Sandcastles- a Sequel To Imperceptibly

Imperceptibly you withdrew
Like the ebbing of the tide
Leaving sand in your wake
My heart’s wound open wide

I just stood there all alone
As I looked out at the sea
Longing just to plunge in
Have your love wash over me

I was left with only sand
Inside my empty heart
And so to pass the time
Built sandcastles, works of art

My incessant flow of tears
Wet the sand enough for me
So I could mold and fashion
As I turned my back to the sea

They were majestic structures
Filled with my wistful dream
Each fantasy that I had
Made those sandcastles gleam

The sun burned my naked form
As I worked away the time
Each room, each moat and line
Was a wish for you to be mine

Suddenly, oh sweet surprise
I felt water gush over me
Sandcastles were swept away
I was made love to by the sea

At last, you've come back to me
The tide of your love has turned
The touch of your fluid arms
Cools what the sun has burned

I jump and swim in your waves
Then I lie back as you caress
You tease as you pull me down
I’m immersed in tenderness

The tide of your love had ebbed
But now you’ve washed over me
I will not ask reasons why
I’m as happy as can be.

Eileen Manassian Ghali

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 5/2/2013 9:32:00 AM
I loved the personification of the sea and how you took a spin on the usual cliches. Last stanza was amazing. The moment you start asking why, is the moment you start to doubt it. Children don't ask why doing silly things make themselves happy... they just relish in the feelings of it. Anyway... beautiful poem! The more you look at it, the more food for thought you can take from it.
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Date: 5/1/2013 4:31:00 PM
Ask no questions if you're sure the reasons are pure, I love the way you use the sea in this, and how you wiled away the hours. Excellent. Take care, Richard
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