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Sequins Of Savannah Sunset

I'm an estuary of ivy-furs, sleeping in monsoonal moonglades of love~ as the savannah sun of sunset blurs, slowly unveiling stars with golden glove. When russet- fairies twirl in a bronze lake, singing with springs of watermelon wand, an untouched summer unfurls behind ache, lacing twilights with lush wishes, so fond. Garden of grapefruit, doesn't forbid faith, exotic eyes paint life with a rare art, where hilly hues drape seashores ~ daisy-bathe, my muse weaves magic on the 'bay of heart'.

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Valsa George

Date: 1/21/2024 8:00:00 PM

Wow.... You are weaving magic. What beauty and what wonderful setting..... all viewed at a savanna sunset. The soul is drenched in the vision of the twilight and the pale silver light of the stars when they array themselves in the teal sky. Your descriptions are heavenly, dear Hiya."an untouched summer unfurls behind ache, lacing twilights with lush wishes, so fond". It rubs away all traces of ache...not only from your heart, but from all hearts. Into my FAVE, dear.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/18/2024 3:46:00 PM

Interesting word pairings make this quite unique. I enjoyed the read.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 1/17/2024 10:49:00 AM

Hiya, these words spin a magic spell of "exotic eyes," "russet-fairies," "monsoonal moonglades." What beautiful, enticing imagery. You write this so skillfully with a dash of magic for good measure! "Bay of the heart" so perfectly sums up this romantic interlude! I am drawn into this beauty like a siren's song. If this is for a contest, best wishes! Blessings of health and happiness to you. Your words are beautiful poetic gifts!

Yann Rolland

Date: 1/17/2024 6:32:00 AM

so musical rhymes, this is beautifully written and inspiring, thanks poet

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/17/2024 3:47:00 AM

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/16/2024 1:38:00 PM

Many lovely images here. For me it could be the imagination contest it's meant for. So creative

Joseph May

Date: 1/16/2024 7:04:00 AM

I like how enchantingly you weave your words in this beautiful write, Best wishes

Duke Beaufort

Date: 1/16/2024 2:39:00 AM

You do have a way with words! Beautiful. It seems as if each scene is like a garden of Eden. I've often thought the world could be a wonderful place for all of us if we treat it and each other with respect. Love helps. Thanks for this. I also like the taste of grapefruit even though to some they are too sour.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 1/15/2024 9:56:00 PM

A stunningly beautiful poem, Hiya! It has an ethereal quality, and conveys such exquisite images that I can't say which verse I enjoyed most. This is a fave for me. :)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/15/2024 1:44:00 AM

Great rhyme and wonderful imagery.

Ink Empress

Date: 1/14/2024 9:38:00 PM

Short or long, metaphorical or not, dear angelic star you create magic through your artistic wand! I absolutely loved the uniqueness of your rhymes and wordplay such as various fruits that depict a heavenly and ethereal feel to this! “ When russet- fairies twirl in a bronze lake, singing with springs of watermelon wand, an untouched summer unfurls behind ache, “ that conveys so much and are words of a wise soul that has seen so much but still finds light! I think this will be anothr winner. BOL

Ink Empress
Date: 1/14/2024 9:38:00 PM

You’ve nailed it! Every word is just beyond creatively woven! Impeccable! A fave this is too

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/14/2024 3:54:00 PM

such beautiful and descriptive words and images, dear Hiya! Your poem seemed almost magical and transformative. I especially liked: Garden of grapefruit, doesn't forbid faith, exotic eyes paint life with a rare art... Those words remind me of how I see you. Truly. Have a great evening, Sara

Paige Hind

Date: 1/14/2024 3:34:00 PM

Loved your last line muse is "bay of heart" a beautiful way to describe it. May your muse keep flowing... <3

The Situation

Date: 1/14/2024 2:16:00 PM

I remember the spanish moss hanging from the trees. But the monsoons speak of Arizona and the unedible fruit. I always look for the rhyming which is here. Good work.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 1/14/2024 11:17:00 AM

A beautiful poem. I too was entranced by the watermelon. Maybe because it's mostly water. Nice going.

Jay Narain

Date: 1/14/2024 10:18:00 AM

Very articulate, rhythmic poem. I like shorter poems in plain English. Thanks for sharing.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/14/2024 8:52:00 AM

So reminds me of summer with the fruitiness of watermelon and wonderful sunsets. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for the nice review of my work. Sara K

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/14/2024 7:11:00 AM

Such a great poem, dear Hiya, is about the beauty and magic of nature, as well as the transformative power of love with references to ivy, moonglades, sunsets, stars, fairies, lakes, watermelons, summer, grapefruits, and seashores. Your poem also explores the theme of love"unveiling stars with golden glove" and "my muse weaves magic on the 'bay of heart'." The use of vivid diction, such as "monsoonal moonglades," "russet-fairies twirl," "hilly hues drape seashores," brings imagery to life.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/14/2024 6:05:00 AM

Glad to see you writing in rhymes, Hiya. Perfect tone and flow and splendid imagery, as always. Much enjoyed your articulate poem!

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/14/2024 4:12:00 AM

If I'm ever looking for a poet to pluck words of love from it would be you dear Hiya, (smile) your muse is alive and well today, :)

Silent One

Date: 1/14/2024 4:09:00 AM

Your poem paints a vivid and enchanting picture with its rich imagery and evocative language... What a wonderful way to describe things through unique metaphors, I think Gina will love this one.. The use of phrases like "estuary of ivy-furs" and "monsoonal moon glades of love" creates a dreamlike atmosphere. The choice of words such as "russet-fairies," "watermelon wand," and "daisy-bathe" adds a whimsical and magical quality to the description...