Notes About The Poem

Form is French Retourne and does not necessarily follow the Quatrain form exactly, although in the this case it generally does with the possible weak rhymes in the 1st and last stanzas.  This form must have four, four line, stanzas, each with eight syllables, no rhyme necessary.  The second line in stanza one must be the first line in stanza two, third line is first in stanza three and the fourth line is first in stanza four.

One of my personal photos.  Copyright © 2015 James Inman

The image above is that of the plant that partially inspired the poem.  The plant is a Sensitive Plant and drawing your finger along the leaf stem causes the leaves on either side to close together similar to a Venus Fly Trap. 

Sensitive

I see you lying in the grass your sensitivity showing. And, with each breath of gentle breeze you blush, as your leaves are closing. Your sensitivity showing to all who share your carefree dreams. When twilight sets your hair aglow, you melt, in shadowy moon beams. And, with each breath of gentle breeze My love for you grows ever more. As you secret yourself from me, my tender feelings you ignore. You blush, as your leaves are closing tightly against the whispered wind, as if you held beneath your green secret thoughts of amorous sin.
10/17/15
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Dietrich Avatar
October 21, 2015 at 9:22 PM
ralph, I am trying to view this flower up big the way you told me to, but when I click right , the view word does not come up. Just came to say hi. I have to get off here any moment and there is no way I will catch up on comments tonight. Have a great Thursday!
Scars Avatar
October 21, 2015 at 10:05 AM
"Your sensitivity showing to all who share your carefree dreams. When twilight sets your hair aglow, you melt, in shadowy moon beams." So romantic and amazing flow. Great write! 7 Be blessed -LU
Inman Avatar
October 21, 2015 at 10:39 AM
Such sweet comment Laura, thank you.
Leiser Avatar
October 20, 2015 at 7:06 PM
This is a very beautiful poem, James! It has a tender and gentle feel to it, with a wonderful meter. Great job :) 7
Inman Avatar
October 21, 2015 at 10:34 AM
Laura, thank you for your beautiful comment.
La France Avatar
October 19, 2015 at 12:40 AM
James, this is such a lovely poem and your own photograph image is stunning, a beautiful 10+ for both and thanks for visiting my poetry ~~
Inman Avatar
October 21, 2015 at 10:33 AM
Thank you BW, just wanted to share one of my photos with you.
Dietrich Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 8:02 PM
This is so deep. Seems like a plant and yet a woman! a metaphor poem I think. all I know is that it is beautiful!
Inman Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 8:18 PM
Another flower poem, Andrea. You mentioned to me before about my comparing women and flowers. No exception here. Thank you so much for the kind words.
Muideen Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 3:54 PM
The flow of your write is very excellent and eloquence. What a joyous read from you friend. Brilliant write indeed..........A.M.
Inman Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 8:15 PM
Thank you, Afolabi, for your always nice comments.
Godwin Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 3:53 AM
You did a great job, James. I thoroughly enjoyed the content, rhymes (didn't find them too weak to work!), and flow. Check this, 3rd line, 1st Stanza begins with 'For', when brought down to start 3rd Stanza, it begins with 'And.' This is a very pretty poem ... CayCay
Inman Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 9:15 AM
CayCay, thank you, thank you. It was originally "For" and I changed it later and neglected to update the 3rd line. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
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