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Rusted and Busted Contest

Sinful Rusted Red Firebird Sometimes I think back to those years I wish I had been just a bit older Nobody notices a fourteen year old boy Funny though, I noticed everything Under her paisley top she didn't wear a bra Long blond hair flowing out the car window Robert took her for a drive in his 68 Firebird Undressed her right there in the back of the car Silly giggling sounds from behind fogged windows The thought of the two of them was exciting Everything seemed much more vivid back then Don't know if anything has ever felt so intense again Robert was the cool one back in those days Easy good looks and of course that car Dangerous he was, in a James Dean sorta way Firebirds still evoke sexy images for me I bought this rusted piece of junk just to restore it Rusted sure, but when I'm done it will be cherry red Eleven years I've owned this busted old car But it seems like it will never really be mine I sit in it sometimes and imagine I'm with her Running my hands through her gorgeous blonde hair Don't judge me, I know it's just a silly boyhood fantasy. Sorry Casarah, I can't bold on my IPad.

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 6/29/2016 5:05:00 AM

Congrats for your WIN Richard, with this wonderful piece!! ;-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 5:13:00 AM

Thanks Teddy.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/29/2016 2:56:00 AM

Congratulations on a superb win, Richard:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 3:58:00 AM

Thanks Jo.

Eve Roper

Date: 6/27/2016 5:43:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your wonderful win! Hugs Eve

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 3:58:00 AM

Thanks Eve. Hugs Rick.

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/27/2016 3:02:00 PM

Very 'outside the box', Richard! But I love how you wrote this amazing Acrostic. Congrats on your fine placement. Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 3:57:00 AM

Thanks Sandra.

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/27/2016 2:19:00 PM

What a fun, nostalgic story you have woven, from the memories that linger of those teen years. Well done, Richard!! I loved this view, the thoughts from a !4 year old boy who never grew up :)

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/27/2016 10:22:00 AM

You motored your way to my winners list with this creative and story acrostic, I enjoyed it very much...cars and fantasys go together hand in hand ;)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 3:57:00 AM

Thanks for picking this one Casarah.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/19/2016 5:48:00 PM

Amazing poetry based on the ruined auto, Richard. I better hurry and post mine up soon. it's a great contest and I have no idea how she will narrow down her winners.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 3:57:00 AM

Thanks Andrea. ;0)

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/16/2016 9:04:00 AM

1st line of your 3 line stanza- could it end with "...back in those days", or some such? I feel as though you are repeating words currently, and that distracts for me, from the fineness of this write. Love the feel, and enjoy the tale.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/16/2016 9:56:00 AM

Great suggestion, I made the change. Thanks Scott.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/16/2016 6:27:00 AM

When you get her restored she may let you know her secrets Richard.; ) I enjoyed this nostalgic little piece. Good luck in the contest! #7 ; )

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/16/2016 7:52:00 AM

Thanks Connie, it's all a flight of imagination. Thanks for the great comment.

Red Fiery

Date: 6/16/2016 2:38:00 AM

Oh boy....how did I miss this one..it's never too late to comment on a poem like this..!!! When were teenagers things were so different and our imagination could take us to all those places where we always wanted to be.A.Strong and bold write ! A7 ~ Cheers and hugs ~ Red

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/16/2016 7:54:00 AM

Thanks Red, it was a fun one to write. I hope Casarah likes it for her contest. Hugs Rick.

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/15/2016 9:32:00 PM

Candy apple red as I remember Richard. Well done, good luck in the contest...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/16/2016 2:32:00 AM

Thanks Charlie.

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 6/15/2016 12:54:00 AM

Beautifully sketched and painted memories of the yesterday’s dear friend. A 7+ for this sweet memory recall. My good wishes for your contest entry. Love and best wishes always…Ravindra K Kapoor

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/15/2016 6:44:00 AM

Hi Ravindra, it is all just imaginary for the contest. Thanks for the good wishes.

Eve Roper

Date: 6/14/2016 9:26:00 PM

Love the memories, Richard, good luck in the contest :-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/15/2016 6:45:00 AM

Thanks Eve, it is just a fictional write. Mind you I wouldn't mind a 68 firebird.

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 6/14/2016 9:19:00 AM

Well written good luck xxx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/14/2016 11:59:00 AM

Thanks Wendy.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/14/2016 7:57:00 AM

Great take on the theme Richard - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/14/2016 12:00:00 PM

I meant Jan not Han. Hugs Rick.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/14/2016 11:59:00 AM

Thanks Han;0)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/13/2016 11:51:00 AM

sizzle sizzle....you got this going ON! :) I can just imagine it all in my head....hmmmmm...dangerous. Good luck

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2016 5:12:00 PM

Thanks Eileen cars to evoke youthful passion. Hugs Rick.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/13/2016 7:43:00 AM

You are... forgiven, Richard! You have the right to fantasize, my friend, Haha! Excellent writing you brought back memories! Thank you!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2016 7:55:00 AM

I grew up more in the seventies but as an 7 year old in 1968 I was becoming aware of women and cars. For the contest though I thought a 14 year old was more fitting.

Becca Teagan

Date: 6/13/2016 3:59:00 AM

I think you did a great job on this for the contest, Rick! Very creative!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2016 7:01:00 AM

Thanks Becca, there's just something about old cars.

Mama Bear

Date: 6/12/2016 8:44:00 PM

What guys won't do for a girl even if she is just a memory. Hope you do well in the contest. Love Mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 11:09:00 PM

Thanks for being the first to comment mom, love ya.