Paul Callus Poet Haiku

Sadistic Pleasure

lusty sensations

     pleasurable tingling touch

           of stinging nettles


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     Contest: Traditional Haiku
    Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton
            29th June, 2015

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Rhoda Tripp December 30, 2017 at 1:58 AM I don't know, Paul...those first couple lines got me, then the last dropped me, like thud. Lol. Love a twisted ending. Ya got me! Great write. Paul Callus December 30, 2017 at 5:13 PM Thank you, Rhoda:) I guess I do surprise myself at times with what crosses my mind!! See below Debbie's version of this poem...I love it! ~ Regards // paul

Debbie Duncan August 12, 2015 at 3:53 PM Love the Haiku, 7 for sure. Thanks for coming to read my Sin City. I wrote it a few yrs ago, When I seen a commercial on TV :) Paul Callus August 12, 2015 at 4:45 PM Thank you for reading and commenting, Debbie! The high rating is also appreciated. ~ Take care:) // paul

Funom Makama July 22, 2015 at 12:01 PM this is an awesome piece. Its nice visiting your pages once again. Definitely a 7! Paul Callus July 23, 2015 at 10:17 AM Glad you enjoyed, Funom! Thank you for reading, and for the high rating. // paul

Sara Kendrick July 15, 2015 at 3:23 PM Not anything about stinging nettle over here that is pleasurable..LOL..I don't want to experience its touch..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Paul Callus July 16, 2015 at 10:16 AM It sure does sting, Sara! Then, once it's boiled it loses its strength (reminds me of Samson and his unplanned haircut!). All the best. // paul

Andrea Dietrich July 6, 2015 at 9:14 PM just now saw the question you asked me a while back on my comment here. NOPE, never did this and never WILL. haha Paul Callus July 8, 2015 at 3:55 PM I used to weed my mum's garden with bare hands; my sister tried it once, but never again!!

Anne-Lise Andresen July 2, 2015 at 2:52 PM - Congratulations, Paul a great win !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 4:15 PM Many thanks, Anne Lise:) Your visit and congrats are much appreciated. hugs // paul

Funom Makama July 2, 2015 at 10:52 AM Great poem with a lovely message. Thanks for the Grade 7 share. Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 4:13 PM It's a pleasure to visit your posts, Funom; thank you for reading mine and commenting. All the best. // paul

Poet Destroyer A July 2, 2015 at 12:05 AM enjoyed this one Paul, good luck in the contest:) *luv, p.d.

Arthur Vaso July 1, 2015 at 9:26 PM Lucky nette!!!!!! L( Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:12 PM Hmmmm...reminds me of my poem "Nettled"!!

Debbie Guzzi July 1, 2015 at 8:55 PM I like the idea of using the last 2 lines this would be a good senryu! [the sting of nettle/ brings pleasure from pains sharp touch:she moans] that would show lust instead of telling - Light & Love! Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:49 PM Thank you Debbie; your suggestions always make sense:) Positive criticism is much appreciated. Regards // paul

David Mohn July 1, 2015 at 7:32 PM Conrats Paul on this prickly winner...yours was surely the most unique :) Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:43 PM Thank you David; your comments are much appreciated; yours was a deserving top winner! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 1, 2015 at 9:04 AM Kudos PAul with your haiku!!!! Hugs and I woould love to have ice creams and pizza please! :D hahhaha! ~Olive Eloisa Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:53 PM Hi Olive_eloi:) Glad you like this haiku. Do you want to cover the pizza with ice-cream?:) hugs // paul

Alexis Y. July 1, 2015 at 5:38 AM Congratulations on your win Paul. :-) Alexis Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 4:11 PM Thank you Alexis; always pleased to have you popping in:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 1, 2015 at 4:33 AM Congrats on ur awesome winning haiku Paul! Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 4:04 PM Thank you, Upma:) So pleased you enjoyed. All the best. // paul

Afolabi Muideen July 1, 2015 at 3:47 AM Excellent write Paul and congratulation on your awesome win........A.M. Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 4:08 PM You are very kind, Afolabi...thank you!! // paul

Poet Destroyer A July 1, 2015 at 12:54 AM paul, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:56 PM Thank you Linda:) Hope life is not being hard on you! Hugs // paul

Viv Wigley July 1, 2015 at 12:26 AM Moral of tale- always do a thorough reconaissance of terrain before sewing one's wild oats. Hopefully only your knees got stung. great Haiku, Paul, congrats on your placing. Regards, Viv Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:28 PM Love your sense of humour, Viv:) I'll keep your advice in mind! Thank you for a pleasant visit. Regards // paul

Skat A July 1, 2015 at 12:12 AM Lovely win, Paul.... SK Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:23 PM Thank you Skat:) // paul

Constance La France June 30, 2015 at 8:42 PM Paul, congratulations on your placement with this wonderful write and thanks for visiting my haiku 10 Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:10 PM Thank you Constance; visiting your poems is my pleasure:) Regards // paul

Kim Merryman June 30, 2015 at 8:15 PM A clever haiku, Paul! Congrats on your placement in the contest! Love, KIm Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:14 PM Glad you enjoyed it, Kim! Hope you've been having a lovely weekend! // paul

Pandita Sietesantos June 30, 2015 at 8:04 PM I love the wit, imagery and of course your surprise ending! I rate it a 7! Congratulations on a well-deserved fine win! Pandita Paul Callus July 5, 2015 at 3:09 PM Your feedback is lovely and abundant, Pandita; so is your rating! Thank you....a pleasure to have you visiting:) // paul

John Lawless June 30, 2015 at 7:14 PM I find a bit of the metaphor hidden in the tight form of this haiku. Nice one Paul Paul Callus July 4, 2015 at 5:18 PM You're correct, John. Glad you enjoyed. Thank you // paul

Connie Marcum Wong June 30, 2015 at 6:59 PM Wow, quite a winning poem Paul. I enjoyed this much! Congrats! Paul Callus July 4, 2015 at 5:14 PM Thank you Connie; excuse the late reply, quite busy at the moment; have a backlog of comments to answer to!! All the best. // paul

Eve Roper June 30, 2015 at 5:00 PM Paul, congratulations on your win a 7. Hugs Eve Paul Callus June 30, 2015 at 5:40 PM Thank you for the congrats and the high rating, Eve! Always pleased to have you stopping by:) hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich June 30, 2015 at 1:41 PM Quite the imagery in this one!! big congrats, paul. Paul Callus June 30, 2015 at 5:00 PM Have you ever tried pulling out these weeds with your bare hands, Andrea? The electrifying sensation lasts for ages:) // paul

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