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Room 88

I saw her walking out the door, Eyes met as we took the lift, Hands touched, when we hit the bar, I asked her out, that was her gift. Went for a drive by sea and shore, We watched the tide, I sensed a shift. She took me to her room and said: “Before we start, my name is Ted!” The moral of this tale is plain to see, Where there’s a doubt, retreat hastily.

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Date: 1/29/2020 2:04:00 PM
Take away its fault of not being quite an Ottava Rima, the storyline is brill and worth its honorary mention. . . : )
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Desi Gall
Date: 1/31/2020 9:06:00 AM
Thanks for the feedback Indiana, I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Have a great day, Desi.
Date: 7/1/2019 7:15:00 AM
Hi Desi, great poem! Unfortunately you did not rhyme the first words so I had to give you an HM. Thanks for entering my contest...hugs Charlie
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Desi Gall
Date: 7/3/2019 10:19:00 AM
Hi Charlie looks like I made a dog's dinner out of my very first Poetrysoup contest. I must admit I noticed the error but forgot to pull the poem before the deadline. In the circumstances it was very kind of you to give me an HM. Thanks and best wishes Desi.