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Rooting For 8 To 5

ROOTS They came seeking a future not their own carrying naught but memories too soon to fade into the substance of a union of hearts. In leaving left the spitting image of themselves to gather up their memories lest they fade. 1/3/2017 submitted to – ROOTING FOR 8 TO 5 – Poetry Contest

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/11/2017 2:35:00 AM

This is amazing, John:) such depth of thought in so few lines:) congratulations on a well deserved win:) a 7:)

John Lawless
Date: 1/12/2017 8:29:00 PM

Thanks for stopping to read and comment Jo..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/10/2017 3:50:00 PM

wow, you really said it all here, John. Congrats on a splendid win.

John Lawless
Date: 1/12/2017 8:29:00 PM

Thank you Andrea

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 1/9/2017 11:48:00 PM

I really like this. It seems like something that should be on an Ellis Island wallh9. Congratulations on your top placement.

John Lawless
Date: 1/12/2017 8:29:00 PM

Janis, I visited Ellis Island last August. I don't think my parents entered through there but came a little later.

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 1/9/2017 7:45:00 PM

So fitting to the prompt of roots. Sorta reminds me of Joshua and the Twelve Stones from the Jordan. Great read, John, congrats on your work and of course, on the placement.

John Lawless
Date: 1/12/2017 8:28:00 PM

Thank you for stopping to read and comment

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/9/2017 7:27:00 PM

Beautiful poem, John. So much presented in so few words! Congratulations on your fine First Place win! Sandra

John Lawless
Date: 1/12/2017 8:26:00 PM

thank you Sandra

Daniel Turner

Date: 1/9/2017 4:10:00 PM

Congratulations, John:)

Agnes Krampe

Date: 1/9/2017 1:33:00 PM

Stunning! I love how you tell the gist such a huge story in such few, beautiful, words. Congrats on your win, John. Agnes

John Lawless
Date: 1/9/2017 4:41:00 PM

Thanks Agnes for your kind words, these shorter form challenges always tempt the muse.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/9/2017 1:23:00 PM

congratulations on your win :) Eve

John Lawless
Date: 1/9/2017 4:40:00 PM

thanks Eve alway nice to hear from you.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/9/2017 12:55:00 PM

love the 'legend' feel of this fine work, john, and how it ended with wonderfully.. a topper this one... congrats on your big win and thanks for being part of my challenge..huggs

John Lawless
Date: 1/9/2017 4:39:00 PM

Always a privilege to enter one of your contest Nette

Daniel Turner

Date: 1/4/2017 8:55:00 AM

Well done, John. I really never got into that family tree thing, too many broken branches. Love the poem:)

John Lawless
Date: 1/9/2017 4:40:00 PM

Hey Daniel with a last name like ours we don't even picnic under the branches....

Chris Green

Date: 1/4/2017 6:11:00 AM

Wow, this was so cool. So much is said, a lifetime's worth plus, in five short lines. Great job John. Good luck in the contest

John Lawless
Date: 1/4/2017 6:38:00 AM

Thanks Chris. They were uprooted and then set down new roots in a new land.

Darren White

Date: 1/4/2017 3:37:00 AM

That is my lineage. I love these 5 very powerful lines very much. Good luck in the contest.

Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 10:03:00 AM

Exactly that yes. A strange dream.

John Lawless
Date: 1/4/2017 6:36:00 AM

It is never easy to leave everything and arrive with nothing....We call it the American Dream but it does come with a cost.