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Saturn's Outer Rim

I sit here at the candlelit table in a silent plead 
Nineteenth century red wine is not what I need 
For I do believe I am beginning to hallucinate
Which means all my senses start to dissipate

I could swear the waiter was in the form of you
All the other guests gave me a familiar view
Each back of their head, the same blonde mop 
My eyes screwed up, still the feeling won’t stop 

I blink twice and look at my poor date 
He must think he’s in for a dire fate 
This crazy woman who now sits before him 
Looking like she belongs on Saturn’s outer rim

He reaches out to give me a worried grasp 
‘Are you alright?’
I respond with a dramatic gasp
I swore for a moment I saw your eyes 
As we now tuck into our shepherd pies 

‘Did I really order this?’ I said 
Was this off the menu I read?

He nodded his head, he looked to the ground
We sat there for 10 whole minutes without a sound 
‘What’s his name, the man that still has your heart?’ 
My lips begin to quiver, but they did not part 

I told myself I would never settle for contentment 
Nor live my life and wallow in my hearts resentment 
But is that what I am doing, tonight at this dinner?
Whilst my patience of my own mind wears thinner 

When all I really want is to be in your warm embrace 
To knock on your door, and see your handsome face
That’s what I’ll do! 

Oh god, I do feel rather dreadful for this poor man 
His romantic intentions haven’t quite gone to plan
He’s looking even more confused as I grab my clutch 
I rummage inside, it’s only fair if we go Dutch

‘I’m ever so sorry, but there’s someone I must see’
As I put down some money and begin my flee 
I run past the post office and the corner store 
Through the park I race, finally reaching your door 

I knock three times and wait, my head starts to pound 
What if he’s not in or worse, he has another girl round?
The light in the hallway comes on, my hands start to shake 
I bet she’s beautiful, wouldn't that be the icing on the cake 

The door opens, you greet my with a shocked expression 
I sigh heavily, not knowing how to state my intention 
‘I thought I’d just drop by for a late night chat’ 
That was the worst line ever, my conscience spat 

Oh if I don’t do it now, I might never get the chance!
I grab his shirt and pull him out of his shocked stance 
I press my lips to his and bring him back to our outer rim 
His hands on my back, I feel his mouth curl into a grin 


Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Date: 12/26/2014 9:52:00 PM
Hi Faith, really special write.. I've just been reading on this subject so I found your word extra interesting!
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Faith Carmichael
Date: 12/27/2014 3:45:00 PM
thank you very much! I really enjoyed visiting old memories writing this :)
Date: 12/26/2014 4:55:00 PM
Hi Faith enjoyed your write very much, think your spellchecker played a joke on you in this line. The door opens, you greet my with a shocked expression. Perhaps you used me and my was sub'd. Oh that never happens to me ,lol. Well done, thanks
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Faith Carmichael
Date: 12/27/2014 3:45:00 PM
Oh dear! I do think I checked spelling? Thank you for picking that up! Also, thank you for your kind words Robert.
Date: 12/26/2014 3:35:00 PM
Excellent poem! A drama played nightly across the big, wide, dazzling blue globe i would wager. :) john.
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Faith Carmichael
Date: 12/26/2014 3:48:00 PM
thank you! I do hope so :) xxx