Scary Scary Scary Moments

All time and effort lay, all that's best prayed
My one last say to be at last safe and paid
Though I got strayed and had been left to right swayed
All that's best prayed, all time and effort lay

Outcasted without trial, dismissed with deep vile
Grins taste of bile, nerves a fluttering volt of riles
No one to take hold with those futile ill revile
Dismissed with deep vile, outcasted without trial

They kiss without goodbye to free one last sigh
Forgiveness: legion of solitude, don't defy
Careful to tell not a lie, speaking with mind's eye
To free one last sigh, they kiss without goodbye

A hot stupid pride, a dip to cool in a tide
With turbulence, I still stride and take the ride
Indefinite guide, even nebulous hide
A dip to cool in a tide, a hot stupid pride

Too scared to give a try, too scared of break and cry
Bended knee, juiceless but I don't like to die
Tumbling to reach solely the wide ocean sky
Too scared of break and cry, too scared to give a try

(c) Olive Eloisa
2:15 am
June 02, 2014

Contest Name: Scary Moments
Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton
5th place, to God be the greatest glory!!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Fraser Avatar
March 19, 2015 at 3:58 PM
Collective rhyming in poetry, always a challenge, in this poem, achieved. Nice one Olive, hugs//Jamesxxx
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
March 24, 2015 at 7:26 AM
Thanks much JAmes. :) hugs too
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June 19, 2014 at 2:52 PM
Olive, thank you for the reply
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June 9, 2014 at 10:08 AM
OLIVE, Congrats on your Scary moment win. Thanks for sharing........Love Linda
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 17, 2014 at 12:04 PM
:) thank you LInda.. :D
Johnson Avatar
June 6, 2014 at 6:03 PM
Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 9, 2014 at 6:38 AM
Thank you Joyce.. :D God bless you.. :)
Nance Avatar
June 6, 2014 at 3:44 PM
Hey you did real well with this! I loved the rhyme, the words you used you don't see in everyday speech, but they rolled flawless off your tongue (or pen). Lots of hugs my friend :)
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 1:12 PM
Thanks Casarah..:) this actually my first try with this form..:) your comments so sweet. Hugs
Hamilton Avatar
June 5, 2014 at 10:30 AM
super rhyme Olive congrats on place ty for taking part hugs
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 1:05 PM
Thank you Shadow..:) it's my pleasure to do this.. I wasn't that sure if it will fit your theme but as I read the comments I think it did..:) God bless you more
Callus Avatar
June 5, 2014 at 9:51 AM
You did very well with this poem Olive_eloi! Once again your flair for rhyme is seen here. Congrats on your win; it is a deserved one. (tea or coffee?) // paul
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 12:58 PM
Coffee please..:D and doughnuts... Weee You know Paul that This my first try with this kind and am really not so sure that it will turn ok but wow it didn't expect this..:) to God be the greater glory..:)
Mehta Avatar
June 5, 2014 at 9:50 AM
Congratulations on a fine win in the contest, olive
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 1:03 PM
Thanks dr. Ram..:) GBU
Carrillo Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 10:19 PM
Olive; this is really good. You really put the rhyme in there. Scary moments, we all have. Take care and God bless you.... Lucilla
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 12:59 PM
Thank you sweet Lucy... :) GBU
May Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 4:51 PM
Very nice rhyme scheme Olive....nicely penned
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 12:56 PM
Thank you Joseph..:) GBU
Deschler Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 1:57 AM
I really love the rhyme in this. You did an amazing job on that alone.... The rest of the poem was so well expressed, the reader can really feel the fear in your words.... All in all, a really great write, Olive! Good luck in Shadow's contest!
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 12:55 PM
Thank you Kelly..:) your comments are appreciated much as they inspire me more..:) this a hurry write in a way..:)
Rivenbark Avatar
June 2, 2014 at 1:33 PM
I love the way this flows, great write :D
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 7:05 AM
Thank you for your flow of comment A. E. :) GBU
Onclaud Avatar
June 2, 2014 at 1:09 PM
we are somehow afraid to show our vulnerable side, eloi... love the deep mood of this one.. congrats on your wins.. i was waiting for your first 2 linesto rhymes in my past contest.. still, a beauty.. huggs
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 7:04 AM
oh!!!! i tried to changed it Nette... :( I was actually again lil disappointed of myself of not reading and understanding the instructions as it deals with bridges... :O i re reviewed and there I found my mistake... Thank you for your comments Nette.. they are so much.. :) GBU..
Williams Avatar
June 2, 2014 at 11:58 AM
Olive an excellent write, the internal rhymes are very good....David
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 7:02 AM
Thank you David. :) I appreciate you comment much.. :)
Bolton Avatar
June 2, 2014 at 11:52 AM
Love this one, and I'm with Jan on the interesting way you made things rhyme. One thing about it, you definitely got your point across in a superb way. Thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 6:57 AM
Thank You Jerry.. I am trying to concentrate on just one moment here however, as im writing this flowed.. :) Thanks..
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2014 at 9:10 AM
wonderful flowing verse really enjoyed the way it flowed so smoothly and the clever way it rhymed, hugs Jan xxxx
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 6:40 AM
Thank you Jan.. :) I appreciate that.. :) hugs and hugs.. :) your comments are kind as your heart.. :)
Dietrich Avatar
June 1, 2014 at 9:02 PM
I liked the last lines of each stanza. They seemed to be like summaries of each stanza and gave cohesion to your poem, Olive.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 6:39 AM
Thank you Andrea.. :) I appreciate your comment.. :) GBU
Vaso Avatar
June 1, 2014 at 7:07 PM
This is wonderfully written Olive, This reminds me of roller coasters!! :)
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 4:14 AM
:D it's thrilling, exciting and scary but all in all adventurous ride Arthur.. :D thanks much for the drop by... :) GBU
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