Anil Deo Poet Diminished Hexaverse

Shalom Is At the Basis of the Universe

MY FIRST DIMINISHED HEXAVERSE (with apologies for fumbling)

I
Unless underlying
Peace is our bedrock
Surface war delude
As beneath strong waves
Oceans are at peace

II
Shalom, siblings
Good Creation
Designer God 
IS and  named: Peace 

III
Recall nuns
Cloisters call
Of Peace, Ohh

IV
They know something TRUE
We sometimes do too

V
F L O W


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NOTE: In Line #3, I ought to have written "Surface wars delude," or "Surface war deludes." Would it have affected the syllable count? I was unsure ...

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Harry Horsman February 1, 2020 at 8:41 PM Love your poem, powerful subject matter. Soup Mail. Harry Horsman February 1, 2020 at 8:45 PM cannot find a soup mail, for you,,This form of poem, syllable count should match amount of lines per stanza...