Return To the Decay

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decided not to return to decay of a charming house...vibrant colours lost, enchanting bird-songs gone, memories grey. covered with gloomy dust and dismal frost forlorn doors creak, pleasing melodies stopped! precious rosette on floor, walls unpainted. carvings caving in, photographs faded, no footprints on lonely dusty staircase... wind moans sad, happiness dissipated, heartbreaking to witness ~ so bleak a place! February 1, 2022 Rhyme Scheme: ababbccdcd. Theme: Decay One Stanza with 10 Lines 10 syllables in each line (checked by HMS.com) For D-Forms - Dizain Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France SECOND PLACE Brian Strand Formal Poetry Contest FIRST PLACE

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Valsa George

Date: 3/16/2022 8:56:00 AM

It is sad to look at such houses seen as a specter of decay ! Once those houses must have been teeming with life ! Great penning Mala. Congratulations !

Christuraj Alex

Date: 3/16/2022 6:31:00 AM

Very dismal scene, indeed. Hidden agonies picturesquely painted. A very beautiful poem.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/16/2022 8:04:00 AM

Thank you so much, Christuraj. This is a real story about a house with picturesque surroundings, I lived in, in my childhood. There were some tragic circumstances, and the house fell into decay. It was heartbreaking for me. Still now, I often dream about that house with amazing childhood memories.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 2/15/2022 10:51:00 AM

Heartbreaking Mala! This is an amazing metaphor. It truly is "heartbreaking" to see this process. I am always deeply saddened when I see a magnificent home fall into decay and think about all it has witnessed. Wonderfully written - amazing word pictures! Congratulations on your win dear friend. Sending you much love and many blessings!

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/16/2022 8:02:00 AM

Thank you so much, Sam. This is a real story about a house I lived in, in my childhood. There were some tragic circumstances, and the house fell into decay. It was heartbreaking for me. Still now, I often dream about that house with amazing childhood memories.

Constance La France

Date: 2/14/2022 3:09:00 PM

Mala, congratulations on your Second Place win in my D Form-Dizain contest with your wonderful poem and I love your image ~ Constance

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/14/2022 4:56:00 PM

Thank you, Constance. I am honoured.

Molly Moore

Date: 2/6/2022 4:10:00 PM

While this seems sad, it is very vividly described, and I feel I was there visiting the once charming house and hearing its story. Very nicely written. Molly

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/14/2022 4:55:00 PM

Thank you, Molly. Appreciate your beautiful words.

Anselmo Boles

Date: 2/1/2022 5:48:00 PM

It's melancholic, yet the memories of yore are what's priceless, rust free, and will always sparkle and bestow joy within you. Very well written Malabika!...ab

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/1/2022 5:56:00 PM

Thanks, Dear Poet. Really appreciate your thoughtful comments. Memories are sometimes melancholic, but always precious.