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Form is French Retourne and does not necessarily follow the Quatrain form exactly, although in the this case it generally does with the possible weak rhymes in the 1st and last stanzas. This form must have four, four line, stanzas, each with eight syllables, no rhyme necessary. The second line in stanza one must be the first line in stanza two, third line is first in stanza three and the fourth line is first in stanza four.

The image above is that of the plant that partially inspired the poem. The plant is a Sensitive Plant and drawing your finger along the leaf stem causes the leaves on either side to close together similar to a Venus Fly Trap.

Sensitive


I see you lying in the grass
your sensitivity showing.
And, with each breath of gentle breeze
you blush, as your leaves are closing.

Your sensitivity showing
to all who share your carefree dreams.
When twilight sets your hair aglow,
you melt, in shadowy moon beams.

And, with each breath of gentle breeze
My love for you grows ever more.
As you secret yourself from me,
my tender feelings you ignore.

You blush, as your leaves are closing
tightly against the whispered wind,
as if you held beneath your green
secret thoughts of amorous sin.



10/17/15

flowerlovesweetquatrain

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/21/2015 9:22:00 PM

ralph, I am trying to view this flower up big the way you told me to, but when I click right , the view word does not come up. Just came to say hi. I have to get off here any moment and there is no way I will catch up on comments tonight. Have a great Thursday!

Beautiful Scars

Date: 10/21/2015 10:05:00 AM

"Your sensitivity showing to all who share your carefree dreams. When twilight sets your hair aglow, you melt, in shadowy moon beams." So romantic and amazing flow. Great write! 7 Be blessed -LU

James Inman
Date: 10/21/2015 10:39:00 AM

Such sweet comment Laura, thank you.

Laura Leiser

Date: 10/20/2015 7:06:00 PM

This is a very beautiful poem, James! It has a tender and gentle feel to it, with a wonderful meter. Great job :) 7

James Inman
Date: 10/21/2015 10:34:00 AM

Laura, thank you for your beautiful comment.

Constance La France

Date: 10/19/2015 12:40:00 AM

James, this is such a lovely poem and your own photograph image is stunning, a beautiful 10+ for both and thanks for visiting my poetry ~~

James Inman
Date: 10/21/2015 10:33:00 AM

Thank you BW, just wanted to share one of my photos with you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2015 8:02:00 PM

This is so deep. Seems like a plant and yet a woman! a metaphor poem I think. all I know is that it is beautiful!

James Inman
Date: 10/18/2015 8:18:00 PM

Another flower poem, Andrea. You mentioned to me before about my comparing women and flowers. No exception here. Thank you so much for the kind words.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 10/18/2015 3:54:00 PM

The flow of your write is very excellent and eloquence. What a joyous read from you friend. Brilliant write indeed..........A.M.

James Inman
Date: 10/18/2015 8:15:00 PM

Thank you, Afolabi, for your always nice comments.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 10/18/2015 3:53:00 AM

You did a great job, James. I thoroughly enjoyed the content, rhymes (didn't find them too weak to work!), and flow. Check this, 3rd line, 1st Stanza begins with 'For', when brought down to start 3rd Stanza, it begins with 'And.' This is a very pretty poem ... CayCay

James Inman
Date: 10/18/2015 9:15:00 AM

CayCay, thank you, thank you. It was originally "For" and I changed it later and neglected to update the 3rd line. I'm happy you enjoyed it.

Sensitive

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