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4/27/25 for Edward Ibeh's This Or That, Vol 32 Poetry Contest

Title chosen: Runner

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He knows he has to run; it’s imperative. He sprints down a trail, passing tall pines on both sides. His eyes dart everywhere around himself as he surveys every large rock or bush that he goes dashing past. There is so much undergrowth. How can he leave this path? Yet he knows he will inevitably have to. It is growing dark – too dark. What can he do? What can he do? He stops and allows for his ears to listen. Every little sound arouses suspicion. Before the sun drops, he will have to leave the path, and so he scuttles, first to the right of it, paying close attention to places where a person might hide. Behind rocks, thick trunks, even bushes where a person would be able to squat low. He finds nothing. He knows his pace is very fast. He needs to switch to the other side of the path. How did he let this happen? With great frustration, he hears his heart drumming fury. Panting, he scurries around the densest areas, his eyes doing a sweep of every spot - for any place where one could stoop down. Aha, he spies it – almost invisible behind tall weeds – a sort of cavity in this woods of endless ground cover. With a bound, he reaches it. Immediately, he perks up his ears. He discerns with great relief an almost imperceptible moan. The girl, hands still tied behind her back, crouches in utter terror inside a shallow cave. If she had escaped, he would have been for the rest of his life (figuratively speaking) on the run.

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Date: 5/6/2025 12:32:00 AM
Congratulations dear poetess on your high placement in this contest with a pleasant figurative poem on the journey of life. Sending the blessings of light.
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Date: 5/5/2025 4:25:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest with this awesome, thoroughly engrossing narrative, Andrea. It was a pleasure to read!
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Date: 5/4/2025 10:22:00 PM
Hi Andrea, back to your poem with Congratulations on your win !
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Date: 5/2/2025 3:29:00 PM
Andrea, you know how to build suspense. There are all kinds of possibilities to consider....most of them seem nefarious. Hope you are well. Let's try to stay out of harms way!! Later!
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Date: 4/29/2025 10:37:00 AM
Truly chilling Andrea! Wow--you should right for shows--Dateline has been my go to for a bit. Thriller!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/29/2025 12:55:00 PM
thanks, I love stuff like that.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/29/2025 12:55:00 PM
you should get ID channel, it's got SO many true crime depictions.
Date: 4/28/2025 5:54:00 AM
great emotion the story can be everywhere, in a forest, in a town, i think metaphorically that we all are "stalked", thanks for the beautiful work
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Date: 4/28/2025 5:53:00 AM
My mind too has been racing with this runner. With bated breath I was following his footsteps! At the end, what a dramatic conclusion and what courage and optimism it infused in him. You have indeed given a lovely version to the race. All the Best dear Andrea.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/28/2025 7:53:00 AM
I hope you understood what happened, Valsa!
Date: 4/28/2025 4:38:00 AM
The hunted or so it seemed was the one who hunted but then he will be looking over his shoulder the rest of his life until he is caught which will then it will be another game of being stalked when he is in prison. Creative and filled with emotion. Thanks for sharing. Sara K
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Date: 4/28/2025 2:53:00 AM
Ah what an engaging read this is dear sweet Andrea! I absolutely love the flow of your storytelling and also how through your words i see this scene unfold! Its beyond brilliant and kept me hooked till th end! I felt like i watched a lil movie! You should definitely do more storytelling as it comes so easy for you! A very different and creative take on this prompt! Youv nailed it! Best wishes! Sending you light always
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/28/2025 10:31:00 AM
Thanks. I wrote stories in my youth. It's easier for me than free verse
Date: 4/28/2025 1:11:00 AM
You are running quite a lot. With your speed you left me behind, poetically speaking.
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Date: 4/27/2025 8:16:00 PM
Wow! This 'runner' did not see the ending coming at all. Great write, Andrea... Drama and suspense all the way. Gold medal for you!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/27/2025 8:32:00 PM
Thanks so much. I had a lot of fun with this one

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