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Scoundrels Living Loud

Two birds like mischievous teens
skipping, giggling as they cross
the pumps, dodging car scenes
through the oily and Oldsmobile dross.

Scoundrels living loud in their little world
chirping along, rippling through grime,
gabbling as they kick the can, twirling
and uttering in incoherent rhyme.

Oh the crime of poetic injustice,
those bobbing teeny hoodlums -
their imagery without substance.
No alliteration nor allusions.

But the human takes notice of the couple,
just too cute, their slim legs and beaks
skimming through the rainbow puddle
with sputtering tweets, puttering in the grease.

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David Fisher

Date: 9/10/2023 5:06:00 PM

Awesome way to call those birds, scoundrels! Such a refreshing way to look at nature...enjoyable poem, indeed.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/9/2023 7:56:00 PM

This is quite the imaginative write, my friend. Send some of these 'scoundrels' Chicago's way, so the hoodlums here can model themselves after them! Smiles, Gershon

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/10/2023 5:35:00 AM

LOL! Thank you, Gershon!

Ink Empress

Date: 9/9/2023 4:42:00 AM

“Oh the crime of poetic injustice” i love that line and the imagery and how soulful your descriptive lines flow, brilliant personification that i truly enjoyed reading. Love this

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/9/2023 9:44:00 AM

Thank you, I.E.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/9/2023 2:12:00 AM

Your personification is perfect, your imagery enticing. In short, a great poem. Hugs.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/9/2023 9:44:00 AM

I appreciate you so much, Victor!

Karen Croft

Date: 9/8/2023 7:06:00 PM

I enjoyed reading this!!! Thank you for your comments ??

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/9/2023 9:43:00 AM

Thank you!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/9/2023 9:40:00 AM

Thank you!

Joe Dimino

Date: 9/8/2023 3:46:00 PM

"But the human takes notice of the couple, just too cute, their slim legs and beaks skimming through the rainbow puddle with sputtering tweets, puttering in the grease." Soooo beautiful and well done! Excellent poetry throughout. Great imagery read. Thank you.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/9/2023 9:40:00 AM

Thank you, Joe!I appreciate knowing what you liked!

Paige Hind

Date: 9/8/2023 3:28:00 PM

An interesting take on those tweeting birds...! :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/9/2023 9:38:00 AM

Thank you, Paige!

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/8/2023 1:21:00 PM

'Two birds like mischievous teens'. What a wonderful first line to start our journey through so much imagery. 'Oh the crime of poetic injustice, those bobbing teeny hoodlums.' Definitely a fav.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/8/2023 1:45:00 PM

LOL…thank you so much, Jerry!

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/8/2023 11:02:00 AM

My friend, a very fine personification poem.. A fine pleasure to read too. God bless you...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/8/2023 11:40:00 AM

Thank you! <3

James Moore

Date: 9/8/2023 8:04:00 AM

Delightful imagery - and the title is perfect - for a variety scenes (I would have loved to have come it with myself for the poem I wrote this morning about the decay and corruption we have in the world today!).

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/8/2023 8:41:00 AM

Thanks, James!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/8/2023 7:38:00 AM

Splendid personification, Kim. Perfect images come to fore as I read these line: Two birds like mischievous teens skipping, giggling as they cross...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/8/2023 8:40:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay! :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/8/2023 6:13:00 AM

Very descriptive and entertaining, Kim! Janice

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/8/2023 7:02:00 AM

Thank you, Janice :)