Routine

Day has brightly dawned Sun in his gold chariot, comes in royalty The struggle for livelihood, is on till the fall of night

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/24/2022 6:04:00 AM

I love the way you brought the sun in, riding in his chariot!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/21/2022 8:15:00 PM

'Ain't this the truth,' as a good friend would always say to me. Spot-on, Valsa. Superb utilization of the tanka form, indeed! ~ Gershon

Silent One

Date: 2/21/2022 10:10:00 AM

Lovely imagery in your tanka... once again a great selection of words..

Jcb Brul

Date: 2/21/2022 7:40:00 AM

A brilliant tanka...The richness of its imagery fills the senses. Vivid and crisp.

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/21/2022 6:23:00 AM

Such a stunning imagery dear Valsa, the day dawned and the sun coming up in a gold chariot...exquisitely crafted.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/21/2022 4:57:00 AM

I like your description Valsa: Sun in his gold chariot, comes in royalty... so well said!

Anil Deo

Date: 2/21/2022 2:30:00 AM

Glad your sense of routines us noted in color upon God's good Earth. Shalom shalom Sis