She Dances

She dances she glances Beyond her shoulder She peers Looking back Her beautiful smile She poses in the mirror He weighs his chances Returns her glances Then whiffs Of cheap scent Reveal a fake smile In shattered reflection - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -

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Yolanda Nicholsen

Date: 9/12/2023 3:21:00 AM

adorable write enjoyed

Paul Callus
Date: 9/14/2023 12:25:00 AM

Thank you, Yolanda. A pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Bill Baker

Date: 9/11/2023 5:19:00 PM

Nive collaboration from you two, Paul. It sounds very real, no pulled punches in this one. Thanks for visiting and commenting on my poetry, my friend. Bill

Paul Callus
Date: 9/14/2023 12:14:00 AM

Thank you, Bill. My life is full to the brim (overflowing, I would say), but I make it a point to come and visit friends at Soup the first opportunity I get! ~ Regards // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/6/2023 12:37:00 PM

What it is ,is not necessarily what it seems,so we shouldn't be fooled by appearance s or sweet talkers..Fantastic post Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/14/2023 12:04:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by with lovely insightful comments, Charm. Glad you enjoyed this collaboration with Rick Parise who wrote the 1st stanza as a prompt to his contest. ~ Warm regards // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/9/2023 7:49:00 AM

Whoa!! All is not good in this world of fake and shattered. I enjoyed reading it though. I think that is the way life is sometimes some people are real and kind even if they can't afford fake perfume. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 7/10/2023 5:26:00 AM

Your points all make sense, Sara. I believe that it's the intention that counts most in the things we do. ~ Thank you for your pleasant visit, my friend. Regards // paul

Lisa Ricci

Date: 7/4/2023 3:13:00 AM

Good Morning Paul. Hello. The entry has a sad voice and tone not to mention a marvelous title which makes this entry wonderful poetry. Thank you both for sharing your poetic talents. Have a wonderful morning and day. Blessings always. (smile) Congratulations to both authors

Paul Callus
Date: 7/4/2023 11:10:00 AM

May I thank you in the name of Rick and myself, Lisa. Your lovely feedback is truly appreciated. ~ Regards & Blessings // paul

Gary Radice

Date: 7/3/2023 12:27:00 PM

Congratulations to both Rick and yourself for a piece that had me reflecting on its meaning. Mirrors can distort and help reflect one's thoughts too. Just my take. Cheers - Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 7/4/2023 11:01:00 AM

Thank you, Gary; your comments are a good interpretation of what the poet had in mind, based on mirrors and reflection. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/28/2023 1:22:00 PM

Take time for circumspection, not meanness nor unwise pickiness. Don’t be caught in the web of her mirror. Catch the cheap scent and fake smile before you are trapped.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/28/2023 2:24:00 PM

Prudence and attention are both necessary if we want to avoid surprises in life. Thank you for stopping by with sound comments, Kim. ~ Regards // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/26/2023 7:17:00 AM

An excellent addition to the very fine opening stanza of Rick Parise, my good friend. God bless..

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 12:30:00 PM

Thank you, Robert. So pleased to have you stopping by, my friend. Regards & blessings // paul

Sneha Rv

Date: 6/26/2023 5:57:00 AM

a most unique complement and entry to the seemingly simple first verse. it's like there is a mirror right through the middle! all the Best in the contest dear mentor . I hope you are all well...

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 12:22:00 PM

Dear Sneha!! What a pleasure to have you visiting my humble abode! You have been an avid writer and learner since such a young age! So pleased that your pen has not gone rusty during these past years :) ~ Best regards // paul

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/25/2023 4:31:00 PM

Paul, your poem was truly delightful! I must commend you on your remarkable talent. Congratulations on your achievement. This is my inaugural comment on your exceptional poetry, and I am eager to continue following your future work. Warmest regards.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 12:19:00 PM

Thank you for your genuine comments, Sotto. I have noticed your comments on the posts of others, and they are insightful and always make sense. Glad you stopped by. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2023 2:43:00 PM

wow, yours is deep and very very good

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 12:15:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea...all the best to you // paul

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/25/2023 10:37:00 AM

A creative write. Good Luck. I also did this one. Have a great day/week............

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 12:09:00 PM

Thank you, Paula. Hope your week is going by smoothly :) Regards // paul

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/25/2023 8:32:00 AM

Paul, you have enough experience to discern that it is the character that counts.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 12:05:00 PM

Exactly, Victor; if we're not careful, we could easily be taken in by outer appearance. Best regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/25/2023 4:37:00 AM

Your part of the poem complements perfectly the essence of the first stanza. I like the clever turn in the ending lines. Best to you, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 11:59:00 AM

Thank you for the feedback, Vijay. Much appreciated. Regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 6/25/2023 1:59:00 AM

Beautiful in its sadness Paul - a reflection on life sometimes I guess:-( hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2023 11:49:00 AM

Thank you, Jan. What shows up in the mirror is not always what we make it out to be! Rick's simple words are meant for us to think outside the box. Hugs // paul

Paul Callus

Date: 6/25/2023 1:32:00 AM

This poem has been written in collaboration with Rick Parise who wrote the 1st stanza.