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Do not turn back and think of me When you can't physically touch me When you still haven't found your lonely words to show me the many ways that you have loved me (if you ever did ) Let me get lost ,not to be found Let me be gone, carried away like a life-boat at sea that never made it to the shore Let me be forgotten,never to be remembered Let the running tide choke me Let it take my breath before I can breathe to inhale salt air, and walk again on scorching sands Let it take my breath before hallucations take over and make me smell the wafting scents of cocounut, our shared ice -cream , and sun -soaked years. May total eclipse come soon to cover this night and many nights still yet to follow So these eyes would not seek your eyes Oh, those eyes ,a book of thousand stars Glistening stars ,falling stars,wishing stars that keep on fading , fading into nothingness Nothingness that steals the joy of many rainbows Rainbows that once splashed against our lighthouse, their pastel hues on sepia paths. Do not turn back , do not look back and think of me It is too late to come , it is too late to hold my hand And if the memory remains ,make new beginnings So that tomorrow , you will not fail to lock our history So you will succeed to seperate the living from the dead.
Fiction poem inspired by a Bruno Mars' song - 'When I was your man '

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 12/7/2015 2:04:00 PM
"Let it take my breath before I can breathe to inhale salt air, and walk again on scorching sands" These brilliant lines just kill me, Charmaine! "Oh, those eyes ,a book of thousand stars Glistening stars ,falling stars,wishing stars that keep on fading , fading into nothingness" Stop, this is making me tear!! So beautiful.. I am utterly enchanted by your work today! This one's going into my favs. Always, Laura
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Date: 12/1/2015 9:18:00 AM
every one of them gives me the haaaa, will read again tomorrow. do you publish books?
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Date: 11/12/2015 4:05:00 PM
This 7+ rating is on the updated profile pic!!! Poem's still awesome as well!
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Date: 11/9/2015 10:16:00 PM
Loved this Charmaine, even is so sad!
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Date: 11/1/2015 4:24:00 PM
I adore bruno mars!!!
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Date: 11/1/2015 4:23:00 PM
this is full of love and yet it sounds like it was a one sided love and is now full of sadness. REALLY good emotive poem, Charma. Love it.
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Date: 10/27/2015 4:42:00 PM
Profoundly dynamic poem where sadness and regret intertwine and glimpses of hope are not absent! Marvelous, dear Charmaine. A seven!
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Date: 10/25/2015 4:43:00 AM
"Do not turn back ... it is too late" says the poetess; but deep down there is longing, a wish that things could have worked out better. Sad, yet an impressive and lovely poem, Charm. #7 ~ Have a lovely weekend. // paul
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Date: 10/24/2015 9:16:00 AM
I think Bruno Mars would be impressed! I certainly am.
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Date: 10/24/2015 1:34:00 AM
This is an excellent take on that song Charmaine! These are my favorite lines: "May total eclipse come soon to cover this night and many nights still yet to follow..." ...(Breathe!) :)
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Date: 10/23/2015 11:01:00 AM
Very despondent. I don't think I've ever read a poem like this from you, Charmaine. It touches the heart. Lovely write.
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Date: 10/23/2015 10:50:00 AM
Hey Charmaine, stopped by for a visit with you. I love the imagery here - invokes such sadness, lost love - subtle longing. Excellent writing and expression. I'm going to have to find and listen to this song. Be Blessed, Neva
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Date: 10/22/2015 4:59:00 PM
Very sad Charma. What love song made you get these feelings? Big hugs
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Tim Smith
Date: 10/23/2015 2:43:00 PM
I really like that Bruno Mars song : )

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