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Rooting For 8 To 5

ROOTS

They came seeking a future not their own
carrying naught but memories too soon to fade
into the substance of a union of hearts.
In leaving left the spitting image of themselves
to gather up their memories lest they fade.

1/3/2017

submitted to – ROOTING FOR 8 TO 5 – Poetry Contest

Copyright © John Lawless | Year Posted 2017

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Joanna Daniel Date: 1/11/2017 2:35:00 AM This is amazing, John:) such depth of thought in so few lines:) congratulations on a well deserved win:) a 7:) Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/12/2017 8:29:00 PM Thanks for stopping to read and comment Jo..

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/10/2017 3:50:00 PM wow, you really said it all here, John. Congrats on a splendid win. Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/12/2017 8:29:00 PM Thank you Andrea

Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 1/9/2017 11:48:00 PM I really like this. It seems like something that should be on an Ellis Island wallh9. Congratulations on your top placement. Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/12/2017 8:29:00 PM Janis, I visited Ellis Island last August. I don't think my parents entered through there but came a little later.

Reason A. Poteet Date: 1/9/2017 7:45:00 PM So fitting to the prompt of roots. Sorta reminds me of Joshua and the Twelve Stones from the Jordan. Great read, John, congrats on your work and of course, on the placement. Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/12/2017 8:28:00 PM Thank you for stopping to read and comment

Sandra Haight Date: 1/9/2017 7:27:00 PM Beautiful poem, John. So much presented in so few words! Congratulations on your fine First Place win! Sandra Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/12/2017 8:26:00 PM thank you Sandra

Daniel Turner Date: 1/9/2017 4:10:00 PM Congratulations, John:) Login to Reply

Agnes Krampe Date: 1/9/2017 1:33:00 PM Stunning! I love how you tell the gist such a huge story in such few, beautiful, words. Congrats on your win, John. Agnes Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/9/2017 4:41:00 PM Thanks Agnes for your kind words, these shorter form challenges always tempt the muse.

Eve Roper Date: 1/9/2017 1:23:00 PM congratulations on your win :) Eve Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/9/2017 4:40:00 PM thanks Eve alway nice to hear from you.

Nette Onclaud Date: 1/9/2017 12:55:00 PM love the 'legend' feel of this fine work, john, and how it ended with wonderfully.. a topper this one... congrats on your big win and thanks for being part of my challenge..huggs Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/9/2017 4:39:00 PM Always a privilege to enter one of your contest Nette

Daniel Turner Date: 1/4/2017 8:55:00 AM Well done, John. I really never got into that family tree thing, too many broken branches. Love the poem:) Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/9/2017 4:40:00 PM Hey Daniel with a last name like ours we don't even picnic under the branches....

Chris Green Date: 1/4/2017 6:11:00 AM Wow, this was so cool. So much is said, a lifetime's worth plus, in five short lines. Great job John. Good luck in the contest Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 1/4/2017 6:38:00 AM Thanks Chris. They were uprooted and then set down new roots in a new land.

Darren White Date: 1/4/2017 3:37:00 AM That is my lineage. I love these 5 very powerful lines very much. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 1/4/2017 10:03:00 AM Exactly that yes. A strange dream. John Lawless Date: 1/4/2017 6:36:00 AM It is never easy to leave everything and arrive with nothing....We call it the American Dream but it does come with a cost.