Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Shall I Jump - Wayra

Dim empty tunnel
thundering sounds fill my head
Fast midnight tube approaching -
am I ready to jump ...
suicidal thoughts abounding

SECOND EDITION OF WAYRA Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Nette Onclaud

Written for contest - not from personal experience!

8/16/19

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Eve Roper August 22, 2019 at 11:53 PM Congratulations my friend. Hugs Eve

Line Gauthier August 22, 2019 at 5:05 AM Congrats on your podium finish, Jan. Well done. Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:58 AM Thanks so much Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Ann Gilmour August 22, 2019 at 12:55 AM Congratulations Jan for your podium win in Nette's contest. Well done! With kindest thoughts Ann xx Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:58 AM Thanks so much Ann:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong August 21, 2019 at 8:31 PM The picture conveys sinister thoughts to me Jan and it is easy to see why your poem contemplates suicide. Congratulations on your win! I didn't have enough time to write for this one. xxoo Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:56 AM Thanks so much Connie, i much prefer humour but the image made me think deep and dark:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf August 21, 2019 at 4:04 PM Jan, congrats on your win for this dark poem. Nicely penned. Hugs, John Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:55 AM Thanks so much John it makes a change for me to write deep and dark:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham August 21, 2019 at 3:53 PM Back with congrats Jan. Tom Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:55 AM Thanks so much Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus August 21, 2019 at 2:54 PM An excellent interpretation of this visual prompt, Jan. Hope those suicidal thoughts evaporated before the train's arrival. Congratulations on a merited win. Hugs // paul Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:55 AM thankfully its fiction for me ... and we only have steam trains here !!:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud August 21, 2019 at 2:44 PM grreat, eerie interpretation of the theme, jan... huge congrats and thanks for posting this for my contest! Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:54 AM Thanks Nette I could only write dark for this contest that is what the image made me picture in my mind:-( hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues August 19, 2019 at 3:03 PM Wow, an adventure of the precarious kind... Nicely done, Jan! Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:53 AM Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

James Edward Lee Sr. August 19, 2019 at 10:36 AM It's in the human nature DNA to be so negative in the mind and spirit...Depression is real... every human being gonna be DOWN sometimes.. the fix is when you're down git up don't lay in this situation git up rise above it... be encouraged in ALL things... James :) grand write Jan... Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:53 AM wise words indeed James, I am lucky I don't suffer with depression but know many who do:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich August 18, 2019 at 5:57 PM good one, Jan. This kind of thing is so hard for me to do something amazing with!! You did great with the theme. Jan Allison August 22, 2019 at 7:52 AM Thanks Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie August 17, 2019 at 7:50 PM G'day Jan … it's hard at times to understand how things can get so bad that to end it all is the only solution, but it happens so frequently - very sad indeed - Lindsay Jan Allison August 17, 2019 at 7:55 PM it is a very sad scenario Lindsay makes you wonder what drives someone to the edge that they contemplate taking their own life:-( hugs Jan xxx

Caren Krutsinger August 17, 2019 at 9:12 AM I thought "wait! Is this Jan?" So sad and deeply dark for you. But then I thought "how wise to stop where she stopped. Yes, this is Jan." Nice one. Jan Allison August 17, 2019 at 9:51 AM I much prefer humour but like your Trixie I have no control over my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France August 17, 2019 at 8:17 AM Jan, wow, you are reaching deep into your soul these days, wonderful for the contest, a winner to me ~ Jan Allison August 17, 2019 at 8:37 AM Thanks Constance, you inspire me to go out of my comfort zones and write deep dark and sad:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong August 16, 2019 at 10:25 PM This is great Jan! The dark picture fits perfectly with the dark thoughts in your poem. So well done! : ) xxoo Jan Allison August 17, 2019 at 2:23 AM Thanks Connie, all I could see was 'dark' when I wrote the poem I started it as soon as I saw the contest but only finished it yesterday... just too busy enjoying life at the moment!:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner August 16, 2019 at 4:19 PM Captures the mood with deft dark prose, a worthy entry for the contest, Jan. Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 4:43 PM Thanks Michelle I'm not sure what Nette will think of my effort:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Adams August 16, 2019 at 3:51 PM very powerful poem, shame many do jump in front of trains for a quick death! your words leave an impact long after the read, good write! good luck in the contest~ hugs :) Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 4:42 PM I wish I could have come up with a happier theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham August 16, 2019 at 2:12 PM Sadly many do Jan, strange though I always feel for the train driver having to live with a suicidal person. Good luck. Tom. PS, have emailed you. Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 4:41 PM It must be so traumatic for anyone involved in these sad events Tom, I read f such tragedies in the press:-( hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands August 16, 2019 at 1:43 PM Well done Jan. Powerful for sure. Good luck in the contest :) Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 4:39 PM Thanks Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen August 16, 2019 at 11:57 AM - ... a bad choice ... no jumping ... powerful suicidal thoughts, Jan - Great written ... best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 1:14 PM No jumping here my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet August 16, 2019 at 11:35 AM a bit of humor, a bit of mystery, a bit of a twist at the end. Excellent, Jan; best of luck in the contest. Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 1:11 PM Thanks Reason, I didn't mean for it to come across as humourous:-( hugs jan xx

Bobby May August 16, 2019 at 11:16 AM WOW JAN, for never having any personal experience you sure hit the nail on the head! Excellent imagery!! Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 1:11 PM Someone I know (who is an alcoholic) contemplated it when she was very drunk , thankfully she never carried it out Bobby :-( hugs jan xx