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Quote: "The ruins show that this castle was magnificent once"--Indian idiom In the ruins of a castle, a tale unfolds, A story of beauty, where history molds. Rundown remnants whisper secrets untold, Of a lady with smiles, enchanting and bold. Once she graced halls in her youth, A love story sparked, a flame in truth. With time, the melodies aged like fine wine, Yet, love endured, a vintage divine. Through changing seasons, our hearts intertwined, Spring's bloom to autumn's decline. In winter's chill, roots held firm and cold, Never rundown, a love story to be retold. Vibrant life once, now marked by age, Yet, a resilient spirit on history's page. Though the body may falter, and time takes its toll, The charm persists, a timeless soul. As the castle crumbles, and walls decay, Love's echo lingers, it will not sway. In the rundown echoes of a once mighty tower, A resilient love, an enduring flower.

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Date: 4/23/2024 5:57:00 AM
Jay, congratulations on your win in my contest with this amazing poem, I love the image and quote too, Constance
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Date: 2/28/2024 9:16:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I really enjoyed reading your wonderful "Rundown" write again. Have a great/fun day writing away...............
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Date: 2/27/2024 9:22:00 AM
A timeless soul indeed, Jay. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 2/27/2024 8:43:00 AM
Jay your Rundown poem is fantastic, congratulations on the win in Constance’s contest… Beryl
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Date: 2/22/2024 2:49:00 PM
An enchanting love poem, Jay. My favorite line was the last, "A resilient love, an enduring flower." Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, my friend. Bill
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Date: 2/18/2024 2:40:00 AM
You made this well written poem both interesting and unique Jay. As you say, rundown, doesn't mean over and done. Charm can still exist. Extremely well done .
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Date: 2/15/2024 10:06:00 PM
When we see old dilapidated castles, we often think about what dramas must have been enacted within their interiors. They may have many stories to tell, of love, heartache, conquests, and wars! A lovely poem.
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Date: 2/15/2024 4:46:00 PM
I love old buildings and even castles; I believe they have stories to tell if one just listens. You've captured those story possibilities beautifully. Your poem resonated with me. Am faving
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Date: 2/15/2024 12:42:00 PM
- These dilapidated walls have many stories to tell... yours is a lovely story, Jay :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 2/15/2024 12:14:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Rundown" write/great picture... Have a blessed day writing away.........................
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