She Walks

Amidst the broken windows The blowing trash on the sidewalks She walks, cheekbones prominent Head held high Past drunks, huddled against the cold Past the shrunken veins of stoned addicts She walks, leaning into the wind Her step steady Empty lots littered with glass to her right On her left, boarded-up residences, nevertheless She walks, her love for her children Filling her tear-stained heart To a bus stop, then a train station, Another bus stop, and then finally She walks, to those pretty, far-away castles To polish her diamonds' futures

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Carole Duet

Date: 1/7/2019 7:01:00 PM

What a wonderful poem of love and dedication! I can surely see why you placed in this contest. So, congratulations, Gershon. Simply beautiful.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/7/2019 9:21:00 PM

Thank you so much, Carole. Appreciate your kind words and support! Happy 2019. Best wishes, Gershon

Wren Rushing

Date: 12/20/2018 6:57:00 PM

Wonderfully written! I can see this scene in my mind. Congrats on your win in Brian's contest. Have a blessed holiday season my friend.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 12/20/2018 7:12:00 PM

Thanks, Wren. I was hoping that readers would be able to visualize this woman and her struggle. Appreciate the feedback. Best wishes, Gershon

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/18/2018 7:54:00 PM

Given her love for children, I wonder if perhaps she is a teacher who has gone to class to polish students' skills. Of course, the striking differences between her workplace and her commute stand alone as metaphors. This also reminds me of a neighborhood I had to walk through on my way to work when I was 18. Used to scare me. Captivating and thought-provoking poetry! Hugs, Carolyn

Gershon Wolf
Date: 12/18/2018 8:01:00 PM

Thanks for strolling through this one. Appreciate your kind words and support. Season's best! :) gw

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 12/18/2018 6:28:00 PM

Superb! I love this one, Gershon, and I must add to my favs ... the imagery, phrasing, rhythm, and story are all excellent, and you've woven a tapestry of art here that touches deeply on what we perceive as "little" things in our lives, but how others cross our paths who may be in the throes of tragedy OR delight. An epic, created from snap shots ... lovely! (Oh, the lengths and turns our lives take, for I WAS one of those "stoned addicts" once ... that coat so hard to shed). Blessings, Friend!

Gershon Wolf
Date: 12/18/2018 7:34:00 PM

Thank you for the generous, effusive praise, my friend...Life certainly takes unexpected twists and turns. Season's best! ~ Gershon

Mike Gentile

Date: 12/18/2018 1:58:00 PM

The images were so strong in this one Gershon, I could really see each step. excellent !!

Gershon Wolf
Date: 12/18/2018 2:31:00 PM

Thanks for your feedback here, Mike. I was so hoping that readers could feel her struggle, and you surely have. Very encouraging for me, as a struggling writer. Appreciated. Happy Holidays, my friend. ~ Gershon

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/18/2018 12:25:00 PM

There's nothing a determined mother won't do for her children. Well written Gershon. Tom.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 12/18/2018 12:46:00 PM

Thanks much, Tom. It's good to get your comments again. Hope you are feeling much, much better! Best of the season! Gershon

M. L. Kiser

Date: 12/18/2018 10:38:00 AM

Wow, she is very strong and determined; you've penned her image very well.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 12/18/2018 12:45:00 PM

Appreciate your kind words, M.L. Best wishes, gw

Line Gauthier

Date: 12/18/2018 6:20:00 AM

Powerful imagery and tribute to a strong selfless woman with a big heart brimming with determination for her children. Well penned, Gershon.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 12/18/2018 12:44:00 PM

Thanks for the feedback on this one, Line. Much appreciated. Season's best, Gershon