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Rhapsody Renewal

Written: February 1st, 2024 ________________________________________ I propose they should read a poem Set it in light and let it serve as a totem Similar to a kaleidoscope display Alas, listen to the beehive and sway I quit writing love poetry ever since that day I saw starlight suffocating to death in a smother of cindered dreams and the moon burying itself under the wings of immigrating pledges I waited for dawn to usher me through the dark rummaging the clouds for a remain of sunrise dot to dip my feather in its shine just to find blank blackness cramming the horizon so I stopped writing of l i g h t I'm struggling still to grasp your susurrations to be used to the rhythm my fingers shiver with at the sound of their echo in which letters oscillate across the page akin to sunflowers swinging in the hand with a sense of a spring breeze in a cage Blows between the lines in another land twilight of musings as ink drips shimmering in a rainbow aurora and poems blossom back to life drenched in morning dew

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Date: 2/6/2024 7:40:00 AM
Ah dr sotto im surprised i didnt comment or read this before, but i must say i loved it every bit of it and the way youve delivered it in such an artistic manner too is beyond clever of you. I especially love the opening lines, the cadence and captivating rhythm of your exquisite diction! And how descriptive it is, truly is impressive! Congratulations on your well deserved win. Thank you for sharing this with us, always a pleasure reading and praising your work
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Date: 2/2/2024 11:33:00 AM
Sotto, An impressive odyssey has been crafted by you with this intensely beauteous work. Each word, line and concept touches on emotions which strike a universal chord. Articulate and stirring in its heartfelt depth Howard
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Date: 2/1/2024 5:40:00 PM
Deep internal struggles, you posed questions and thoughts a lot of poets feel, I'm sure. You do it so well.
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Date: 2/1/2024 5:11:00 PM
The ups and downs of expectations and reality with and positive ending offering hope. I like it, my friend. The format adds intrigue to the poem. Thanks for sharing your poetic gift with us. Bill
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Date: 2/1/2024 2:09:00 PM
dearest Sotto--your poem took me on a fabulous journey--first of melancholy (almost despair) and then one of hope and renewal. The structure of the poem was engaging and captivating---especially this one: I waited for dawn to usher me through the dark rummaging the clouds for a remain of sunrise dot A creatively brilliant poem, Sotto. You continue to wow me with your insights and creativity. you poetess friend,Sara
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Date: 2/1/2024 1:57:00 PM
Wonderfully creative presentation, my friend. And awesome diction:--I saw starlight suffocating to death in a smother of cindered dreams and the moon burying itself under the wings of... another winning poem from you, Lasaad.
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Date: 2/1/2024 12:35:00 PM
Your poem invites readers into the intimate journey of the poet's creative process, weaving together themes of love, loss, and the quest for renewal. The imagery of the poem, from the kaleidoscope display of words to the suffocating starlight and buried moon, evokes a sense of melancholy and longing.
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Date: 2/1/2024 11:27:00 AM
- Beautifully written, Las :) - Ends bright as sunshine in spring ... new possibilities :) - hugs
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