. It's a mourning song that I no longer sing...gratefully.
Date: 11/13/2022 7:55:00 AM
Lin, your poetry is filled with emotional beauty. Your heartfelt approach to writing always delivers exceptional results. Well done and congrats!!!
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/26/2022 7:35:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind remarks, Mark. They're all greatly appreciated.
Date: 11/12/2022 5:49:00 PM
Such beautiful heartache and heartbreak spills from your gifted pen. Your lost love poems are exquisite in the grand scale of their mournful eloquence. Congratulations, Lin, for your continuing success in Mark's contest. A wonderful win! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/26/2022 7:34:00 AM
Susan, I apologize for the late response. Life has been hectic. I am always deeply grateful for your kind words about my poetry. Thank you so very much.
Date: 11/11/2022 8:52:00 AM
"She wept as they buried her one true love..." Lin, the older I get, the more this resonates with me. Your quintain reveals a profound sadness and is superbly written. Your title is brilliant. Congratulations on your win on Mile 19 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 20 has already started.
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/26/2022 7:33:00 AM
Thank you so much for this honor, Mark. Forgive my late reply.
Date: 11/11/2022 7:31:00 AM
Lin, CONGRATS on your win with this beautifully sad expression of unending grief. Janice
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Date: 11/26/2022 7:33:00 AM
Thanks so much, Janice.
Date: 1/7/2019 1:35:00 PM
So sad. Enjoyed reading your work.
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/3/2022 8:52:00 AM
With thanks for your kind comments, Valerie.
Date: 8/2/2017 4:12:00 PM
Congrats on your sad quintain! Superb
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Date: 8/2/2017 4:16:00 PM
Thanks a lot, Kim, and congratulations back to you.
Date: 8/2/2017 9:55:00 AM
Your lovely poem has the feel of an old ballad, Lin - congrats on your placement.
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Date: 8/2/2017 4:16:00 PM
Thank you, Agnes, and well done on your placement.
Date: 8/2/2017 12:46:00 AM
Lin, CONGRATS on your win. Thanks for entering your great poem in my contest! Janice
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/2/2017 4:16:00 PM
Thanks, Janice.
Date: 5/14/2017 12:22:00 PM
Love the poem.
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/14/2017 6:39:00 PM
Thanks. I see you're finding your way around the site.
Date: 10/24/2016 7:51:00 PM
Very sad, yet romantic, Lin. An inseparable love. It was a pleasure to read, yet painful to process. The death of a true love is nearly unbearable to endure. Great job on this poem. Much love to you. RW
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/24/2016 10:40:00 PM
Thank you, kind sir. Your comments are always most welcomed.
Date: 8/18/2016 11:57:00 AM
Congrats on reaching number one in best new poems list Lin:-) hugs jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/19/2016 6:41:00 AM
But for a brief moment, the mountain crest is reached. Thanks, Jan.
Date: 8/17/2016 9:33:00 PM
Back to congratulate you two times, first the contest win, and second, number 1 best new poem in top 100. Who says you're not appreciated! Hope you come back to stay, many things have changed for the better! Well done! again!
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Date: 8/18/2016 5:22:00 AM
Thank you, John, on both counts. I've noticed one change that made me smile, but I'm not back to post regularly. I still read many poems written by my friends. In answer to your Q on the comment I left on your Angelou poem...my convention was in June and yes, it was awesome, despite rerouting to leave since Baton Rouge was being picketed by Black Panthers and others.
Date: 8/7/2016 5:22:00 PM
Don't know if you are seeing this, but just stopped by to say hello, my friend.
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/8/2016 9:55:00 PM
I'm reading you. Thanks, Andrea ;-)
Date: 8/5/2016 10:03:00 AM
Sad and heartfelt - loss is painful. Nicely written. Jesse
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/8/2016 9:54:00 PM
Thank you, Jesse.
Date: 7/29/2016 11:14:00 AM
Congrats! Your poem flows so well yet tells a story as it goes.
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/8/2016 9:54:00 PM
Thank you, Kathleen.
Date: 7/28/2016 3:07:00 AM
Wow Lin. Congratulations on POTD and on your win in the contest! Your poem is profoundly moving. So nice to see you post again. Love, Connie ; ) 7
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/29/2016 5:33:00 AM
I do thank you, Connie, for your kind remarks. It was just a quick trip with lots of fringe benefits.
Date: 7/27/2016 5:32:00 PM
I love the phrase "weeping for her love in soft languished moan". Very creative write, albeit sad, Lin. Great to have you back :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/29/2016 5:32:00 AM
Thank you, Laura, but I'm not back in the soup. I was just paying a little howdy-do.
Date: 7/27/2016 4:18:00 PM
Sad, but truly beautiful, Lin! Pleased and surprised to see that you're back, not only posting, but also claiming 1st place in the contest and being honoured with p.o.t.d.!! Congratulations! ~ Best regards // paul
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/29/2016 5:31:00 AM
Thanks so very much, Paul. I saw Constance's contest and just wrote...the rest that took place was a bonus lol. But I'm not writing for soup...that one poem was just a whim and a visit.
Date: 7/27/2016 3:43:00 AM
congratulations.
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/29/2016 5:30:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 7/27/2016 12:18:00 AM
Oh! Am I glad to see you back with this awesome write that deserves accolade! Congratulations Lin:) Great poem:)
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/29/2016 5:29:00 AM
Thanks for your great comments, Jo, but I'm not really back. I'm glad you liked this one so well.
Date: 7/26/2016 5:35:00 AM
This piece is really deep.... Congrats Lin, for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/26/2016 8:47:00 AM
I value your comments, and thank you, Teddy.
Date: 7/26/2016 12:03:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Lon! Glad to see you back in the Soup again:)
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/26/2016 8:47:00 AM
Thanks, Laura. I intended to only make a short visit then this happened. ;-)
Date: 7/25/2016 9:37:00 PM
Right on top again, congratulations Ms Lane...
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/26/2016 8:46:00 AM
You made me smile, Mr. Smith ;-)
Date: 7/25/2016 7:55:00 PM
Lin, congratulations on your win, very good write and so heartbreaking . Thank you so very much for your congratulations on my poem , “Free Its Soul Bound Wild Stallion”. Hugs Eve
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/26/2016 8:45:00 AM
Thank you, Eve, and you're welcome on my comments to your winner. Huggin ya back.
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