Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Revenge of the Green Eyed Monster For Contest

I am a real life green-eyed monster 
For I was born with green eyes
I try to keep the monster at bay
But sometimes she rears her ugly head
It’s something I’ll always have to live with
My first memory of the monster appearing…
Well I guess I was about five years old
Mum would give us our pocket money
You were older than me so you got more
ALL it meant was you could buy more sweets than me
I would watch you devour each one
You never thought of sharing them
But you’ve had weight issues all your life
Whereas I’m a petite size eight….
I wonder who is jealous now!

Contest  - Jealousy
Sponsor – SKAT
09~08~15

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Michael Tor September 17, 2015 at 7:14 PM Jan great win. Congratulation Jan Allison September 18, 2015 at 8:31 AM Thanks so much Michael:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud September 17, 2015 at 2:50 AM better late than never.. greeat write on jealousy, jan.. my hours are so limited this week!.. congrats on your win!.. huggs Jan Allison September 18, 2015 at 8:32 AM I'm struggling to even get on soup at the moment :-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. September 16, 2015 at 5:01 PM Jan, congratulations on your win:-) Alexis Jan Allison September 18, 2015 at 8:31 AM Thanks so much Alexis:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 15, 2015 at 11:57 PM Wonderful write on jealousy Jan n a great win! Big congrats! Jan Allison September 16, 2015 at 2:51 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A September 15, 2015 at 11:21 PM Jan, congratulations on your win. Thank you for the support. Love SKAT Jan Allison September 16, 2015 at 2:51 AM Thanks Skat I look forward to reading the winning poems:-) hugs jan x

James Fraser September 14, 2015 at 2:12 PM So many will have lived your words Jan, and what moods and attitudes there would have been, hugs//James xx Jan Allison September 14, 2015 at 2:20 PM I am sure other's can relate to what I felt James but in the long run it hasn't done me any harm:-) hugs jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos September 11, 2015 at 10:24 PM AAAAH! Revenge is a dish served cold and yours is sweeeet! Wonderfully creative and I enjoyed the irony! Touche, my friend! This is another winner! Pandita Jan Allison September 12, 2015 at 6:21 AM I had fun with this Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx

Njeri Hunjeri September 10, 2015 at 5:04 PM This is a great revenge write. Jealousy with its monstrous claws digging deep as time passes. All the best Jan Jan Allison September 10, 2015 at 5:08 PM Thanks Njeri:-) I had fun with this contest:-) hugs jan xx

Anu Nayak September 10, 2015 at 5:52 AM Dear Jan, hahaha.....nice twist at the end of poem....sweet jealousy....good luck in the contest dear.loved it!...love, Anu:-) Jan Allison September 10, 2015 at 6:22 AM Thanks for dropping by Anu:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 10, 2015 at 1:10 AM The twist in the end makes this lil poem strong! Nice one Jan.. ~Olive ELoisa =") Jan Allison September 10, 2015 at 6:21 AM Thanks Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman September 9, 2015 at 8:00 PM Oh, sweet revenge. Is this really the sweet Jan I've come too know. Jan Allison September 10, 2015 at 6:21 AM Yes its really me lol:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian September 9, 2015 at 6:29 PM Hey, sweetie...You sure know how to get your own. This is a clever write, but then again....you are one smart cookie...Oh...the diet kind of cook....with....no calories...AS IF!!! Love ya. Jan Allison September 10, 2015 at 6:20 AM I love to write with a twist and the end result makes me smile LOL:-) hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen September 9, 2015 at 5:22 PM I love the imagery of this one and the funny revenge within.... A well written piece. Would like to see your comment at my page "eve moon". Good luck in the contest..........A.M. Jan Allison September 9, 2015 at 5:50 PM Will pop over afolabi:-) thanks for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud September 9, 2015 at 4:02 PM yeahhh... i really get this greeat write, jan... who is really the envious one?.. love it.. by the way, my american size is small or 4-6, english size---18, lol... huggs! Jan Allison September 9, 2015 at 5:50 PM Gosh size 4 - 6 is tiny:-) hugs jan xx

Catherine Labeau September 9, 2015 at 2:52 PM size 4 and sometime 2 depend on the store salvation army a bounty in the children section Jan Allison September 9, 2015 at 5:49 PM I'm not that small lol:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich September 8, 2015 at 11:44 PM hahaha. SWEET revenge!! This is one SHWEET POEM!! I think Skat will love it. Jan Allison September 9, 2015 at 1:16 AM It sure is sweet revenge Andrea lol - as you know I have no issues with my weight:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort September 8, 2015 at 6:32 PM Oh my goodness. Revenge happens eventually. That is just too funny!!! Jan Allison September 9, 2015 at 1:14 AM This was written totally from real life Duke and I am better off for the experience although at the time it happened it wasn't nice lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka September 8, 2015 at 5:45 PM Karma is a B is it not? Love the ending here, the scathing tone works well for your topic. ~janet Jan Allison September 8, 2015 at 5:47 PM Thanks Janet it's written from the heart! :-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith September 8, 2015 at 12:12 PM lol...the circle of life...sometimes less is more Jan Allison September 8, 2015 at 2:23 PM In this case definitely Tim lol:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France September 8, 2015 at 11:37 AM Jan, your poem is so "C H A R M I N G'' and so real, best of luck in the contest and thanks for visiting, but she loved another ~~ Jan Allison September 8, 2015 at 11:59 AM Thanks so much Broken Wings - it is written from personal experience too as many of my poems are:-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam September 8, 2015 at 8:48 AM Excellent. Well penned. All the best for the contest. Thanks for sharing it. Jan Allison September 8, 2015 at 11:25 AM Thanks so much Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight September 8, 2015 at 8:42 AM Love this, Jan - especially the last three lines! All the best for the contest...I predict it will do very well! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison September 8, 2015 at 11:25 AM Thanks Sandra - I don't think my mother ever understood why I felt so envious of my sister being able to buy more sweets than me - but in hindsight I was very lucky!:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Tor September 8, 2015 at 8:39 AM Great ending. Good luck on contest Jan. Jan Allison September 8, 2015 at 11:24 AM Thanks Michael:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance September 8, 2015 at 7:35 AM that is like sweet revenge.. hugs Jan Allison September 8, 2015 at 7:36 AM LOL it sure is Cas:-) hugs Jan xx