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7/5/2024 for Sea Glass Poetry Contest sponsored by Craig Cornish

You were new and unguarded, Thoughtlessly discarded - You gave yourself for what? Broken and badly shaken, Used once and forsaken, You could only cut. A lifetime later, found, - Your sharp edges were round, Gorgeous as a pearl, A woman so diff'rent than One mistreated by a man - That shattered, sharp-edged girl. It must be a gripping tale. I wish to know each detail - How you became a queen. What happened, I'd like to know, But your beauty does not show Those long years in-between.

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Susan Ashley

Date: 8/30/2024 6:10:00 PM

Dear David, your amazing poem is beautifully expressed with creative use of metaphor and vivid imagery. Tender, poignant and potent! Congratulations for your win in Craig's contest. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

David Crandall
Date: 8/31/2024 11:11:00 AM

Thanks for your kind review, Susan!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/19/2024 12:29:00 PM

David, congratulations on your win A truly impactful metaphor wrapped in fresh images. Sending you many blessings!

David Crandall
Date: 8/31/2024 11:08:00 AM

Thanks so much Sam!

Ink Empress

Date: 7/23/2024 11:05:00 PM

This is so poignant, made me tear up for some reason, it is a very thoughtful poem that hits deep, especially felt the lines “ A woman so diff'rent than One mistreated by a man - That shattered, sharp-edged girl. It must be a gripping tale. I wish to know each detail - How you became a queen. ” soul hitting really! Theres so much, to learn and listen to from those that we find shattered, in nature and around too! What a profound write! Soulfully moving! Congratulations on your win:

David Crandall
Date: 7/24/2024 8:46:00 AM

Thanks, Ink Empress, I think that the best review I've ever had. It's nice to know that something struck a chord. I was thinking of people you sometimes see, and their beauty, but you never know the experiences they had and the hardship they overcame to arrive in that state.