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April 6, 2025

~ Eighth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Serpents, Scorpions, Owls
Sponsor: Sara Jama


 

How wicked the tricks of your serpent’s lair a lingual place of wild mango magic behind caliente lips where a supple sensualist lies in seductive ambush rum on the rocks spices flesh bed of your taste buds libation temptation whets my wish like a knife on stone medieval my want to stir my tongue in your firewater my fingers a captivated trellis jealous and zealous carefree and careless find their way to getting lost in your midnight curls S curves wind from devil depths to bind aroused fingers —coiled accomplices hold me captive as I’m pulled in with hooked fangs piercing my heart deep piercing my soul sweet eyes of winter blue skies belie your stealth l i p s heat-seeking as you place your face to mine tongue flicks for a taste ah flirts with lust-basted taste yes yesss press your whispering mouth on mine my mouth blooms like a dusk-loving moonflower throat white against night my breath your honeysuckle unholy hunger unleashed a famished desperation my desperation so full of babydoll flame and ash your jaw unhinges to swallow whole my fire and ire oh bend me like a willow in the tongue-tie of your kiss break me take me make me buy the bliss in your hiss feed me fantasy I need to cede lace without chains as hush-winged-talons scythe bloodstreams of my dreams bleed me in the weed greed of your sidewinding river till you shed my love the way a constrictor sheds skin I crave to make this snake my feather boa —to fly moonlight a raptor of rapture instead of one captured

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Date: 4/20/2025 9:18:00 PM
"l i p s heat-seeking as you place your face to mine tongue flicks for a taste ah flirts with lust-basted taste yes yesss press your whispering mouth on mine" ..... Wow, so sensuous and romantic.....dear Susan. I feel the fury of your longing to be in his coiled hold. "oh bend me like a willow in the tongue-tie of your kiss break me take me make me buy the bliss in your hiss". Another fire spitting image of desire. Only you can think of such metaphors on a topic like this. So very intense with images seething emotions of romance. Your alliterations add to the beauty of your highly metaphoric poem with rich sensory details and exploration of intimate and raw desire.. I salute you dear Susan for your awesome talent. Congratulations on your great win.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/26/2025 10:05:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, soulful poetess and inspiring friend, I revel in your beautiful response to my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts and kind congrats with me. They are highly valued and held in my deepest appreciation. Your poetry friendship enhances my creative experience here and your shining presence adds luster to my humble verse. I salute you, sweet Valsa, for your thoughtful expression in the comment box and for the fruition of exquisite artistry on your poetry pages. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/10/2025 9:30:00 AM
Congratulations on placing in my contest. What a wicked take on the prompt. I just love it. Your metaphorical expression is fantastic. I love how you took it sinisterly sensual. "oh bend me like a willow in the tongue-tie of your kiss break me take me make me buy the bliss in your hiss," fantastic.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/12/2025 7:49:00 AM
Dear Sara, thank you for my poem's placement in your prestigious contest. I'm thrilled to share the podium with the talented poets on your list. I appreciate your uplifting critique and heartwarming congrats. Your contest prompt was wonderful and inspiring! I appreciated the opportunity to write for your contest. Glad to know you liked the 'willow' verse, it's one of my favorites too. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/10/2025 8:58:00 AM
Dear Susan, Talented soul, another exquisite write from your ink, youv woven words in such a creative manner, giving a sensual touch to your poem in such eloquence , with internal rhymes, alliterations, and unique metaphors that depicts romance in the most poetic cadence! I love "feed me fantasy I need to cede lace without chains as hush-winged-talons scythe bloodstreams of my dreams" how passionately intense! Pleasure reading your poem! Congratulations on your placement in saras contest
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/12/2025 7:55:00 AM
Dear Ink, soulful poet, I revel in your gracious visit and relish the embracing spirit of your beautiful comments. I'm touched by your heartwarming words and kind congrats, but mostly, I'm honored to share the podium with you. So happy to know you enjoyed my poem of passion! :) Warmest wishes to you, my inspiring poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 4/7/2025 9:27:00 AM
Hello Susan, this is a beautifully written spicy romantic write. A great read. Wishing you a fabulous new week ahead, my friend.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/10/2025 7:36:00 AM
Dear Zyrool, my creative poet friend, I'm happy to hear from you and to receive your heartwarming response to my poem. Thank you for your sharing your treasured thoughts with me. They are appreciated as is your friendship. I hope you're having a wonderful week, mine has been very busy, but in a 'good busy' kind of way:) Warmest wishes to you.. ~Susan
Date: 4/6/2025 10:01:00 AM
Whew! That was some kiss. And to think it all began with a little wild mango magic. Deliciously descriptive write Suze
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/10/2025 7:33:00 AM
Dear Tom, a little wild magic goes a long way lol! Sorry for the delayed response to your delightful comments. I've been away from PS since posting this bc of family and work obligations but it's nice to have some free time here this morning to thank you for gracing my poem with your gracious visit and poetic presence. I appreciate your kindness and your acknowledgement of my contest placement too. Warmest wishes to you, my dear poet friend.. ~Suze
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Tom Woody
Date: 4/10/2025 6:10:00 AM
PS. Nice placement in the contest. This intense write deserves more accolades

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