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Ringing In the Phantom Curse

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Caught in the throes of depression
he fights an endless battle which
makes his life a constant misery.
Phantom warriors haunt his mind.
High-pitched are their battle cries,
severe and persistent. Fatigued
he succumbs to their intensity.
Roaring on, they launch assault
after assault, fully knowing that 
ultimately a resounding victory will
be theirs. Bells ring triumphantly!

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© 11th March, 2017

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Susan Ashley

Date: 1/8/2018 3:55:00 PM

A brilliant write, Paul. I think your title is ingeniously perfect for the content of your poem with which you write about with intensity and sensitivity. I can't imagine how terrible this condition must be to live with but your last line sums up the debilitation poignantly.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 1/9/2018 9:33:00 AM

Thank you for the insightful comments, Susan. I wrote this poem for a contest, but I think that the sponsor did not catch on to what I was talking about. ~ warm regards, my friend. // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 3/20/2017 9:01:00 AM

Great job on this challenge. I can't imagine how awful it must feel for people who suffer from Tinnitus. Not an easy job to write a successful poem on this topic. You succeeded and went beyond that goal. Love your poetry.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/20/2017 4:51:00 PM

Yours too are very meaningful comments, Armand; thank you for an encouraging visit. Regards // paul

Emile Pinet

Date: 3/14/2017 4:57:00 PM

Your word choice is good and the message sent is strong and emotional, highlighting the futility of existing in a nightmare and calling it a dream. Emile.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/20/2017 4:49:00 PM

Please Emile excuse the late reply; somehow your comment skipped my attention! As usual you feedback is spot on! Thank you. Regards // paul

Omojewve Emmanuel Brown

Date: 3/13/2017 6:47:00 AM

Your voice is great , strong and well expressed. Loving your works.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2017 12:42:00 PM

Many thanks, Omojewve. Your comments fill me with encouragement. Regards // paul

Judy Ball

Date: 3/12/2017 7:02:00 PM

Well done Paul. My husband had a brother who heard voices. It was very sad because he was nice enough but had weird thoughts. He could be pretty scary sometimes. He had to be sent away where they could take care of him and he couldn't hurt anyone. You describe this malady well. God Bless and a big 7 from me. JB

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2017 12:08:00 PM

Thank you, Judy. Hearing voices must be pretty weird. In the case of Tinnitus the person can hear a sort of continuous ringing, which is enough to send one mad. Others sounds are: roaring, buzzing, and hissing. Regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 3/12/2017 8:45:00 AM

I like your take on the theme Paul..Well done

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2017 10:03:00 AM

Thank you, Joseph. Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 3/12/2017 5:35:00 AM

Excellent. Very strong write and well expressed too. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks fro sharing it.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2017 9:58:00 AM

Your 'excellent' together with the rest of your feedback is appreciated, Ravi. Thank you! Regards // paul

Chris Hagy

Date: 3/11/2017 6:56:00 PM

Hi Paul:) Interesting write... there are a few things I can think of that he could be suffering from. (I'm sure that's what I look liked like with a migraine! haha) I guess I'm not medically informed enough to understand the connection with bells, but I'm guessing it's an ear related condition? Enjoy your day:)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2017 4:53:00 AM

Sorry about your migraine, Chris. In this case you are right...it's an ear related condition. Ringing (and other sounds) ... TINNITUS. In all my life I only met one person who suffers from this condition, but I understand that it is much more common than that. ~ Have a lovely day:) Regards // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/11/2017 6:19:00 PM

very powerful, paul! i love the way you've described what he is experiencing - you've really captured that agony quite well...

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2017 8:37:00 AM

Thank you, Ilene. I tried putting myself in his shoes; it's hard to express what such persons really feel! Best regards // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/11/2017 6:06:00 PM

Depression is truly a huge battle, you have expressed this so well.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2017 8:35:00 AM

It is, Arthur; in this case depression is a side effect of this person's condition. Regards // paul

Lynn Marie

Date: 3/11/2017 4:33:00 PM

An important and powerful piece. So many suffer silently, the honesty of your words will hopefully bring awareness to others that they are not alone. Really great writing Paul :-) blessings, lynn

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2017 8:22:00 AM

Thank you for your positive contribution, Lynn. Sometimes we little realize what others are passing through. We all have our aches and pains, but some have a heavier burden to carry. ~ Blessings and regards // paul