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Across the vast Californian Death Valley I went out for a drive The temperature gauge was reading a hundred and twenty five. Despite the unforgiving temperature, I was staying nice and cool I had the air conditioning on full blast, because I am no fool. I had been on the road for about an hour, so I pulled over for a break The desert scenery was awesome, so some pictures I thought I'd take. I slowly got out of my car taking my camera and boy it was so hot After about ten minutes of snapping, some great pictures I'd got. I walked quickly back to my car and went to get my key It wasnt in my pocket, and fear started to overcome me. I realised I didn't have my hat or water they were on the front seat And knew I wouldn't last too long in the deserts unforgiving heat. I started to walk on the highway it was a good four hours to town And praying another vehicle would soon appear so I could flag it down. After two hours of walking I heard it, the rumbling of a truck Help was coming at long last and I couldn't believe my luck. The driver stopped and said "hey buddy you look like you need a ride " I was on the verge of collapse, but so overjoyed I almost cried. We got to town and I wanted to give him something for rescuing me Opened my camera bag to get some money out and damn there was my key. Written 4th August 2021 An interesting Couplet Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Funom Makama.

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Valsa George

Date: 11/20/2021 7:16:00 PM

The unexpected turn at the end of most of your poems is what makes them unique. Such things possibly happen too ! Great one Tom ! Rightly deserves a trophy !

Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/17/2021 2:52:00 PM

Thank you very much Valsa I'm happy you enjoyed it. Tom

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/13/2021 10:05:00 AM

I see this not only won, but it got a trophy. Awesome!!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/13/2021 11:12:00 AM

Thank you very much Andrea, glad you enjoyed it. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom

Silpika Kalita

Date: 10/11/2021 3:44:00 PM

Belated congratulations on the prestigious win! Kept captivated from the beginning to the end with the same rhythm! God bless your poetic voyage! Regards Silpika

Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/11/2021 11:31:00 PM

Thank you very much Silpika, Im happy that you enjoyed it. Hope your week is going well. Tom

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 9/3/2021 12:00:00 PM

congrats! such a fantastic story! in a situation like that, my mum used to say ‘ search each item, one be one’! a nightmare in that heat!!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 9/3/2021 1:00:00 PM

Thank you very much Krish, although I'd love to see it I know I'd struggle in the heat. One thing for sure mums know best. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Supraja Kannan

Date: 8/15/2021 7:58:00 PM

Amazing!!! What a brilliant climax!!! Thoroughly enjoyed reading this witty write...

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/16/2021 12:52:00 AM

Thank you very much Supraja, im happy that you enjoyed it. Enjoy the week ahead. Tom

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/12/2021 6:04:00 PM

Congratulations, Tom!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/13/2021 2:55:00 AM

Thank you very much Kim, hope you have a lovely weekend. Tom

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/12/2021 5:32:00 PM

oh my, isn't that just how it always happens. Just the other day I lost MY keys in the movie parking lot. It's a key that is remote!! So I could start my car yet I could NOT locate where the key was. I only knew it had fallen somewhere in my car. So we ran in late for the movie and when we went back to the car we searched and searched. The key had got stuck in the middle area where things can drop down into a small space!! Loved this. Big congrats for your win

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/13/2021 2:57:00 AM

Thank you very much Andrea, your certainly not alone its something we've all done at one time or another, glad you found it. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/12/2021 2:03:00 PM

This is simply brilliant!!! I absolutely adore this. A fave for sure. God bless you with many more like this one. Love, Gina

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/12/2021 2:26:00 PM

Thank you very much Gina, im pleased that you enjoyed it and thanks too for the fave. Tom

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/12/2021 12:19:00 PM

- Of course this was a top winning poem ... congratulations so much, Tom :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/12/2021 12:47:00 PM

Thank you very much Anne for your return visit and congrats. Hope you're keeping well. Tom

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/12/2021 3:26:00 AM

Glad to see that this won the trophy, Tom, my heartfelt congratulations:)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/12/2021 8:42:00 AM

Thank you very much for your return visit and congrats Jo, much appreciated, hope you are well. Tom

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/11/2021 11:44:00 PM

Looks like the sun got to you earlier than you thought, maybe 5 minutes taking photos max. Love the poem and the theme Tom

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/12/2021 12:22:00 AM

Thank you Harry, im fair skinned, think I'd only last a minute in that heat. Tom

Indiana Shaw

Date: 8/11/2021 11:18:00 AM

Murphy's law . . . ; )

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/11/2021 11:22:00 AM

Lol, certainly.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/11/2021 6:48:00 AM

Tragically amusing, my friend, Tom. I enjoyed your story as always! Stay safe!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/11/2021 7:03:00 AM

Thank you very much Demetrios. Im happy you enjoyed it. Tom

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/11/2021 3:55:00 AM

Well, I hope this did not happen but you made a very humorous sitcom out of it anyway. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It got my attention and carrier me on further down the page. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for stopping by my page. Sara

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/11/2021 4:04:00 AM

Thank you very Sara, a fictional write but its a place I'd like to visit taking plenty of water and a spare key lol. Tom

Justin Abdool

Date: 8/10/2021 4:25:00 PM

Good story, Tom. And beautiful scenery. It sounded like a scorching day but I'm glad you found a ride and your key too. A nice happy ending. Justin.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/11/2021 12:57:00 AM

Thank you very much Justin, If it happened to me I think i would have.cooked in the.heat, lol. Hope you're keeping well. Tom

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 8/9/2021 4:26:00 PM

Hello Tom ... what could have turned to tragedy ended up giving me a chuckle. We're warned out here; if your vehicle breaks down in the outback don't leave it, and that's because of the dry heat - enjoyed your poem greatly Tom - Lindsay

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/10/2021 12:09:00 AM

Thank you very much Lindsay, I would have done but Id lost the damn key lol. Tom

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/9/2021 3:40:00 PM

OMG I hope this is fiction if it isn't I'd be weeping too :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/9/2021 4:45:00 PM

Thank you very much Vie, thankfully a fictional write but I'd love to see Death Valley. Tom

W.A. Cholt

Date: 8/9/2021 2:00:00 PM

A very entertaining poem with a great twist at the end. Well done.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/9/2021 2:25:00 PM

Thank you very much WA, im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/9/2021 1:41:00 PM

Ha ha ha, I can see that happening. Congrats on a fine win Tom.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/9/2021 1:44:00 PM

Thank you very much for your congrats Richard, something we all do and they're usually in the place you least expect. Tom

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/7/2021 11:27:00 AM

Hello Tom, thi is some road trip you had. It is a horrible thing to forget your keys. a panick attack takes hold on you wondering where the key is. Enjoy your day my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 8/8/2021 12:06:00 PM

Hello tom, yes many of us miss place our keys. I always leave mine in the same spot. Enjoy your day my friend.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2021 11:30:00 AM

Thank you very much Darlene, I think many of us mislay our keys and they're usually in a prominent place that we've overlooked. Hope you're keeping well. Tom

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 8/7/2021 8:17:00 AM

Amazingly impressive the flow of your poetic feel and story telling flair! A true delight while savouring each single word, line and event! What a gem, Tom! I salute your dexterity! Absolutely deserving all the honour and recognition! Congratulations on your win! Hope you are doing great.. Stay safe and blessed.. My deepest regards and blessings.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2021 9:08:00 AM

Thank you very much for your congratulations Besma, im pleased that you enjoyed it. Im keeping well and.hope that you are too. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Beata Agustin

Date: 8/7/2021 3:35:00 AM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me chuckle while relating... God bless you.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2021 3:50:00 AM

Thank you very much Beata, im pleased that you enjoyed it. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Lisa Brown

Date: 8/7/2021 1:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your win! Really enjoyed this! Well done :-)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2021 2:09:00 AM

Thank you very much Lisa, I think we've all mislaid our keys from time to time, we never learn. Tom

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/6/2021 9:20:00 PM

Impressive Tom! Toasty! Death Valley reached 130 degrees about a week ago and, believe it or not, that didn't break the record!!! I was hooked from your first wonderfully constructed couplet - one flowing effortlessly from another! Congratulations on your win. Love the ending! Over Fork Over!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2021 2:11:00 AM

Thank you very much Sam, I'm not really built for the heat, I'd probably cook lol. Over Fork Over. Tom

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 8/6/2021 7:32:00 PM

Congratulations, what an impressive story, Tom! The ending is really shocking, and hilarious! I had been to Death Valley in California - interesting place! BW ~ Mala

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/7/2021 2:09:00 AM

Thank you very much Mala, a place I'd love to see. Tom