John Lawless Poet Free verse

Rooting For 8 To 5

ROOTS

They came seeking a future not their own
carrying naught but memories too soon to fade
into the substance of a union of hearts.
In leaving left the spitting image of themselves
to gather up their memories lest they fade.

1/3/2017

submitted to – ROOTING FOR 8 TO 5 – Poetry Contest

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Joanna Daniel January 11, 2017 at 2:35 AM This is amazing, John:) such depth of thought in so few lines:) congratulations on a well deserved win:) a 7:) John Lawless January 12, 2017 at 8:29 PM Thanks for stopping to read and comment Jo..

Andrea Dietrich January 10, 2017 at 3:50 PM wow, you really said it all here, John. Congrats on a splendid win. John Lawless January 12, 2017 at 8:29 PM Thank you Andrea

Janis Medders Tobechi January 9, 2017 at 11:48 PM I really like this. It seems like something that should be on an Ellis Island wallh9. Congratulations on your top placement. John Lawless January 12, 2017 at 8:29 PM Janis, I visited Ellis Island last August. I don't think my parents entered through there but came a little later.

Reason A. Poteet January 9, 2017 at 7:45 PM So fitting to the prompt of roots. Sorta reminds me of Joshua and the Twelve Stones from the Jordan. Great read, John, congrats on your work and of course, on the placement. John Lawless January 12, 2017 at 8:28 PM Thank you for stopping to read and comment

Sandra Haight January 9, 2017 at 7:27 PM Beautiful poem, John. So much presented in so few words! Congratulations on your fine First Place win! Sandra John Lawless January 12, 2017 at 8:26 PM thank you Sandra

Daniel Turner January 9, 2017 at 4:10 PM Congratulations, John:)

Agnes Krampe January 9, 2017 at 1:33 PM Stunning! I love how you tell the gist such a huge story in such few, beautiful, words. Congrats on your win, John. Agnes John Lawless January 9, 2017 at 4:41 PM Thanks Agnes for your kind words, these shorter form challenges always tempt the muse.

Eve Roper January 9, 2017 at 1:23 PM congratulations on your win :) Eve John Lawless January 9, 2017 at 4:40 PM thanks Eve alway nice to hear from you.

Nette Onclaud January 9, 2017 at 12:55 PM love the 'legend' feel of this fine work, john, and how it ended with wonderfully.. a topper this one... congrats on your big win and thanks for being part of my challenge..huggs John Lawless January 9, 2017 at 4:39 PM Always a privilege to enter one of your contest Nette

Daniel Turner January 4, 2017 at 8:55 AM Well done, John. I really never got into that family tree thing, too many broken branches. Love the poem:) John Lawless January 9, 2017 at 4:40 PM Hey Daniel with a last name like ours we don't even picnic under the branches....

Chris Green January 4, 2017 at 6:11 AM Wow, this was so cool. So much is said, a lifetime's worth plus, in five short lines. Great job John. Good luck in the contest John Lawless January 4, 2017 at 6:38 AM Thanks Chris. They were uprooted and then set down new roots in a new land.

Darren White January 4, 2017 at 3:37 AM That is my lineage. I love these 5 very powerful lines very much. Good luck in the contest. Darren White January 4, 2017 at 10:03 AM Exactly that yes. A strange dream. John Lawless January 4, 2017 at 6:36 AM It is never easy to leave everything and arrive with nothing....We call it the American Dream but it does come with a cost.