Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Secret Lover - Four Lines Contest

Her bloodstained wedding dress clings to her shaking body
On the floor his corpse lies in a pool of congealing blood
He’d revealed his secret, he was in love with the best man
It was meant to be the happiest day of their lives…

Jan Allison

Contest – four lines
Sponsor - Broken Wings
09~20~15

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Amor Otong October 11, 2015 at 3:26 AM HELLO Jan, CONGRATULATIONS! Jan Allison October 11, 2015 at 3:37 AM Thanks Amor:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor September 28, 2015 at 11:08 PM Jan one of my favorites. Nice win! Jan Allison September 29, 2015 at 1:39 AM Thanks Michael... I do worry about my muse sometimes lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A September 28, 2015 at 9:55 PM Jan, Congratulations on your Four Line win. Forever **SKAT** Jan Allison September 29, 2015 at 1:39 AM Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts September 28, 2015 at 7:23 AM wow Jan what a brilliant four lined poem. he could have told her at a different time and not spoilt the cake rofl.......Seren Jan Allison September 28, 2015 at 7:31 AM LOL Seren - I found the pic after I wrote the poem I had to post it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tammy Reams September 27, 2015 at 9:22 AM Congrats on your win Jan! Sad but also funny! Jan Allison September 27, 2015 at 11:33 AM Thanks Tammy I agree with your comment lol and I simply had to post the picture when I found it - it is so apt :-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong September 26, 2015 at 5:33 PM I am sure somewhere, sometime this scenario may have happened, depending on the bride's stability. Great lines for this contest and a deserving win! Congrats my friend! Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 5:35 PM Thanks Connie I do worry about my muse sometimes she shocks me with what she comes out with so deep and dark but I have to go with the flow! :-) hugs jan xx

Charmaine Chircop September 26, 2015 at 4:30 PM Ohhh gee .... tragic and so well written. Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:47 PM Thanks Charma thankfully its fiction:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 24, 2015 at 11:38 PM Wonderful expressions Jan! Congrats on big win! Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:46 PM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless September 24, 2015 at 9:01 PM Jan this is quite a twist on the theme. Congrats on the win with this darkly deserving entry Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:46 PM Thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich September 24, 2015 at 3:26 PM Jan, I remember really liking this one earlier, so I am glad to see it in the top of her list. Big congrats for your great win. Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:45 PM I surprise myself with my dark writes Andrea) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez September 24, 2015 at 12:36 PM Oh...another on a wedding day...and getting darker! Congrats Jan! hugs! Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:44 PM Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley September 23, 2015 at 11:22 PM Well done, Jan, I bet that one kept the wedding photographer busy..... Viv x Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:44 PM LOl Mr Viv:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. September 23, 2015 at 9:29 PM Jan , when I read this piece, I knew you had yourself a winner. Congratulations on your "dark" win it was deserved:-)Alexis Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:44 PM Thanks Alexis I do worry about my must sometimes lol:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance September 23, 2015 at 6:42 PM ahhh...dark and murderous...perfect! Grats on your win!! Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:43 PM Thanks Cas I've not been active for a few days am just trying to catch up:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper September 23, 2015 at 5:53 PM Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:42 PM Thanks Eve sorry for the delay in replying not been active on soup recently:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman September 23, 2015 at 10:53 AM Devastating and heart breaking. (Sounds kind of like the way my wife would have reacted, HaHa) Wonderful write, Jan. Jan Allison September 26, 2015 at 4:41 PM LOl thanks James sorry for the delay in replying not been active on soup lately:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus September 21, 2015 at 10:44 AM Impressive and dark lines with a 'striking' final twist. So sorry for the ruined wedding-dress! gl in the contest. Hugs // paul Jan Allison September 21, 2015 at 5:10 PM Think the ruined dress would be the least of her worries lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 21, 2015 at 4:18 AM Tragic Jan, and like how you do your twist in the end, hugs~~~Olive ELoisa =`) Jan Allison September 21, 2015 at 5:10 PM Thanks so much Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton September 20, 2015 at 4:19 PM end of a dream Jan gl in contest hugs 7 Jan Allison September 20, 2015 at 4:22 PM Definitely not something you would want to hear!:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich September 20, 2015 at 2:49 PM Well, at least he was not in love with her bridesmaid. hahaha. Geeez, killing him off for what is only natural to him! Good one for the contest, Jan. Jan Allison September 20, 2015 at 2:53 PM He got his just desserts as in the picture lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman September 20, 2015 at 2:45 PM WOW Jan!! He shouldn't have reveal his secret!! This one should be a wonderfully received entry in Broken Wings' "Four Lines" contest. Best of Luck!! And a most obvious "7" -- of course!! Some secrets are best kept secret in this instance. Cheers and Best!! Gary Jan Allison September 20, 2015 at 3:49 PM We celebrate 25 years next June:-) hugs jan xx Gary Bateman September 20, 2015 at 3:11 PM Hello Jan!! Your words have that prophetic intensity for sure. And what you say on amplifies further the age-old proverb. Ingrid and I, I'm happy to say, are just about at our 25th year of marriage. No Secrets!! HA!! HA!! Cheer and Best . . . Gary Jan Allison September 20, 2015 at 2:48 PM I agree Gary - hell hath no fury like a woman scorned springs to mind!:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian September 20, 2015 at 2:41 PM OH MY!!! You sure know how to shock, don't you??? Yikes! Good one, Jan. Good luck, sweetie. Jan Allison September 20, 2015 at 2:44 PM Thanks Eileen I really don't know where this stuff comes from it shocks me I can write so deep and dark at times ... but my muse takes over and I have no control:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. September 20, 2015 at 2:34 PM Jan, I enjoyed this dark write.Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis Jan Allison September 20, 2015 at 2:39 PM not sure if it is dark enough Alexis but it is what my muse came up with:-( hugs Jan xx