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Shaving Minutes

In sync with your cadence Your heart pounds Your blood as hot as your rubber Every molecule so engorged Sweat alone separates you from your chrome While you peel off a spoke fine line Through rush hour traffic Tearing a strip off of death High On a deadline 04/07/2019 Your Amphetamine Poetry Contest Sponsored by Anthony Slausin

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B. Joseph Fitzsimons

Date: 4/20/2019 3:57:00 AM

I really love the language in this, Maureen. “Your blood as hot as your rubber” really screamed at me. Love it. *hugs*

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/22/2019 7:40:00 AM

Thank you Brendan! I hope it screamed at the contest sponsor ;) tee hee ...Brendan, do you remember talking about writing a poem on depression together? I was thinking of you when I wrote "Nothing" for a contest on depression. I hope you are well my friend. My own situation a lot worse, but better too, got one too many blows to the head, literally. Hugs and well wishes, xomo

Carole Duet

Date: 4/11/2019 9:45:00 PM

Sounds like a friend of mine...crazy biker! Very clever poem, Maureen. Good luck in the contest.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/12/2019 8:15:00 AM

Thank you Carole! I used to be... crazy bike courier, now just crazy ;) xomo <3

M. L. Kiser

Date: 4/10/2019 7:46:00 PM

That's really the long and the short of it; you've created quite an intense poem.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/11/2019 7:27:00 AM

Thank you! I tried ;) xomo!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/10/2019 11:26:00 AM

This is such a vibe infused poem - had to race to keep up with it! Nicely penned Maureen, Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/11/2019 7:26:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer! Hugs & sunshine! :) xomo

Vegter Papyrus

Date: 4/9/2019 4:27:00 PM

Speed! I've always been afraid of straws and rolled dollars; hitting the gas on things like that can be deadly. The last word punctuated this correctly...a Brilliant Write!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/9/2019 9:09:00 PM

Ooh la la, indeed. ;) Thank you so much! xomo!

Panagiota Romios

Date: 4/9/2019 11:04:00 AM

Great write, Maureen! Panagiota

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/9/2019 12:50:00 PM

Thank you Panagiota! :) xomo

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/8/2019 4:09:00 PM

edgy, edgy.. my pulse reaches a seismic shoot as i work best when under pressure... so vivid, maureen!..huggs

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/9/2019 7:35:00 AM

Thank you Nette! :))) xomo!

Ann Gilmour

Date: 4/8/2019 12:46:00 PM

This is so cleverly written Maureen, such evocative imagery and I can almost feel the tension rising as your deadline approaches! This is a winner for sure... with kindest thoughts Ann xx

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 1:44:00 PM

Thank you Ann! I'm a hoping it's what the sponsor is looking for ;) warm hugs! xomo

Ralph Sergi

Date: 4/8/2019 11:35:00 AM

Hi Maureen: It's great how you use a car for imagery Well done!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 1:43:00 PM

Thank you Ralph! Regaling my wilder younger years ;) xomo

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 4/8/2019 9:10:00 AM

Powerful and excitingly pressing dear, Maureen!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 9:15:00 AM

Thank you my sweet D! xomo <3

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/8/2019 9:07:00 AM

Ha ha, I love how you play with words. Thanks for your visit.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 9:14:00 AM

Play I do ;D Thank you Richard! Mo hugs ~

John Lawless

Date: 4/8/2019 9:03:00 AM

Tires on hot pavement....all he'll need is a cigarette when he hits the driveway....

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 9:11:00 AM

Heh, I miss riding traffic with a cigarette hanging out of my mouth; oh youth. ;) xomo

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 4/7/2019 11:28:00 PM

In nearly no time at all, your words create a palpable anxiety, a very pacey pressure. Very well delivered.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 7:30:00 AM

Thank you Lawrence! I was going for that ;) Cheers! xomo

Jeff Connelly

Date: 4/7/2019 10:57:00 PM

Crazy muy loco ride Maureen. When I first read the title it sparked another idea for me, but I love the fact that you are in "cadence" with this. Makes my heart skip a beat.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/9/2019 9:35:00 PM

LOL! I love that!!!

Jeff Connelly
Date: 4/8/2019 12:03:00 PM

There's a very visual poem in that image jajaja. I'll always be a goof. I wore a t-shirt to work yesterday: blue with a drawing of the ?? earth. It read "Keep the Earth Clean, It's not Uranus". And I have so many more.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 9:35:00 AM

I like to say I have yet to hear a convincing argument for growing up. I'm still wild, just slower. I'm on a three wheeler now, a dog cargo trike. My big yellow taxi; cruising paved paradise with my b*tch on board.

Jeff Connelly
Date: 4/8/2019 8:36:00 AM

I've never grown up. Aren't these still our wild days?

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2019 7:28:00 AM

I was hoping the title might evoke... I'm thrilled my intended rush comes through ;) I love these prompts (& any excuse to revisit my wilder days) Thank you my friend, xomo!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/7/2019 8:30:00 PM

Exciting ride/write, my friend, the deadline adrenaline coursing through the writer's and the reader's veins. (soup mail). ~ Gershon

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/7/2019 8:41:00 PM

Still composing myself... ;o*