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Shalom Is At the Basis of the Universe

MY FIRST DIMINISHED HEXAVERSE (with apologies for fumbling) I Unless underlying Peace is our bedrock Surface war delude As beneath strong waves Oceans are at peace II Shalom, siblings Good Creation Designer God IS and named: Peace III Recall nuns Cloisters call Of Peace, Ohh IV They know something TRUE We sometimes do too V F L O W -- NOTE: In Line #3, I ought to have written "Surface wars delude," or "Surface war deludes." Would it have affected the syllable count? I was unsure ...

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Date: 2/1/2020 8:41:00 PM
Love your poem, powerful subject matter. Soup Mail.
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Harry Horsman
Date: 2/1/2020 8:45:00 PM
cannot find a soup mail, for you,,This form of poem, syllable count should match amount of lines per stanza...

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