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Speaking of Sedoka, Nette Onclaud, 5/27/2026

Sedoka-Falling Rocks

cascading post-haste various shapes and sizes avalanche of black and blue when all was serene could see it all raining down loved ones obstructed from view
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Kauffman Avatar
June 1, 2026 at 11:14 AM
Back with congratulations! Had a feeling this would be a winner! Blessings.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2026 at 12:52 PM
Thank you, Sam!
Poet Avatar
June 1, 2026 at 3:59 AM
Congratulations! Well done, Kim! With such heartfelt expression, I do not doubt that the final portion will be inspiring, just like yours. Absolutely stunning.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2026 at 4:07 AM
Thank you, Lasaad!
George Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 9:33 PM
Beautiful poem with a striking image. Congratulations Kim on your great win
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2026 at 4:07 AM
Thank you, Valsa!
Dietrich Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 8:58 PM
I like all your different synonyms for falling. Congrats here on your win
Rodrigues Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 9:03 PM
Thank you for noticing! Thank you!
Dronsfield Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 8:37 PM
Congratulations Kim, an excellent write!!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 9:03 PM
Thank you, Ken!
Jones Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 3:15 PM
Well done Kim! Congratulations on your win!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 5:20 PM
Thank you, Karen!
Hind Avatar
May 29, 2026 at 7:12 PM
deep work, raw to me- and beautiful
Rodrigues Avatar
May 31, 2026 at 2:15 PM
Thank you so much!
Rodgers Avatar
May 28, 2026 at 11:22 AM
Dear Kim, this is incredibly powerful. For a Sedoka, you managed to pack so much weight and visual impact into just six lines. I believe it’s the contrast in the second half that really leaves a mark. The transition from serenity to suddenly having "loved ones obstructed from view" is heartbreaking and so vivid. You captured that exact moment where chaos disrupts peace perfectly. Beautifully done. Blessings, Daniel
Rodrigues Avatar
May 28, 2026 at 1:46 PM
Thank you so much! I always appreciate what you comment!
Kauffman Avatar
May 28, 2026 at 11:14 AM
Wonderful entry for the contest, Kim. Your images are so vivid and visceral! Blessings.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 28, 2026 at 1:46 PM
Thank you so much!
Rolland Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 4:50 PM
enjoyed, thanks poet , don't know this beautiful place
Rodrigues Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 8:30 PM
Thank you, Yann!
Goldsmith Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 3:32 PM
I enjoyed reading. A wonderful read/write for a great picture. "Good Luck" I also did FALLING ROCKS. Have a great day writing away...........
Rodrigues Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 8:30 PM
Thank you, Paula!
One Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 11:12 AM
A very well written Sedoka my friend.. Nice arrangement of words to get your point across..
Rodrigues Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 8:30 PM
Thank you, truly! Hugs
DiMino Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 8:53 AM
Dangerous, powerful...and seductive. What more could one want from life!?
Rodrigues Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 10:04 AM
Thank you, Joe!
Kendrick Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 8:44 AM
Creative work, Kim. If for a contest, it reads like a winner to me. Way to go. Sara K.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 27, 2026 at 10:04 AM
Thank you, Sara! Hugs
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