Rhapsody Renewal

Written: February 1st, 2024
             ________________________________________

I propose they should read a poem
Set it in light and let it serve as a totem
Similar to a kaleidoscope display
Alas, listen to the beehive and sway

I quit
            writing love poetry
        ever since that day
                    I saw starlight                     
                      suffocating
                              to death
                                  in a smother
                    of cindered dreams
          and the moon burying itself
                    under the wings of
                                immigrating pledges

            I 
         waited 
      for    dawn
     to usher me
   through the dark           
    rummaging the 
     clouds for a 
       remain of 
         sunrise
            dot
             

to dip my feather in
                    its shine just to find   
blank blackness
                            cramming the horizon
so I stopped  writing of 
               l
                  i
               g
                  h
               t

I'm struggling still
                   to grasp
                 your susurrations                        
       to be used to
                        the rhythm
            my fingers shiver with             
                              at the sound of
                their echo

in which letters oscillate across the page
akin to sunflowers swinging in the hand
with a sense of a spring breeze in a cage
Blows between the lines in another land
                      
                       twilight 
                           of
                      musings

as ink drips
            shimmering
                  in a rainbow aurora
    and poems blossom
                          back to life
                                       drenched
                                            in
                                      morning dew

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 2/6/2024 7:40:00 AM
Ah dr sotto im surprised i didnt comment or read this before, but i must say i loved it every bit of it and the way youve delivered it in such an artistic manner too is beyond clever of you. I especially love the opening lines, the cadence and captivating rhythm of your exquisite diction! And how descriptive it is, truly is impressive! Congratulations on your well deserved win. Thank you for sharing this with us, always a pleasure reading and praising your work
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Date: 2/2/2024 11:33:00 AM
Sotto, An impressive odyssey has been crafted by you with this intensely beauteous work. Each word, line and concept touches on emotions which strike a universal chord. Articulate and stirring in its heartfelt depth Howard
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Date: 2/1/2024 5:40:00 PM
Deep internal struggles, you posed questions and thoughts a lot of poets feel, I'm sure. You do it so well.
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Date: 2/1/2024 5:11:00 PM
The ups and downs of expectations and reality with and positive ending offering hope. I like it, my friend. The format adds intrigue to the poem. Thanks for sharing your poetic gift with us. Bill
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Date: 2/1/2024 1:57:00 PM
Wonderfully creative presentation, my friend. And awesome diction:--I saw starlight suffocating to death in a smother of cindered dreams and the moon burying itself under the wings of... another winning poem from you, Lasaad.
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Date: 2/1/2024 12:35:00 PM
Your poem invites readers into the intimate journey of the poet's creative process, weaving together themes of love, loss, and the quest for renewal. The imagery of the poem, from the kaleidoscope display of words to the suffocating starlight and buried moon, evokes a sense of melancholy and longing.
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Date: 2/1/2024 11:27:00 AM
- Beautifully written, Las :) - Ends bright as sunshine in spring ... new possibilities :) - hugs
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