Sara's Waters

I approach the wooded trails and hear nothing save for my footfalls crunching in the soft snow. It is the kind of winter day that even a feather falls without drifting one way or the other. The trees stand straight, tall, and silent, their branches appearing as if they’ve been painted there. The water in the nearby stream is crystal clear and motionless, reflecting the cloudless morning sky. It was still, utterly still. crystal waters flow reflecting winter’s stillness peaceful Christmas scene Copyright © Sara Etgen-Baker | Year Posted 2023 A loud string of clear down-slurred two-parted whistles reach my ear. There is a little red cardinal tucked between thick foliage. Its an architectural beauty, an inquest. He looks at me with two round eyes then shows me a circular world made up of silence and noise. We are standing on a precipice of the Sacred. A unanimous ground holding space with Nature, Creature & Human, alike. winter evergreens snapshot of a Cardinal perched on my nightstand

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Date: 12/16/2023 9:48:00 PM
I love your Haibun, Vie. I'm glad you extended Sara's Haibun with your lovely thoughts and well written Haibun. The imagery was exquisite, and it flowed smoothly with hers. A FAV for my list, my friend. It is beautiful when poet inspire one another to write such beautiful poetry. Have a pleasant weekend! Bill
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Date: 12/16/2023 11:38:00 AM
You set the imagery so well here.. this is brilliant storytelling in your prose.. and great haiku to accompany it.. well written my friend..
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Date: 12/16/2023 1:01:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed the haibun story from us Silent One, take care Vie
Date: 12/16/2023 7:20:00 AM
Oh wow, I must admit that this looks like such a magical post with both of your words glowing so elegantly together and flowing with a whimsical essence.. Sara is truly an inspiration just as Ink said, her haibuns are always marvelous. And now reading your artistic words, dear Rose, this has enchanted my heart! I absolutely loveee all the amazing descriptions in your haibun and also that beautiful haiku in the end.. Ah, just so gorgeous and reflects poetic depth so vividly.. Wow!
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Date: 12/16/2023 1:01:00 PM
I appreciate your wonderful comment, were it not for Sara's first words mine would not have followed, glad you enjoyed this Hiya
Date: 12/16/2023 6:55:00 AM
Ahhh sweet rose you write so well and sara definitely an inspiration, queen of Haibun, im still reading her work to oneday be able to do prose. Your words flow well with hers and the way you’ve painted imagery is so stunning too. I especially loved “ A loud string of clear down-slurred two-parted whistles reach my ear. There is a little red cardinal tucked between thick foliage.” So descriptive! Impeccable! Definitely a fave
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Date: 12/16/2023 1:00:00 PM
Always a pleasure sharing space with another poet. We are a family of dreamers letting it happen on page, thanks for your visit :)
Date: 12/16/2023 6:19:00 AM
You paired your thoughts and descriptions beautifully with Sara's. Awesome write!
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Date: 12/16/2023 12:59:00 PM
Sara really inspired me this morning. I think its wonderful when two poets are on the same page. :)
Date: 12/16/2023 5:35:00 AM
What a nice collaboration of sorts. You both painted awesome word portraits
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