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Seared Sunrise - Tautogram

Strength sparce, shattered self-esteem Should she shout, should she scream Stunned she sat, spirit suddenly shorn Should she show said 'spouse's scorn' Sorrow's sting submerges, silence surrounds, sanity slips Splintered, she seeks satisfaction searching spite's sinking ships

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/14/2023 11:21:00 AM

so so so sub-mersive

Fj Thomas
Date: 1/14/2023 4:30:00 PM

Lol I see what you did there!

Joseph May

Date: 12/19/2022 5:14:00 AM

Her lifeboat of sanity slips, as she grasps at the straws of spite, Very nicely penned Flo, Hope the Holiday Season finds you and yours in good health and in good spirits. Hugs

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/19/2022 3:12:00 PM

Thank you Joseph. I do look forward to my 7yo having a break. I have not the energy I once had; so since we virtual school him his breaks are my breaks lol. Thanks again Joseph

Craig Cornish

Date: 8/30/2022 2:08:00 PM

You haven't lost it girl! (of course, you know I mean that with respect!)

Fj Thomas
Date: 8/30/2022 2:12:00 PM

Lol of course. I wish I could agree Craig but this one kicked my mental butt lol! It was a nice workout though :)

Terry Flood

Date: 8/30/2022 11:43:00 AM

Maintaining the ‘misery’ throughout in a form that so freely lends itself to ‘comic’ was expertly done here, FJ. Congrats on your top placement. Terry

Fj Thomas
Date: 8/30/2022 2:11:00 PM

Thank you Terry. I was not satisfied with the two others I had written for that reason; they read more like a list of words rather than anything that made sense.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/30/2022 9:22:00 AM

Wow! Wow! Wow! - I can only do this. You have done the best. Congratulations!

Fj Thomas
Date: 8/30/2022 10:15:00 AM

That is so kind of you Christuraj, thank you.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/30/2022 9:21:00 AM

FJ, through your alliteration you have articulated such deep pain caused by spousal abuse. I especially love the last line. Congratulations and hats off to you! Blessings.

Fj Thomas
Date: 8/30/2022 10:14:00 AM

Thanks so much Sam!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 7/13/2022 8:48:00 PM

My, my! A winner all the way!

Fj Thomas
Date: 7/15/2022 9:07:00 AM

Thank you Seeker :) Has made me want to try with other letters lol.

Karen Jones

Date: 7/3/2022 3:49:00 AM

Witty alliteration! Well done.

Fj Thomas
Date: 7/3/2022 12:56:00 PM

Thanks Karen :)

John Lawless

Date: 7/3/2022 3:45:00 AM

suffering succotash this is stupendous!!! Nicely done FJ, not just a stream of slithering esses but a logical and meaningful write...not an easy feat with this form.

Fj Thomas
Date: 7/3/2022 12:56:00 PM

Lol thank you John! It definitely took a while to piece together.