Rusty

Though I've been rusty and alone
behind this shed for many years,
I won’t bemoan my wasted state,
for life has held more joy than tears.

I do recall some dark days when
I’d just come from the factory,
a shiny bright-red dream-mobile.
A rich young man paid cash for me.

A fine garage became my home.
I was impressed, but soon I knew
that I was just a ride to him.
His coldness and my sadness grew.

My rescuer, a teenage boy,
became my owner and my friend.     
He named me “Pal” and cared for me.
Fifteen years later came the end.

Though all my parts had ceased to work,
he kept me. He knows how I feel!
He still comes out to visit me  
and sits behind the steering wheel.


posted July 17, 2019

entered the Favourite Poem in Rhyme from July 2019 Contest
on August 4, 2020
Sponsor: Julia Ward

July 2019, placed 7th of 13 in Craig Cornish's "Old Jalory" contest

October 5, 2021
entered in the "R" New or Old Poetry Contest         Placed 2nd
Sponsor: Constance La France
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Kauffman Avatar
October 26, 2021 at 10:12 AM
Janice, the wistful memories of a car expressed like a once loved, now discarded, treasure. Wonderful metaphor for discarded friendships or people. Congratulations on your win!
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October 7, 2021 at 5:52 PM
Hi Janice, You’ve penned such a well-written personification. You gave the old car a voice. Well done. Congratulations on a well-deserved win. Have a great day:-)Alexis
Allison Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 2:03 PM
Fabulous personification, many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Goldsmith Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 9:16 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write. I love this one. Have a blessed day with your win...............
La France Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 8:04 AM
Janice, congratulations on your win in my "R" contest with this emotional poem, so well done ~ love and serenity _Constance
Makama Avatar
July 30, 2019 at 1:15 PM
Your consistency makes your already wonderful craft majestic. Yet another lovely piece. This is really great..
Canerdy Avatar
July 30, 2019 at 1:20 PM
Funom, thank you so much! Janice
Messina Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 6:56 AM
I love this Janice. What a great story...Congratulations on your win. :)
Canerdy Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 2:16 PM
Charles, thank you so much! Janice
Cornish Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 6:54 AM
Wonderful personification Janice and so true
Canerdy Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 2:18 PM
Thank you, Craig, and THANK YOU so much for placing my entry! Janice
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 12:09 AM
This brought tears to my eyes Janice. It is going into my Faves! When a poem can move me to tears, I remember it fondly for many years. Congratulations on your deserving win that is a podium win for me! xxoo : )
Canerdy Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 2:19 PM
Connie, thank you so much for your kind words! Janice
Gauthier Avatar
July 27, 2019 at 9:42 PM
That is SO sweet, Janice. Love it. Congrats on your well deserved win.
Canerdy Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 2:19 PM
Thanks so much, Line! Janice
Rodrigues Avatar
July 27, 2019 at 6:13 PM
I love the final verse and the personification of the jalopy!
Canerdy Avatar
July 27, 2019 at 7:59 PM
Thanks so much, Kim! Janice
Laurie Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 1:39 AM
G'day Janice ... what a great verse you've written here. It just had love written all over it - thank you Janice - Lindsay
Canerdy Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 7:21 AM
THANKS A MILLION, Lindsay! Janice
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