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Revenge of the Green Eyed Monster For Contest

I am a real life green-eyed monster 
For I was born with green eyes
I try to keep the monster at bay
But sometimes she rears her ugly head
It’s something I’ll always have to live with
My first memory of the monster appearing…
Well I guess I was about five years old
Mum would give us our pocket money
You were older than me so you got more
ALL it meant was you could buy more sweets than me
I would watch you devour each one
You never thought of sharing them
But you’ve had weight issues all your life
Whereas I’m a petite size eight….
I wonder who is jealous now!

Contest  - Jealousy
Sponsor – SKAT
09~08~15

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Michael Tor Date: 9/17/2015 7:14:00 PM Jan great win. Congratulation Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:31:00 AM Thanks so much Michael:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/17/2015 2:50:00 AM better late than never.. greeat write on jealousy, jan.. my hours are so limited this week!.. congrats on your win!.. huggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:32:00 AM I'm struggling to even get on soup at the moment :-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 9/16/2015 5:01:00 PM Jan, congratulations on your win:-) Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/18/2015 8:31:00 AM Thanks so much Alexis:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/15/2015 11:57:00 PM Wonderful write on jealousy Jan n a great win! Big congrats! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/16/2015 2:51:00 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A Date: 9/15/2015 11:21:00 PM Jan, congratulations on your win. Thank you for the support. Love SKAT Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/16/2015 2:51:00 AM Thanks Skat I look forward to reading the winning poems:-) hugs jan x

James Fraser Date: 9/14/2015 2:12:00 PM So many will have lived your words Jan, and what moods and attitudes there would have been, hugs//James xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/14/2015 2:20:00 PM I am sure other's can relate to what I felt James but in the long run it hasn't done me any harm:-) hugs jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 9/11/2015 10:24:00 PM AAAAH! Revenge is a dish served cold and yours is sweeeet! Wonderfully creative and I enjoyed the irony! Touche, my friend! This is another winner! Pandita Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/12/2015 6:21:00 AM I had fun with this Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx

Njeri Hunjeri Date: 9/10/2015 5:04:00 PM This is a great revenge write. Jealousy with its monstrous claws digging deep as time passes. All the best Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/10/2015 5:08:00 PM Thanks Njeri:-) I had fun with this contest:-) hugs jan xx

Anu Nayak Date: 9/10/2015 5:52:00 AM Dear Jan, hahaha.....nice twist at the end of poem....sweet jealousy....good luck in the contest dear.loved it!...love, Anu:-) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/10/2015 6:22:00 AM Thanks for dropping by Anu:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/10/2015 1:10:00 AM The twist in the end makes this lil poem strong! Nice one Jan.. ~Olive ELoisa =") Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/10/2015 6:21:00 AM Thanks Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman Date: 9/9/2015 8:00:00 PM Oh, sweet revenge. Is this really the sweet Jan I've come too know. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/10/2015 6:21:00 AM Yes its really me lol:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian Date: 9/9/2015 6:29:00 PM Hey, sweetie...You sure know how to get your own. This is a clever write, but then again....you are one smart cookie...Oh...the diet kind of cook....with....no calories...AS IF!!! Love ya. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/10/2015 6:20:00 AM I love to write with a twist and the end result makes me smile LOL:-) hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen Date: 9/9/2015 5:22:00 PM I love the imagery of this one and the funny revenge within.... A well written piece. Would like to see your comment at my page "eve moon". Good luck in the contest..........A.M. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/9/2015 5:50:00 PM Will pop over afolabi:-) thanks for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/9/2015 4:02:00 PM yeahhh... i really get this greeat write, jan... who is really the envious one?.. love it.. by the way, my american size is small or 4-6, english size---18, lol... huggs! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/9/2015 5:50:00 PM Gosh size 4 - 6 is tiny:-) hugs jan xx

Catherine Labeau Date: 9/9/2015 2:52:00 PM size 4 and sometime 2 depend on the store salvation army a bounty in the children section Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/9/2015 5:49:00 PM I'm not that small lol:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/8/2015 11:44:00 PM hahaha. SWEET revenge!! This is one SHWEET POEM!! I think Skat will love it. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/9/2015 1:16:00 AM It sure is sweet revenge Andrea lol - as you know I have no issues with my weight:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort Date: 9/8/2015 6:32:00 PM Oh my goodness. Revenge happens eventually. That is just too funny!!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/9/2015 1:14:00 AM This was written totally from real life Duke and I am better off for the experience although at the time it happened it wasn't nice lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka Date: 9/8/2015 5:45:00 PM Karma is a B is it not? Love the ending here, the scathing tone works well for your topic. ~janet Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/8/2015 5:47:00 PM Thanks Janet it's written from the heart! :-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 9/8/2015 12:12:00 PM lol...the circle of life...sometimes less is more Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/8/2015 2:23:00 PM In this case definitely Tim lol:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France Date: 9/8/2015 11:37:00 AM Jan, your poem is so "C H A R M I N G'' and so real, best of luck in the contest and thanks for visiting, but she loved another ~~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/8/2015 11:59:00 AM Thanks so much Broken Wings - it is written from personal experience too as many of my poems are:-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 9/8/2015 8:48:00 AM Excellent. Well penned. All the best for the contest. Thanks for sharing it. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/8/2015 11:25:00 AM Thanks so much Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 9/8/2015 8:42:00 AM Love this, Jan - especially the last three lines! All the best for the contest...I predict it will do very well! Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/8/2015 11:25:00 AM Thanks Sandra - I don't think my mother ever understood why I felt so envious of my sister being able to buy more sweets than me - but in hindsight I was very lucky!:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Tor Date: 9/8/2015 8:39:00 AM Great ending. Good luck on contest Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/8/2015 11:24:00 AM Thanks Michael:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance Date: 9/8/2015 7:35:00 AM that is like sweet revenge.. hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/8/2015 7:36:00 AM LOL it sure is Cas:-) hugs Jan xx